【高三寒假 2020 线上授课】英语读后续写指导(三)

高考英语读后续写指导之三步法、四策略、五注意“三步法”搞定读后续写“三步法”是指审题、构思和润色。

这里以2020年高考浙江卷的读后续写为例，谈谈“三步法”的运用。

阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

（注：根据全国卷读后续写的特点，删除了原题中的划线词及续写要求）One fall，my wife Elli and I had a single goal：to photograph polar bears. We were staying at a research camp outside“ the polar bear capital of the world”—the town of Churchill in Manitoba，Canada.Taking pictures of polar bears is amazing but also dangerous. Polar bears—like all wild animals—should be photographed from a safe distance. When I’m face to face with a polar bear，I like it to be through a camera with a telephoto lens. But sometimes，that is easier said than done. This was one of those times.As Elli and I cooked dinner，a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby lake sniffed，and smelled our garlic bread.The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp，which was surrounded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the wire. He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts.Terrified，Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew. We yelled at the bear，hit pots hard，and fired blank shotgun shells into the air. Sometimes loud noises like these will scare bears off. Not this polar bear though—he just kept trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws（爪子）.I radioed the camp manager for help. He told me a helicopter was on its way，but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived. Making the best of this close encounter（相遇），I took some pictures of the bear.Elli and I feared the fence wouldn’t last through 30 more minutes of the bears punishment. The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray. The spray burns the bears eyes，but doesn't hurt them. So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and，through thefence，sprayed him in the face. With an angry roar（吼叫），the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes.注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。

2020年全国三卷高考作文英语读后续写Title: A Continuation of the 2020 National College Entrance Examination EssayAs I sat down at my desk to continue my English exam, the words of the prompt echoed in my mind: "In the face of challenges, it is easy to feel overwhelmed and discouraged. However, it is during these moments that we truly discover our strength and resilience. Write a continuation of this story, exploring how the character overcomes their challenges and grows stronger as a result."Taking a deep breath, I began to envision the character's journey ahead. With determination in their heart and a fire in their eyes, they faced the obstacles before them with unwavering courage.The character, named Sarah, found herself at a crossroads in her life. Having just lost her job and facing financial difficulties, she felt lost and defeated. However, she refused to give up. With the support of her friends and family, she decided to pursue her passion for writing and started a blog to share her experiences with the world.As Sarah poured her heart and soul into her writing, she discovered a newfound sense of purpose and drive. The positive feedback she received from her readers encouraged her to keep going, even when times were tough. Through her writing, she was able to inspire others who were facing similar challenges and show them that they were not alone.As the months went by, Sarah's blog gained popularity and she was offered a book deal to publish her memoir. Despite her initial doubts, she embraced the opportunity with open arms and poured her heart into creating a book that would inspire and uplift others.Through her writing journey, Sarah not only overcame her challenges but also grew stronger and more resilient than ever before. She learned that true strength comes from within and that it is during the darkest moments that we find our brightest light.As the clock ticked on, I finished my continuation of the story with a sense of pride and accomplishment. Just like Sarah, I had faced my own challenges and emerged stronger on the other side. And as I submitted my essay, I knew that no matter what obstacles lie ahead, I would face them head-on with courage anddetermination. For it is in overcoming challenges that we discover our true strength and resilience.。

读后续写素材(动作描写)【素材1】The Eagles’ captain knocked the ball to the ground with his hand,and then kicked it and scored.The referee blew the whistle;the match was over and the Eagles had won.老鹰队的队长用手把球撞倒在地,然后踢了一脚,得分了。

裁判吹响了哨子,比赛结束了,老鹰队赢了。

【素材2】Hearing the familiar voice,Mary stopped her pace.She turned around,and staggered forward a few steps.She found it was her elder brother.So excited,she jumped up and threw her arms around the man’s neck.She buried her face in his shoulder and sobbed for a few moments.Then she said in a loud and excited voice.听到熟悉的声音,玛丽停下了脚步。

她转过身来,摇摇晃晃地向前走了几步。

她发现那是她哥哥。

她非常兴奋,跳起来,双臂搂住了那个男人的脖子。

她把脸埋在他的肩膀上,抽泣了一会儿。

然后她激动地大声说。

【素材3】Jack enjoyed watching his lure dance in the water. Holding his breath, he was waiting for a bite patiently.All of a sudden, he felt the pole moving.He quickly dragged the pole with all his might.The moment he saw the big fish, he was wild with joy.杰克喜欢看他的鱼饵在水里跳舞。

读后续写高分作文的写作方法指导（以衡水中学四月联考英语作文为例）2020江苏省丰县中学上课讲义正文指导版本一：But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. The ceiling of thick branches shut out the sky and covered the path in darkness. Jane looked around blankly, a shiver of alarm going through her. Soon the full moon rose, large, round and clear, shining in the deep blue. “Why not pick stones from the stream and make them in the form of SOS?” cried Jane excitedly, determined to save herself independently. Having finished it, she felt so exhausted and slept beside the stones. Tomorrow will be another day.It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Birds were chirping, the branches swaying to the rhythm of the wind, and the leaves fluttering like graceful butterflies. A ray of hope rose naturally in her heart. Suddenly, the buzzing of the helicopter came overhead again. It did saw her waving yellow blouse and most important the SOS. Upon its landing, so thrilled was she that she threw herself at Tom and hugged him tightly, tears of joy welling up in their eyes.“I miss you so much. Have you found the spot?”“Yes, in our heart.”版本二：But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. The trees cracked and groaned in the dark. A thrill of alarm came through Jane. Eventually, she determined on spotting an open area, awaiting another helicopter. She stumbled her way through the horrible forests and climbed to a high place. No time to waste. After she flagged her yellow blouse, Jane sank to the ground, anguished and defeated. Gazing at the sky, Jane recalled Tom and tears blurred her eyes. Terrified as she was, she fell fast asleep in the wild.It was daybreak when Jane woke up. And, as luck would have it, a helicopter just came by! Jane yelled and skipped, waving her yellow blouse. To her great joy, the helicopter noticed her and landed. What astounded her most was that it was Tom who sat in the helicopter! Out rushed Tom. A huge smile spread across Jane's face and the couple hugged tightly for a long time. It was the narrow escape that made Jane perceive that love was priceless. Over the next years, a change came over the couple. Reasoned discussion replaced fierce arguments and politeness replaced contrariness. They treasured the life and love more.结论是：1.首先要找到conflict在哪里，然后最多五句话说清楚solution。

2020高中英语新高考原创模拟作文练习一My Mom Only Had One Eye1 M y mom only had one eye. I hated her. She was such an embarrassment.2She ran a small shop at a flea market and collected old clothes and some other things to sell for the money we needed. Once during elementary school, it was field day, and my mom came. I was so embarrassed and wondered how could she do this to me? I threw her a hateful look and ran out. The ne xt day at school, my schoolmates asked me, “Your mom only has one eye?!” and taunted me.3 I was so angry with my mom and wished that she would just disappear from this world. So I said to my mom, “Why don’t you have the other eye?!If you’re only gonna ma ke me a laughingstock!” My mom did not respond, I guess I felt a little bad, but at the same time, I felt so good to have had said what I wanted to say. Maybe it was because my mom hadn’t punished me, I didn’t think that I had hurt her feelings very badly.4 For the words I had said to her earlier, there was something pinching at me in the corner of my heart. Even so, I hated my one-eyed mom and our desperate poverty. I told myself that I would become successful in the near future, so I studied very hard. Later I got accepted by the Seoul University, I left my mother and came to Seoul to study. Then I got married there.5 I bought a house of my own. Then I had kids, too. Now I am living happily as a successful man. I enjoy the life in Seoul because it’s a place that doesn’t remind me of my mom and my past. This kind of happiness was getting bigger and bigger, until one day someone knocked at my door. It was my mom! And still with her one eye! It felt as if the whole sky was falling apart on me. My little girl ran away, scared of my mom’s eye.6 I screamed at her, “Who are you? I don’t know you! How dare you come to my house and scare my daughter!” To this, my mom quietly answered, “Oh, I’m so sorry. I may have gotten the wrong address,” and she disappeared out of sight.Notes:1 embarrassment 难堪，窘迫。

2020高中英语新高考读后续写的升华：删繁就简三秋树，领异标新二月花引言我在近日提出读后续写的两个概念。

读后续写的内容可以分为：Be a story; Beyond a story.所谓Be a story,就是把故事说完整即可，不一定要突出一定的道理，类似于情景剧《老友记》，娱乐一下；而Beyond a story是基于一定的主旨（theme)去挖掘人物的内心情感，所有情节的拓展都是服务于主旨。

从浙江的历年读后续写材料和提供的范文看，文章并没有突出一定的主旨，纯粹的Be a story。

譬如2016年的妻子赌气和丈夫旅游中分开，然后迷路。

续写也是最后两人又和好。

包括今年的儿子上学，父母给家里的狗又添了一个伙伴，然后儿子回家。

这里面的故事就是单纯地围绕人物线展开，把故事讲完了，就结束了。

我认为无论是be a story还是beyond a story，只要把人物形象刻画出来了，并且续写部分的想象合情合理，都是达到了高考的写作要求。

但有人说，beyond a story对学生来说，太难了。

其实这就误解了我的意思。

就具体写而言，要想写好，都不容易。

甚至be a story对学生的遣词造句要求更高。

因为你完全靠情节胜出，就要在用词上卯足劲，否则这篇文章就干巴巴的。

不仅仅没有思想，而且语言平庸，味同嚼蜡。

而beyond a story，你虽然语言平庸一点，但是你的思想非常动人，这就弥补了语言表达的匮乏。

以浙江作文题为例材料大致是：丈夫和妻子去旅游，来到森林里，二人意见不合，妻子赌气跑开了。

然后突然发现迷路了。

此时看到头上的飞机，估计是找她，但无法让它看到。

续写部分的范文是：天黑了，妻子找了写果实吃了后睡去；天亮，又和丈夫重逢。

我的想法：这几年的续写材料说实话，不知道是不是命题人觉得学生水平有限，选材都没有一定的思想深度，即使和完形填空比都差一截。

作为考生，如果要从思想上拔高，就要如此考虑，由于文章主要写妻子的活动，人物此时就一个：妻子。

2020 高中英语新高考读后续写的升华：删繁就简三秋树，领异标新二月花引言我在近日提出读后续写的两个概念。

读后续写的内容可以分为：Be a story; Beyond a story.所谓Be a story, 就是把故事说完整即可，不一定要突出一定的道理，类似于情景剧《老友记》，娱乐一下；而Beyond a story 是基于一定的主旨（theme）去挖掘人物的内心情感，所有情节的拓展都是服务于主旨。

从浙江的历年读后续写材料和提供的范文看，文章并没有突出一定的主旨，纯粹的Be a story 。

譬如2016 年的妻子赌气和丈夫旅游中分开，然后迷路。

续写也是最后两人又和好。

包括今年的儿子上学，父母给家里的狗又添了一个伙伴，然后儿子回家。

这里面的故事就是单纯地围绕人物线展开，把故事讲完了，就结束了。

我认为无论是be a story 还是beyond a story ，只要把人物形象刻画出来了，并且续写部分的想象合情合理，都是达到了高考的写作要求。

但有人说，beyond a story 对学生来说，太难了。

其实这就误解了我的意思。

就具体写而言，要想写好，都不容易。

甚至be a story 对学生的遣词造句要求更高。

因为你完全靠情节胜出，就要在用词上卯足劲，否则这篇文章就干巴巴的。

不仅仅没有思想，而且语言平庸，味同嚼蜡。

而beyond a story ，你虽然语言平庸一点，但是你的思想非常动人，这就弥补了语言表达的匮乏。

以浙江作文题为例材料大致是：丈夫和妻子去旅游，来到森林里，二人意见不合，妻子赌气跑开了。

然后突然发现迷路了。

此时看到头上的飞机，估计是找她，但无法让它看到。

续写部分的范文是：天黑了，妻子找了写果实吃了后睡去；天亮，又和丈夫重逢。

我的想法：这几年的续写材料说实话，不知道是不是命题人觉得学生水平有限，选材都没有一定的思想深度，即使和完形填空比都差一截。

作为考生，如果要从思想上拔高，就要如此考虑，由于文章主要写妻子的活动，人物此时就一个：妻子。

2020高中英语新高考原创模拟作文练习一My Mom Only Had One Eye1 M y mom only had one eye. I hated her. She was such an embarrassment.2She ran a small shop at a flea market and collected old clothes and some other things to sell for the money we needed. Once during elementary school, it was field day, and my mom came. I was so embarrassed and wondered how could she do this to me? I threw her a hateful look and ran out. The ne xt day at school, my schoolmates asked me, “Your mom only has one eye?!” and taunted me.3 I was so angry with my mom and wished that she would just disappear from this world. So I said to my mom, “Why don’t you have the other eye?!If you’re only gonna ma ke me a laughingstock!” My mom did not respond, I guess I felt a little bad, but at the same time, I felt so good to have had said what I wanted to say. Maybe it was because my mom hadn’t punished me, I didn’t think that I had hurt her feelings very badly.4 For the words I had said to her earlier, there was something pinching at me in the corner of my heart. Even so, I hated my one-eyed mom and our desperate poverty. I told myself that I would become successful in the near future, so I studied very hard. Later I got accepted by the Seoul University, I left my mother and came to Seoul to study. Then I got married there.5 I bought a house of my own. Then I had kids, too. Now I am living happily as a successful man. I enjoy the life in Seoul because it’s a place that doesn’t remind me of my mom and my past. This kind of happiness was getting bigger and bigger, until one day someone knocked at my door. It was my mom! And still with her one eye! It felt as if the whole sky was falling apart on me. My little girl ran away, scared of my mom’s eye.6 I screamed at her, “Who are you? I don’t know you! How dare you come to my house and scare my daughter!” To this, my mom quietly answered, “Oh, I’m so sorry. I may have gotten the wrong address,” and she disappeared out of sight.Notes:1 embarrassment 难堪，窘迫。