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3.注重对话语言描写的比重 在对人物冲突中的具体的对话描写,要注意在文中段落中的比重 问题,切忌以全对话或大部分对话代替其他细节描写,例如: “In the garden?”Sam asked nervously.“I actually have given all I have to you! So, please do not hurt me or kill me, I beg you!” Jessica also told the thief, “Do you want all our belongings? They are all in our bedroom.I will lead you to get them.Of course, we are rich and we have a lot of money.All will be given to you if you do not hurt or kill us, please, please!” The thief said,“Of course.I will not kill you too! OK.You are so good.I will not kill you if I get this.Give all to me now!” Just at that time, there was a knock at the door and the police came to the door.
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分析:①句中多次重复同一意思“你怎么了”,而②句中则简化了妻 子的表达,对教授的回答也进行了缩减。
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2.对话语言描写要体现真实情感 在对人物进行对话描写时,真情实感是贴切人物的最好表达,尽 量避免过于“高大上”或“假大空”,脱离人物的真实身份。如: ①“You have had a sound sleep!” the old lady shouted.“It’s time to open your eyes! We’re in a risky situation and we will have a big deal to make!” ②“What a rich lie!” Nancy thought after Jerry left.“Rich man always tells rich lies.He never took you to any places.And don’t let him charm you.He betrayed us, your beloved father.He cast us out.He cast us out of his big fancy house like we were nothing to him.He did it happily!”