作文中常见的语病

1. TV now plays and important role in our daily life, Because we think it extremely important.

书写错误、逻辑谬误 TV now plays an important role in our daily life, because it provides us with messages necessary to us.

2. Although an opportunity is rare, but we must be ready to seize it.

逻辑冗余、主干搭配不当 Although opportunities are rare, we must be ready to seize them. Opportunities are rare, but we must be ready to seize them.

3. With a rise in the number of cars and buses, traffic in Shanghai has become more and more crowded. 主干搭配不当 With a rise in the number of cars and buses, traffic in Shanghai has become heavier. With a rise in the number of cars and buses, Shanghai has become more and more crowded.

4. Each of us may take a part-time job to help support ourselves, but if you spend too much time on it, your study will be affected.

指代不一致 Each of us may take a part-time job to help support himself, but if he spends too much time on it, his academic performance may be affected.

5. There are many people complain the paper-making mill pollute our fresh water can by people use.

成分冗余 There are many people who complain the paper-making mill polluting our fresh water used by people.

6. At the age of six, my father began to give me English lessons.

逻辑主语前后不一致 At the age of six, I was taught English by my father.

7. Before submitting any written work, careful proofreading must be done.

逻辑主语前后不一致 Before submitting any written work, one must do careful proofreading.

8. The computer like TV, it has both advantages and disadvantages.

词性误用 Like computer, TV has both advantages and disadvantages. 9. We naturally assumed that they had arrived there. They left several hours ago.

句间逻辑缺失 We naturally assumed that they had arrived there, for they left several hours ago.

10. When demand for goods was shrinking. Firms would close down or lay off workers.

句间逻辑谬误 Where demand for goods was shrinking, firms would close down or lay off workers.

11. You have had the disease, you are immune to it for the rest of your life.

句间逻辑缺失 Once you have had the disease, you are immune to it for the rest of your life. 12. Bill yelled at the howling dog in his underwear. 修饰成分造成歧义 In his underwear, Bill yelled at the howling dog.

13. The football game was played in our stadium that was full of excitement.

修饰成分造成歧义 The football game that was full of excitement was played in our stadium.

14. However, everything has its black side. 选词搭配不当 However, there are two sides to everything \ everything has its drawbacks \ everything has its pros

and cons. 或 However, everything has its dark\ negative side. 15. My level of English has thus been improved. 主谓搭配不当 My English has thus been improved.

16. People now have condition to eat good things. 汉式英语 People can now afford a better diet. People now can afford nutritious food.

17. A college student improving his character is good to his family, himself, and the whole society.

主干搭配不当 A college student’s improving his character is good for himself, his family and …

18. A good reader can read beyond the lines. A good reader can see ideas implied through the words. He can bridge the gap between the obvious and the suggested. He can obtain much more information.

句式零散，需要改变成分 建议一 A good reader can read beyond the lines and see ideas implied through the words by bridging the gap between the obvious and the suggested, thus obtaining much more information.

建议二 A good reader is one who can read beyond the lines, seeing ideas implied through the words, and one who can bridge the gap between the obvious and the suggested, thus obtaining much more information.

以下皆为土鳖且汉式的英语，上世纪的用于，扔了吧 19. TV can widen our eyes. 20. Young people are now living in sugar water. 21. We should put our heart into the study. 22. In a society where men are heavy and women are light, women cannot enjoy full equality.

23. People set off firecrackers to congratulate the red and white happy things.

24. We should advocate five talks and four beauties.