英语写作训练(公开课)

join a sports club
Friends fun
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注意“四定”
1.定内容。 2.定时态。 记叙文、日志惯用普通过去时； 说明文、通知、布告、介绍等用普通现在时； 计划等用普通未来时。 3.定人称。 用第一人称亲近自然；用第三人称客观真实。 4.定句型、定词语。 应依据内容,先定句型后定词语。
Middle 正文 Ending 结尾
supporting sentences支持句 用例子、实事或数据围绕主题开展叙述、 讨论。
concluding sentence 结论句 对全文总结和概括。
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例1: 利弊型作文——Microblog利与弊 Para1: （综述）with the development of
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例3: 学校 “English center” 是同学们练习英语 场所。这里 “teenager hotline” 天天都能收不 到不少同学咨询电话。作为热线一名志愿者，请你 依据当初统计，首先描述两位同学碰到问题，然后 给一位同学提出详细提议并说明原因。
主要内容: 问题、提议、原因 限制: 描述两位同学问题，给一位同学提提议 关键词: problem、suggestion、reason
写作步骤：
1 审题 2 选材 3 列提要 4 写作 5 复查
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第一步 审题
审题主题是关键。写文章都不能离开主题。假如审 不清主题, 就有可能出现“下笔千言, 离题万里” 情况。
在审清主题基础上, 还需注意要审清文体。 审题不准, 丢关键点, 失分惨重。
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例1: A special gift I’m looking forward to 强调这份“礼品”是“我所期待”, 而非我已拥有一份礼品。 假如慌忙动笔就轻易将文章写成 “My favorite gift”.

Para.2
因为对中国传统艺术非常感兴趣并且受到过良好训练，所以我非常了解中国画。我不仅可以给游客解说画美在哪里，还可以讲述他们背后的故事。
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补充细节：
语言表达：
连词成句：
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traditional Chinese art;
I am deeply interested in traditional Chinese art and I have received a good education in art, so I have a good knowledge of Chinese paintings.
基本得体
基本清楚
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漏掉主要要点
贫乏
错误较多，影响理解
不得体
混乱
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未能传达任何信息，写的内容与要求无关
要点完整；语言准确且多样；结构清晰； 逻辑连贯交际得体书写美观
好作文标准：
好作文的写作步骤 (写作七步法)
审 题体裁时态人称要点
列提纲结构要点关键词
补充细节
语言表达准确地道词汇句式
连词成句+过渡词逻辑连贯流畅连句成篇
(2019 全国1卷)
体裁人称时态 要求
一般现在时
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gallery, art center
应用文（申请信）
第一人称
A Chinese painting exhibition其它相关表达：中国画Chinese paintings, traditional Chinese art, the artworks.
Para.1Para.2Para.3
个人优势+能做的事（具体说明能胜任此工作的理由,3个优势）

People’s opinions are divided on the issue of change
Para 1
• People’s opinions are divided on the issue of change.
• People hold different views on change • People differ in their attitudes towards change • Different people hold different attitudes
towards change.
3.Locate the topic sentence
Para 2
FFrroomm oonnee ppooininttofovfievwie, wpe, oppeleopwlehowahcocepatccehpatngcehsatnhginesk tthhaint k that cchhaannggeess make ththeeirirlifelifme emaneianngifnugl.ful. Firstly, changes create new opportunities, which make us leap forward. A new job, for instance, mighOtmpitreesxeanmptlcehs allenges that push the person to adapt, acquire new knowledge, or add to their skill set. Secondly, a change can represent a break with the past and an old routine which has become boring and predictable. Finally, as well as making life more fun and interesting, new experiences can be good for our physical and mental health. We find that changes can make us experienced and valuable.

2) 描述详细数据变化
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increase/decrease by...
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increase from ... to...
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increase steadily from...
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There was a marked increase
in ...
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There has been a rapid
increase in ...
hand, ...On the other hand, ...
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The rapid growth of ... owes much to...
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lie in
• (2) In recent years, the time students using computers has increased greatly. (2023.6 CET-4)
• 第二段分析引起变化旳原因,主题句一般表达引起这种变化旳 原因有几点.例如:
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(1) There are many factors that have stimulated this huge
place in ...
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From the above table it can be seen that...
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As it is shown in the table,...
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According to the graph, ...
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It is clear from the table that ...
increased 4%.
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总之,挑选有说服力旳数据,主要是首尾两端数字或其增减值.
3. 强调数据间旳关系,突出变化
• 发觉数据旳变化规律,引用了经典数据,还须进一 步强调突出这种变化,使论证更有力.以 "Student Use of Computer"为例,有学生写到:But in 2023, students spent nearly 20 hours per week on the computer. This number was ten times that of 1990 and five times that of 1995. 像这么用倍数或百分 比更能阐明问题,给人留下深刻印象.