顾家北手把手教你雅思写作公开课讲义
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主体段首段
• 句4： Life skills are very important and by doing voluntary work, students can learn how to communicate with others and work in a team but also how to manage their time and improve their organisational skills.句5： Nowadays, unfortunately, teenagers do not have many afterschool activities.句6： After-school clubs are no longer that popular and students mostly go home and sit in front of the TV, browse internet or play video games.
标准4： grammatical range and accuracy (词汇的广度和准确度)
• 语法错误 • 句型
坑爹1：
• 开头段竟然没有背景句？！
• On the other hand, citizens should not rely completely on the state funding on medical and learning expense, as the government needs to cover other parts of social welfare.
顾家北手把手教你雅思写作——公 益讲座
剑9第二套8分范文Fra bibliotek• 题目： • Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to young children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?
开头段
• 句1： It has been suggested that high school students should be involved in unpaid community services as a compulsory part of high school programmes.句2： Most of the colleges are already providing opportunities to gain work experience, however these are not compulsory.句3： In my opinion, sending students to work in community services is a good idea as it can provide them with many lots of valuable skills.
坑爹9：
• 好的文章一定要有大词 • 结尾一定要提出建议
标准1： Task response （任务完成）
• 扣题 • 题目关键词
标准2：coherence and cohesion （连贯性和紧凑性）
• 连接词 • 代词
标准3：lexical resource （词汇量）
• 词伙 • 中国式英文
坑爹6 & 7 & 8：
• “to what extent do you agree or disagree”的 题目一定要两边论述。 • 句子复杂性很重要。要获得7分，必定要用 强调句、倒装等结构，还有虚拟语气 • 想观点要思考对社会和国家的好处。
结尾
• In conclusion, I think this is a very good idea, and I hope this programme will be put into action for high schools/ colleges shortly.
坑爹2 & 3：
• 段落中心句要非常简短 ？！
• 文章一定要不断换对象词？！
主体段第二段
• 句7： By giving them compulsory work activities with charitable or community organisations, they will be encouraged to do something creative.句8： Skills gained through compulsory work will not only be an asset on their CV but also increase their employability.句9： Students will also gain more respect towards work and money as they will realise that it is not that easy to earn them and hopefully will learn to spend them in a more practical way.
坑爹4 & 5：
• 写作文应该要有“firstly”，“besides”这 样的连接词。 • 好的文章一定要举例。
主体段第三段
• 句10： Healthy life balance and exercise are strongly promoted by the NHS, and therefore any kind of spare time charity work will prevent from sitting and doing nothing.句11： It could also possibly reduce the crime level in the high school age group.句12： If students have activities to do, they will not be bored and come up with silly ideas which can be dangerous for them or their surroundings.
