公开课高中英语写作

a result of, for the reason that 让步关系： though, although, even if, even though,
in spite of the fact that
递进关系：what’s more, in addition, furthermore
on the one hand …on the other hand, 条件关系：if, unless, as long as, on condition that …
flowers are many buildings of different
styles. A stream runs through our
school and you always see everything
reflected in the water. Our school is
just like a garden.
Topic paragraph Supporting Paragraph 1 Supporting Paragraph 2 Supporting Paragraph 3
Concluding paragraph
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Topic paragraph (Introduction paragraph) General statement
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正确使用有关连接词
时间先后：first, then, later, in the end, eventually,
since then, after a while 转折关系：but, however, on the contrary, nevertheless

2. 他如此害怕以至于站在那儿一动不动。 He was __so__s_ca_r_e_d__th__a_t _ he stood rooted to the spot.
Sentence pattern 2
1. Happy and excited, we sat together to enjoy a big dinner, wishing everyone a
descriptions more vivid.
Use the 4 sentence patterns in a continuation writing.
Lead-in
Divide words related to emotions into four groups.
Group1
①angry
Group2
happy new year.
——B1U3 改
2. Tired but excited, I have been working on this, selecting his favourite
music.
——B1U3改
句型2: 情绪adj.1+情绪adj.2, 主+谓+宾, doing sth.
(感到)...和...,某人做某事1,并做某事2
2. 当大卫终于下定决心继续赛跑时,我被欣慰(relief)和开心 给淹没了。 (2022全国1卷)
_R__e_li_e_f_a__n_d__d_e_l_ig_h__t_f_lo__o_d_e_d__o_v_e_r__m__e_ when David finally became determined to continue the race.
眼睛因难以置信/惊讶/恐惧而睁大,...

People’s opinions are divided on the issue of change
Para 1
• People’s opinions are divided on the issue of change.
• People hold different views on change • People differ in their attitudes towards change • Different people hold different attitudes
towards change.
3.Locate the topic sentence
Para 2
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Tag to tell you that … • I’d like you to … • Would you please …? • I wonder if you can …? •…
必要的连接词
表示递进：besides, as well, in addition 表示比较：just like, in the same way,
Yours, Li Hua
Ⅳ. post-writing
Revise your compositions in pairs. Then, make evaluations for him or her.
写作过程评价标准表
注意：达到8至10项标准为优秀，6至8项为良好；4 至6项为合格；4以下为需努力。
Task 1: person(人称) tense （时态）
Person: The first person Tense: The present and the future tense
Task 2: Decide the structure
Beginning
Dear Peter,
How are you doing?
Please write down the letter in 15 minutes. You can use the following structure.
Dear Peter, How are you doing?
I’m writing to tell you that________________ ___________, and__________________________.
welcome
Writing
Ⅰ. Discussion

英语写作训练
The essay
What makes a good essay?
A good essay is usually made up of a topic paragraph, some supporting paragraphs and a concluding paragraph.
Topic paragraph
general statement
To many students, school life is boring and tiring. However, I find my school life meaningful and colourful.
topic statement
The paragraph
为了丰富同学们的课外生活，你校英语协会将举办 音乐周活动，其中一项活动为征文比赛。请你根据以下 提示The benefits of listening to music为题写一篇英 语短文参加征文活动：
1.听音乐有助于减轻压力； 2.听音乐能消除烦恼，有助睡眠； 3.听音乐给人灵感，培养创造力。 注意： 1.词数100左右； 2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 参考词汇：灵感inspiration
典型病例
1.单词拼写问题 2.名词的单复数问题 3. 主谓一致问题 4.时态和语态问题 5.代词(主格、宾格)问题
6.Chinglish现象
A Sample Writing(范文欣赏) The benefits of listening to music A large number of people like listening to music.Listening to music is beneficial to us in many ways. To begin with, since stress is the cause of many illnesses, we can reduce the risk of getting these diseases by listening to music that we like.Secondly, listening to music is an effective way to remove worry and it is also helpful to a good night's sleep.In addition, listening to music can provide us with inspiration and help develop our creativity, which will play an important role in our future success. In general, listening to music will make us live better.

I sincerely hope I can fix another time for a trip organized by your agency.
Dear Sir or Madam, I am li Hua, an exchange student in New Zealand.
Last week, I booked a holiday to Australia for 8 days in your agency. But now I am sorry to tell you that I have to cancel my booking. (写作目的)
I will have an important exam on Monday, which I can’t afford to miss.
Expand sentences扩展句子
Beijing is a famous historic city.
Beijing is a famous historic city, _w_h_ic_h__h_as__a_l_o_n_g_h_i_st_o_r_y_o_f_m_o. re
1.I would like to do a part-time job， which _________________.
2. Class 106 is a big family, which ____________________.
3.President Xi recently advised young people not to stay up late， which _____________________. 4.I would like to do voluntary work， which _________________.

要点1: Shyness is becoming more and more common, and scientists have some interesting ideas about why people are shy
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This may be why Israelis worry less about failure and are less shy.
Para 5
阅读下面短文，根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。
Are you shy① ? If you are, you are not alone. In fact, close to 50 percent of people are shy. Almost 80 percent of people feel shy at some point in their lives. These days, shyness is becoming more and more common. Nowp, hsceiennotismtseanreotnrying to understand
over one.
your
suggestion
写作思路解读
Para. 1 Are you shy? If you are, you are not alone. In fact, close to 50 percent of people are shy. Almost 80 percent of people feel shy at some point in their lives. These days, shyness is becoming more and more common. Now, scientists are trying to understand shyness. They have some interesting ideas about why people are shy.

items ...for you.知道你在为你的家人挑选礼物，我很高兴为你列出了一系列……的礼物。 • Having learnt that our library is planning to buy new books, I’m willing to recommend some
books to you. • 得知我们图书馆准备买新书，我愿意向您推荐一些书。 • I’m more than glad/pleased/delighted to learn that you are going to Beijing, and I’d like to
• Dear Mr. Wang, • ___________________________________________________________________________
___________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________

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句子1 翻译
句1：学生会将要举办一次英语演讲比赛。目的： 增长环保知识和提高英语口语。主题：“保护环 境, 节约能源”。
The Students’ Union is going to organize an English-speaking contest to increase our knowledge about the environment and iTmhperothveem适更oue当加riss调顺:p“o整畅PkreonteEcnt goluisrhe.nvironment and save our energy”.
英语作文写作 What makes
a good essay?
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基础写作中存在的主要问题及分析
1. 话题词汇、短语错误 积累少
2. 词汇、短语、句型贫乏
3. 句子语法错误
语法不扎实
4. 连贯性差
篇章意识不足
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考场作文TIPS
1.取悦评卷人: 有清晰的整体脉络, 有自然的段间衔接. 经典的用词用句, 有整齐美观的书写. 2.经典的用句： 感叹句，倒装、强调、虚拟、省略句、定 语从句，名词性从句，名人名言。
学生会 _T_h_e_S_t_u_d_e_n_ts’ Union
参加 __ta_k_e_p_a_r_t_in_/_p_a_r_ti_cipate in
保护 _p_r_o_te_c_t_(v_t_) protection(n)
环境 _e_n_v_ir_o_n_m__en_t__(n_)_e_n_v_ir_o_n_m_e_n_t_a_l _(_a_dj)
中文没有主语 时：要补充主 语再翻译。
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句子4、5 翻译
句4： 奖项：3个一等奖, 6个二等奖和12个三等奖。