单老师高中英语写作指导课件

Standing under the big tree, they were waiting for the President.
II. 巧用连接词，写出规范的并列句： 如：他给我很多钱，我不要。
He gave me a lot of money but I refused.
如：我刚走到拐角处，就见到你了。 I was just walking down the street corner when I saw you.
二、感知典型范例
——篇章层面1
多卷 面 层不 次整 不洁 清 得涂 改 分较 多 语 言 错 误 ; ; ; ; 11
二、感知典型范例
——篇章层面2
任字 何数 信不 息够 ，或 不未 得能 分传 。达 读 者
书写对比鲜明
——篇章层面3
三、阅卷老师忠告
1.网上阅卷对卷面要求提高。 阅卷教师看电脑屏评分，屏幕上视觉比纸上印象 更突出，每行高度约为直线格的2/3的作文视觉效果 最佳，此类作文错误少并用有效连接成分就能高分。 2.中等水平学生容易成为最吃亏学生群。 高考阅卷特点，决定了阅卷时间短、速度快、赋 分中庸。两极的考生优劣分明，容易赋分，而中等 学生，如果出现书写潦草或低级错误容易出现得分 趋低情况，成为最吃亏的一个群体。 3.书面表达是提高平均分最大的潜力股。 平均分：15分 峰值：17—19分 提升空间巨大
说明：作文要达到及格线（18分）以上，必须要点全。也就是说，如果缺要点最 多只能得17分。但又同时规定，对于语言表达特别好的作文可以突破这个限制， 划入良好档，但最多不得超过22分。关于时态，每出现一处时态错误，均以大错 论处。
一、弄清一个概念
1. 优秀英语作文的标准是什么？
下 档（0—17分） 四 ．较差（13---17） 能够写出基本要点，行文不连贯，语言错误较多，半数句子基本正确 五．差(6---12) 能够写出部分要点，能够写出部分与内容相关的可读句。 六．很差（0----5） 只能写出与内容相关的词语，没有有效信息，抄写其他文章或只写出部分 单词。 补充说明：
书面 表达
抓 扩 连
改
1.学会使用规范的英语句子 “规范的英语句子”就是我们经常讲 的三种句子：
A)Simple sentence(简单句): Hearing the news, he was happy. B) Compound sentence A（并列句）: He gave me a book but I forgot to bring it back home. C) Compound sentence B（复合句）: What he is doing has nothing to do with me.
三、将简单句改为强调句
1. Smoking did great harm to his health. It was smoking that did great harm to his health. 2. Our money is earned through hard work by our parents. It is through hard work that our money is earned by our parents. 3. He went there yesterday. He did go there yesterday.
1. 关于大错小错问题： 小错：单词拼写，冠词，大小写，标点符号错误。 大错：搭配错误，词语用错，（介词，名词，动词，形容词副词，主谓一致，非谓 语动词，句式结构） 2. 字数少于120，减去2分。 3. 书写差，减去2分，如影响交际，将分数降低一个档次。
总结：什么样的作文是一篇好作文
• • • • 无遗漏信息点，即要点全面 篇章条理清晰：分段和过渡词 句式复杂多样 地道的高级词汇和恰当的词组
接下来，我们具体感知一下优秀作文的要素。
二、感知典型范例
——词汇层面1
• adj. 聪明的、脑筋好的
• clever •→ wise •→ smart •→ bright •→ intelligent
二、感知典型范例
——词汇层面2
•adj.令人惊奇的 • surprising •→amazing •→astonishing
2、灵活运用九种句式
有意识的将下列句式结构运用到作文中去， 可以迅速地让我们的作文靓起来。重要的是 我们要学会如何灵活的变通、巧妙地运用到 考试作文中去。
一、主动句与被动句的互换。
1. People grow rice in the south of China. → Rice is grown in the south of China. 2. They have printed one and a half million copies of the dictionary since 1986. → One and a half million copies of the dictionary have been printed since 1986.
This village is very small， which has nearly 100 families and about 500 people. It used to be very poor. However, it has changed a lot since 1978 . People here are leading a richer and happier life than before. Now it is taking on a new look.
(连句成文)
Words/phrases Sentences
4. Ensure the fluency (添加过渡，确保 连贯） passage Conjunctions/ conjunctive adverbs
passage
5. Error correcting ( 查错改错)
四、明确写作步骤
审 抄
二、将陈述句改为倒装句。
1. I could hardly understand the importance of English at that time. Hardly could I understand the importance of English at that time. 2. We did not realize our mistakes until at that time. Not until at that time did we realize our mistakes.
二、感知典型范例
——段落层面1
This village is very small. It has nearly 100 families and about 500 people. It used to be very poor. It has changed a lot since 1978 . People here are richer than before. Now it is taking on a new look.
III. 用好从句和引导词写出规范的复合句：
1) 名词性从句 如：老师生气。原因：王力迟到。 That Wang Li came late to school made the teacher very angry. 2) 定语从句 如：中国,地处亚洲东部；特点：地大物博、人口 众多。 China, which lies in the east of Asia, is a great country with a large area and population as well as rich natural resources. 3) 状语从句 如：雷锋还活在我们心中，我深受感动。 I was deeply moved by this, because I know Lei Feng is still living in our hearts.
高考英语书面表达特训
单俊刚
2010.12.12
一、弄清一个概念
1. 优秀英语作文的标准是什么？
极优档（30分）（很少） 上 档（18---29分） 一．优秀（26—29） 要点全面，紧扣主题，观点表达充分，能有效使用连接成分，具备较强 的书面表达能力。语言小错（拼写，标点）少于四个，不能有一处大错。 二．良好（22---25） 要点全面紧扣主题，观点表达较充分，语言有少量错误，（大错不超过 三个。）但基本不影响意思表达。 三．一般（18—21） 要点全面，紧扣主题。语言表达基本充分，语言错误影响部分意思的表 达，但多数句子基本正确。
二、感知典型范例
——句型层面2
• 令她吃惊的是，小女孩知道这么多事情。 1. He is surprised that the little girl knows so many things. 2. To his surprise , the little girl knows so many things. 3. What surprises him is that the little girl knows so many things.
二、感知wenku.baidu.com型范例
——句型层面1
• 他昨天下午来的。
1. He came here yesterday afternoon. 2. He didn’t come here until yesterday afternoon. 3. Not until yesterday afternoon did he come here. 4. It was yesterday afternoon that he came here.
如：李飞, 男，10岁，棕色短发，穿白色茄克。
Li Fei is a ten-year-old boy with short brown hair and in a white jacket.
3)借助介词短语做状语 如：有了Tom的帮助，我们很快就找到 了他们的村子。 With the help of Tom, we soon found their village. 4)借助非谓语动词短语做定语或状语 如：他们站在大树下，等待着总统的到来。 They were standing under the big tree, waiting for the president.
二、感知典型范例
——段落层面2
I think, for us children, we should often go home and stay together with our parents though we are busy. Our society should organize all kinds of activities for the seniors to help them live happily. We can build a harmonious society only when all of us care for the aged. As far as I am concerned, for us children, we should often go home and stay together with our parents however busy we are. What’s more, our society should organize all kinds of activities for the seniors to help them live a happy life. Only when all of us care for the aged can we build a harmonious society
Here are 3 ways to make sentences: I.巧妙运用短语，写出规范的简单句： 1)借助名词短语做同位语
如：李立，男，19岁，1991年生；籍贯： 广东。 Li Li, a boy of 19, was born in Guangdong in 1991. 2)借助介词短语做定语
四、明确写作步骤
1. Cross-question(审题) ※ Main idea ※ Style ※ Verb tense ※ Person
2. Seize the major points /key words (抓要点)figure out the outline(提纲)
3. Sentences connection