三模作文讲评材料

南通市三模作文讲评材料2015.5.7一、主要问题（一）概括不全面优秀段落：1. In the passage, the author intends to tell us that problems may do good to us by showing theexample of the coral. The coral in challenging areas tends to live well, so do people.（商宇彤）2. According to the passage, the coral facing no challenge dies easily while the coral constantlytested grows healthy, which reflects our life and inspires us to face problems bravely.（二）语法不正确1. It is the same with what have happened in my life.2. It is not your willing but your action to try to address problems that really counts.3. If we fight against problems in a appropriate way, we would become stronger and stronger.4. Some of the problems even have no possibility to solve.5. When we confronted with problems, persistence is what it takes to overcome the problem. （三）卷面不整洁二、高分作文要求1. 覆盖所有内容要点；2. 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇；3. 语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂或较高级词汇所致，具备较强的语言运用能力；4. 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑，完全达到了预期的写作目的。

（一）高级词汇（二）高级句型1. What the passage conveys sets me thinking about my real life. （欧阳琪琪）2. I will try my best to best to do with it if faced with the same problem again. (冒志鹏）3. With June coming, I feel increasingly nervous, which to a great extent influences my study.(王思宇）4. However, it is those problems in my daily life that enables me to think about others and learn torelax. （柯昊）5. Such is the power of difficulties that I become more mature and flexible after overcoming them(王钰钰）6.In that case, not only can I solve the problem but also I can build up a harmonious relationshipwith others.（缪佳敏）练一练：1.________________________________________________________________________________2. ________________________________________________________________________________(三) 有效连接_________________________________________. There is no denying that I always come across challenges as well as difficulties in daily life. For instance, sometimes academic performance doesn’t live up to my expectations so that I feel frustrated and lose heart. _______________, I hate it when my mother keeps me studying and makes complaints.练一练：Polish up the following paragraph:It sets me reflecting on my daily life. I am faced with a lot of problems as well. Firstly, I have difficulty in improving my academic grades. Secondly, I have no idea of getting along with my parents._______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________三、范文赏析Corals on the ocean side are stronger than those on the lagoon side because they go through various challenges, which reflects our life and inspires us to face problems bravely.There is no denying that life is full of challenges. I have a sense of anxiety about study. At times, I have trouble communication with my parents, and at other times there is misunderstanding between my friends and me. Once in a while, I feel it difficult to live my dreams.In face of difficulties, I think, it is our attitudes that matter. We should keep in mind that challenge means not only hardship but also opportunity. Fighting against difficulty will finally make us strong, confident and successful. So, I won’t escape from my problems but try to solve them by improving my learning methods and exchanging ideas with my parents and friends. I am sure I’ll achieve my goal someday.高级词汇：_____________________________________________________________________ 高级句型：_____________________________________________________________________ 连接词：________________________________________________________________________ 四、二次作文_______________________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________。