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剑桥雅思真题7—写作(Test 2 附高分范文)Writing Task 1You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.Write at least 150 words.参考范文1:The graph illustrates changes in the amount of beef, lamb, chicken and fish consumed in a particular European country between 1979 and 2004.In 1979, beef consumption reached the highest point, with about 225 grams consumed per person per week. Lamb and chicken were consumed in similar quantities about 150 grams. However, fish consumption hit a low of 50 grams.Yet, the consumption of beef and lamb dropped sharply to nearly 100 grams respectively. There had been a stable pattern at 50 grams in the consumption of fish.In contrast, the consumption of chicken showed an upward trend,transcending that of lamb in 1980 and that of beef in 1989. Then this figure rose to a peak of about 250 in 2004.Overall, the line graph clearly showed the consumption of chicken rised rapidly while other foods decreased during this period.参考范文2:The graph illustrates changes in the amounts of beef, lamb, chicken and fish consumed in a particular European country between 1979 and 2004.In 1979 beef was by far the most popular of these foods, with about 225 grams consumed per person per week. Lamb and chicken were eaten in similar quantities (around 150 grams), whilemuch less fish was consumed (just over 50 grams). However, during this 25-year period the consumption of beef and lamb fell dramatically to approximately 100 grams and 55 grams respectively. The consumption of fish also declined, but much less significantly to just below 50 grams, so although it remained the least popular food, consumption levels were the most stable. The consumption of chicken, on the other hand, showed an upward trend, overtaking that of lamb in 1980 and that of beef in 1989. By 2004 it had soared to almost 250 grams per person per week.Overall, the graph shows how the consumption of chicken increased dramatically while the popularity of these other foods decreased over the period.参考范文3:The given line graph compares the fish and meat consumptions by the people of a European country from 1979 to 2004.As is presented in the graph, the consumption of chicken increased over the time while meats of different types were more preferred by people in the given European country than the fishes.According to the graph, more than 200 grams of beef was consumed daily by each person initially in 1979. In this year, each person on an average ate 150 grams of chicken and lambs while the consumption was just over 50 grams in this year. Over time people preferred chicken and the consumption kept on increasing and reached to over 250 grams per day by each person. The consumption of beef, lamb decreased over time and finally in 2004 the average consumption of these two meat types decreased to around 100 grams per person in a day. The amount consumed for fish remained almost same throughout the years and slightly decreased over time.In summary, people started consuming more chicken than beef and lamb and the fish consumption remained almost the same.Writing Task 2You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.Write about the following topic:Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.Write at least 250 words.参考范文(Band 7.5):Fixing punishments for each type of crime has been a debatable issue. There are many arguments supporting both views, those for and those against fixed punishments.On the one hand, fixed punishments will have a deterring effect on society. Individuals knowing that they will be subject to a certain punishment if they are convicted with a given crime, will reconsider committing this act in the first place.This deterring effect also leads to social stability and security, through minimizing the number of crime committed.If people knew they would be able to convince the court or the jury of a reason for having committed the crime they are accused of, penal decisions would be largely arbitrary. This wouldresult into criminals getting away with their crimes and into a high level of injustice caused by the subjective approach of different courts.On the other hand, taking the circumstances of a crime and its motivation into consideration is a prerequisite for establishing and ensuring justice and equity.A person killing in self-defense cannot be compared to a serial killer, moving from one victim to the next. In my opinion, an intermediary position between both solutions is the perfect way to establish and ensure justice and equity.There have to be fixed punishments for all crimes. However, criminal laws have to provide for a minimum and a maximum for the punishment and the laws also have to foresee certain cases of exemptions.An example for setting minimum and maximum penalties is Completion Law where a person being held liable of a crime under this law will be convicted to pay a fine, according to the harm caused by the violation and the profit gained by the violator through committing the crime.As for the exemptions, in some countries the law exempts thiefs stealing food during a period of famine taking into consideration the distress and hunger.Also, a person killing in self-defense will be exempted from punishment.考官评语:This is a thoughtful and well-argued response to the task. The candidate examines the opposing views of the topic and gives a clear opinion that is well developed and supported. To reach the highest band a more clearly-signalled conclusion would be needed. The argument is well organised and linking is well managed throughout. The development of the answer is not helped however, by poor control of paragraphing which sometimes confuses the links across different sections. This is a weak feature of the script which limits the overall rating. In contrast, an excellent range of vocabulary is used with a sophisticated level of control and only rare slips. The range of structures is also wide and most sentences are accurate and precise, but there are some errors and omissions. These, however, are only minor and do not affect communication.。
雅思7分写作讲义雅思考试写作金牌教程(6-7.5分)教学方案第一次课一、教学目标:雅思写作概述、基本构成、雅思写作考试与其他考试的类比二、课时陈述:第一次课,2.5小时三、教学重点:议论文体和报告文体的题型四、教学难点:雅思评分标准与其他考试评分标准的异同五、教学亮点:雅思考官阅卷的潜规则六、课堂结构:1、雅思考试介绍2、雅思考试评分标准3、雅思写作话题介绍4、雅思写作题型介绍5、中英两国写作对比 1、雅思考试介绍雅思写作的量分 task1 占三分之一,而task2占三分之二。
Task 1 (以下简称小作文)题型:LINE PIE BAR TABLE DIAGRAM MAP MIXEDTask 2 (以下简称大作文)题型:argumentation report2、雅思考试评分标准孙武子说“知己知彼,百战百胜”.为了更好的对付雅思写作考试,我们起先要了解它的具体评分准则。
Task Response and FulfillmentCoherence and CohesionLexical resourcesGrammatical Range and AccuracyBand 7—good userHas operational command of the language, though with occasional inaccuracies, inappropriacies and misunderstandings in some situations. Generally handles complex language well and understands detailed reasoning.具体要求:Task response: whether all parts of the task are addressed; whether a viewpoint is clearly expressed, developed and supported.Coherence and cohesion: whether the response has a suitable layout and logical ordering of points; correct and appropriate use of connectives. Lexical resources: range and accuracy of vocabulary; the examiner will check the correct forms and the spelling of words used.Grammatical range and accuracy: the range and accuracy of tenses and sentence structures.Task response or fulfillment (完整性)一篇文章必须有一定的架构,议论文通常由“内三合,外三合”所构成。
剑桥雅思真题7—写作(Test 3 附高分范文)Writing Task 1You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.Write at least 150 words.参考范文1:The chart gives information about the percentage change in average house prices in five different cities located in five different countries over 12 year period between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989.According to the chart, during the period from 1990 to 1995 the average prices of houses in three cities decreased significantly by five percent in New York (USA) and about 7.5 percent in both Tokyo (Japan) and London (UK). While the average house prices increased slightly in two cities Madrid(Spain) and Frankfurt(Germany) by about 1.5 percent respectively.As far as the next period (1996-2002) is concerned, it is clear that the average house prices decreased only in Tokyo (Japan) by 5 percent. In contrast the average house prices increased in the rest of cities. In New York it increased consideraply by 5 percent, in Madrid it increased slightly by 4 percent, in Frankfurt it increased by 2 percent.London has the largest increase in the average house price over the 6-year period from 1996-2002 as it increased dramatically by 11 percent.All in all, there are a wide differences in house prices between the five cities which illustrated in this chart. These differences may be a result of the number of population or the number of houses required in a certain city.本文得分6.5。
剑桥雅思7写作解析test4小作文题目:The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000 范文:The charts compare the sources of electricity in Australia and France in the years 1980 and 2000. Between these years electricity production almost doubled, rising from 100 units to 170 in Australia, and from 90 to 180 units in France.In 1980 Australia used coal as the main electricity source (50 units) and the remainder was produced from natural gas, hydro power (each producing 20 units) and oil (which produced only 10 units). By 2000, coal had become the fuel for more than 75% of electricity produced and only hydro continued to be another significant source supplying approximately 20%.In contrast, France used coal as a source for only 25 units of electricity in 1980, which was matched by natural gas. The remaining 40 units were produced largely from oil and nuclear power, with hydro contributing only 5 units. But by 2000 nuclear power, which was not used at all Australia, had developed into the main source, producing almost 75% of electricity, at 126 units, while coal and oil together produced only 50 units. Other sources were no longer significant.Overall, it is clear that by 2000 these two countries relied on different principal fuel sources: Australia relied on coal and France on nuclear power.大作文题目:You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.Write about the following topic:Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledgeand skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer.What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.Write at least 250 words.范文:Today, many students attend university to acquire skills and knowledge that are intended to prepare them for future employment.This trend is understandable. After all, in this era of financial turmoil and massive layoffs,the majority of young people view future job security as one of their most pressing priorities in life.Also, across the world, students, tuition costs are rising each year, despite the tumultuous economic meltdown. These days,it is no exaggeration to say that pursuing higher education is very much like making a major investment; thus,university students and their parents tend to expect reasonable rates of return, which can be, to some extent, quantified by the graduates,starting salaries and benefits.The societal demand is there as well. Being bogged down in stagnancy or recessions,societies are hoping for more productive and more responsive workforces to haul them out of the quagmire.In spite of all these,I wish to point out that merely equipping students with job skills may defeat the very purposeof universities. It is true that higher education should meet the social demand for a more powerful workforce. Yet realistically,it would be hard for university administrators and faculty to identify accurately what technical skills and knowledge will be needed three or four years from now, when most technologies have been updating themselves on a daily basis.What will also be at risk is students’ capacity to innovate as true innovations require thorough understanding of the fundamental theories guiding their predecessors.The main function of a university in this age of crisis,therefore,should be to build core curricula that stress the cultivation of employment skills and at the same time,to provide students with elective courses on theoretical knowledge about their field of study, which can facilitate their grasp of the employment skills and meanwhile ensure their capacity to apply those skills innovatively.。
关于家庭的雅思作文及解析家庭是我们的避风港,关于家庭的话题也是雅思君比较爱考的作文话题,下面小编给大家带来关于家庭的雅思作文及解析。
雅思大作文家庭生活类话题范文--家庭和外界对孩子造成的影响Task:A family has a great influence on children's development, but the outside of home plays a bigger part in children's life. Do you agree or disagree?思路解析:1. 首先,家庭造成的影响不可小觑。
毕竟父母是孩子生命当中的第一个老师,每天陪伴孩子们最长时间。
举例,他们直接教会孩子们基本的生存技能,如语言,做饭,收拾屋子,卫生习惯,以及基本的学术能力,如数学计算,阅读,思考和判断。
2. 然而,其他因素同样有影响力。
举例,在孩子们的学术教育上,学校的老师影响是第一位的。
他们是学生教育的领路人,教会他们各个学科的基础知识,学习方式,以及培养他们对于某些学科的热爱。
3. 媒体同样对孩子们的影响很大。
举例,电视和电影镜头中的暴力内容会扭曲孩子们的价值观,让他们变得富有侵略性,产生对于暴力的崇拜,并且错误地认为采用暴力手段解决问题是合适的。
参考范文:The development of children depends on many factors, including parents, school education, media, peers and so forth. personally, I agree that the family is less influential than other aspects working together, and my reasons would be explored as below.Admittedly, the influence of family on children is very deep, because parents, primary teachers in the life of children, set the first role models for them to learn and imitate, and which would be logged into the impressionable childhood mind and determine basic behaviors and thinking of them. For example, byobserving and learning the daily activities of parents, like speaking, cooking and house cleaning, washing hands before eating, a child can master the language, self-care ability and hygienic habits. Besides, parents also play a key role in developing the intelligence of children. For instance, with day-to-day teaching, communication and storytelling, a parent can help a child to improve cognitive skills like basic mathematic calculation, memorizing, reading, and thinking and judging in a proper way.However, I strongly believe outside-of-home elements make greater contributions to the overall growth of children. Firstly, in terms of academic education, teachers in school have priority over parents. For example, compared with some parent who have low-level or even no education, teachers are professionally educated and trained in formal university, and well-experienced in teaching. That is to say, school teachers are more advantageous and influential, in terms of comprehensively and accurately instructing, explaining and demonstrating common knowledge about laws of nature and universe, theories and formulas of math and physics, and events and people in history. What is more, forming social skills also relies on a school environment where children have opportunities to communicate, play and argue with other peers. This strong interpersonal interaction can make children proficient in real-world socialization.Besides, mass media is another external factor affecting children’s development. For example, violent video on the Internet, TV programs and computer games are very likely to twist social values of the young audience, because children, unlike adults, are lack of abilities to distinguish right from wrong.Therefore, with long-term exposure to ill information, children would be rude, aggressive and self eccentric. As a result, they, more often than not, consider violence as the main or even only way to solve problems, thereby leading to school bullying.In conclusion, when it comes to the importance in influencing children, other aspects like teachers in school and media override the parents, for the reasons that the formers have incomparable effects on the education, social skills and personalities of children.(423 words)雅思大作文范文:家庭关系不紧密社会类:It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they used to be. Give some reasons why this change has happened and suggest how families could be brought closer together. Include any relevant examples from your experience. 家庭关系不紧密的原因和解决策略?相关提问:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television has destroyed communication among friends and 例如子女不回家看望父母family. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. 是否认为电视破坏了家庭和朋友间的交流?老师思路拓展:家庭关系不紧密的原因:1. 生活节奏快,竞争激励,工作学习压力大没有时间和家人分享和交流。
雅思写作高分范文(21篇)雅思写作高分篇1也许是交通问题已经困扰世界各国人民太久了,所以各国政府都纷纷在交通建设和改善方面做出了不小的努力。
但是对于政府花钱建设更多的铁路而不是公路这样的`观点,我本人表示不能完全赞成。
It is perhaps the long-disturbing traffic issue that drives governments all over the globe to make great efforts in establishing or improving theirtraffic system. Nevertheless, I still cannot be enrolled in the camp that claims it is wise to construct railway rather than roads. (45 words)首先,我不得不承认修建铁路在某种程度上是一件利国利民的事情。
毕竟与其他交通方式相比,铁路运输的单位时间运载量最大,陆路运输速度最快。
同时,由于铁路运输依靠强大的运营系统控制其运行,几乎不会造成交通拥堵。
显然,修建铁路是一件有益的事情。
Undoubtedly, the railway construction, in a way, can be deemed as a win-win program for both the country and its citizens. After all, pared with other types of transportation, the transporting load of railage in a unit time is the largest and it is also the fastest approach of conveyance on land. Simultaneously, due to its strikingly strong operating system in running, it can scarcely entail any congestion. Evidently, it is advantageous to implement the plan referred to railway establishment. (80 words)但无论是铁路建设还是公路建设,都要取决于很多综合因素,比如城市发展规模、人口流动范围、地址环境等等。
一、求高手点评雅思“小作文”(剑7 Test2 Task1 )感觉还不错啊~词语和句式较为多变,介词用得也准确,数据抓取得也合理。
表达年份时,可以有多种方式,除了直接写年份的数字,也可以说the year of 2004,the 2004 year等;表示“从图中看出”这个意思,还可以用from the graph,we can see。
xxx is shown(illustated, outlined。
)from the tableit could be easily seen that 。
多背几个,等你一想表达这个意思时,可以随时调用。
总结段一般还是必要的,加上会显得比较完整。
写小作文可以写得很精彩,但是主要还是能把图描述准确,不要每句看起来都是一种结构,总之多背些句式是好的,到最后写起来会得心应手。
二、批改作文剑七 test2 task2"基本完成了任务,5.5分具体点评如下:点评1 Nowadays,a hot and important contraversy /controversy concerning the problem whether the punishments for each type of crimes should be fixed.全句没有谓语,而且whether 后面也不是句子。
三、雅思大作文task 2~~~跪求估分+建议~~ 剑7test2中关于犯罪惩罚标准的Some people asert that there should be fixed punishments for each type ofcrime.asert拼写错误,assertI could give some reasons for it. 这句话是废话,字数够的话就删掉吧if someone feels his/her rights are invaded, there is a long way to go.这句话不妨换用虚拟语气。
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雅思大作文高分范文:艺术重要性雅思大作文高分范文:艺术重要性,今天就给大家带来了雅思大作文高分范文,希望能够帮助到大家,下面小编就和大家分享,来欣赏一下吧。
雅思大作文高分范文:艺术重要吗2018年5月12日场的雅思写作大作文已出,本期的雅思写作题目是大家比较熟悉的政府类话题,讨论艺术的重要性。
题目是:People believe arts like painting and music does not directly improve the quality of life, and therefore they think government’s money should be spent on other things.To what extent do you agree or disagree?作为一道常见的大作文话题,想要得高分也不容易,来看看雅思哥版的高分范文吧:雅思写作大作文范文While some people believe that the government has a duty to provide art to the public, others argue that the government money should be spent on other urgent matters. This essay will examine whether governments should invest money in art. Throughout the ages, men have created beauty through painting, music, sculpture and other artistic expression which are essential to the cultural heritage of human beings. Investing in art often means that many different forms of culture are maintained: songs, literature and traditions etc. They all contribute to the richness and variety of human culture. Besides, art could be an important part of economy. It can stimulate tourism and create chances of employment. Therefore, it is easily understandable when people claim that the government has a duty to offer art to its citizens.However, governments need to balance their spending and spend wisely on art, especially when there are many other important issues. In many countries, a large proportion of people still do not have easy access to education 'and medical care. And in some places, famine and poverty are still national concerns. Considering the fact that the budget of the government is not unlimited and investment in art usually in the form of museums is not a small amount of money, the government should give its priority to some other issues.To conclude, I believe that the government have a responsibility to provide its citizens with art and to make art available to the public and that the proportion ofinvestment in art should be carefully decided as the government is entrusted by its people to improve the quality of life.雅思大作文真题解析:艺术的重要性2018年5月12日场的雅思写作大作文为2012年7月28日的写作原题重现,题目为:Some people think that art (such as painting and music) does not directly improve quality of people's life, so government should spend money on other areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?作为一道比较常见的雅思写作真题,复习过的考鸭在考场上会淡定很多。
雅思真题大作文范例高分范文_年4月_日雅思大作文高分范文原题:People today can shop, work and communicate with others via the Internet.They do not need to do these face-to-face. Is it a positive or negativedevelopment?雅思写作思路解析:A 使用网络(而不是面对面) 去交流和做其他事情B 增加效率C 给生活带来便利A 使用网络(而不是面对面) 去交流和做其他事情B 减少公司运营成本C 利润增加A 使用网络(而不是面对面) 去交流和做其他事情B 人的社会技能下降C 人觉得疏远,家庭和社区不再有团结的感觉这个题目确定A.只是A有点复杂〝使用网络,而不是面对面去交流.购物和工作〞.如果你只写使用网络的好坏处(而没有不断出现面对面交流的字眼),就是跑题.雅思写作高分范文:Nowadays, many daily tasks can be accomplished without us meeting other faceto face. Generally, I tend to believe it leads to many desirable resuits. It is evident that fulfilling some tasks over modern technologies such as theInternet and other computer networks is highly efficient. In the past, ifpeoplehad the need to do shopping, they had to go to the shopping mall; but today, allcan be done with the click of a mouse and the goods will be delivered home, evenat a lower price. Also, we used to need to go to the bank and wait for adesperately long line if we wanted to make a transaction from one bank accountto another: instead, now we may comfortably make use of the self-service bankingat home. Actually, almost all banks and financial organizations arewell-connected to the Internet, which promotes the development of internationaltrade and world economy dramatically.Thus, obviously, the efficiency of life has been improved significantly dueto the technological advances.However, that is not to say that lack of face-to-face communication bringsabout no problems. One of the biggest concerns is safety. With the increasingvirus threats and well-trained hackers, online deals are well e_posed to allkinds of risks and losses, for e_ample, the wide-spread problem of identitytheft. Therefore, when making the most of the desirable changes brought about bytechnology, we should be aware of its potential downsides and find a way tominimize the negative impacts.Overall, there are both favorable and unfavorable effects on individuals andsociety if everyday tasks are performed without the need of seeing each other.But I am quite optimistic about its future, and I think people and countriesalike will benefit from it on a new level soon.雅思真题作文7分范文:网络取代面对面交流原题People today can shop, work and communicate with others via the Internet.They don t need to do these face to face. Is it a positive or negativedevelopment?雅思写作大作文解析与审题连续几周新题后,本周雅思作文回到了旧题模式,重现了_年7月_日的作文题目.本周考题涉及网络的应用.关于网络对我们生活.工作和学习方方面面的影响,是雅思写作考试中的重点,〝有了互联网,我们就可以不(上班,上学,去博物馆,去商店,去旅游......)〞互联网运用的话题是比较常见的写作题,本次题目要求讨论的话题是〝现在人们都用网络来购物.工作.沟通,不再需要面对面交流了〞,因此我们需要围绕〝网络与面对面交流〞来进行讨论.那么,使用网络来取代面对面交流,这到底是好还是坏呢?无疑,这不是一个非此即彼的问题,我们可以做双边讨论,即先讨论网络交流相对于面对面交流的好处(节约时间.节约成本.提高效率),然后讨论网络交流的坏处(误会增多.感情变淡),最后提出结论,在某些情况下网络交流能给我们带来好处,但在很多情况下,面对面交流是不可取代的.雅思写作7分范文We live in an age of electronic communication, and the Internet does help usin a lot of ways. Yet the fact that we have computers and smartphones readily available does not mean that we do not need face-to-face communication anymore.我们生活在电子通信时代,互联网的确在很多方面帮助我们.然而,我们可以随时使用电脑和智能手机这一事实并不意味着我们不再需要面对面的交流.Electronic technology has dramatically changed the ways we shop, workandcommunicate and has brought about a myriad of benefits. From emails to instantmessaging to Skype to social media, the Internet has made our communicationfaster and easier than ever before. Besides, the cost of the Internetcommunication is significantly lower than the traditional means of communicationlike face-to-face meetings. The technology connects us to our online suppliers,colleagues in the workplace, families and friends from all over the globe forjust a small fraction of the cost required of an offline meeting.电子技术极大地改变了我们购物.工作和交流的方式,并带来了无数的好处.从电子邮件到即时通信到Skype到社交媒体,网络让我们的交流比以往任何时候都快速和容易.此外,与传统的面对面交流方式相比,网络通信的成本要低得多.技术将我们与世界各地的在线供应商.工作同事.家人和朋友联系在一起,其费用只是线下见面所需费用的极少一部分.That being said, scientific evidence is mounting that the advent of digitaltechnology is having a detrimental effect on interpersonal relationships.Everything from body language and facial e_pressions to attentiveness andengagement can indicate different thoughts and feelings—each of which can onlybe truly observed through face-to-face communication. So, despite the clearupsides of digital communication, there are circumstances under which there isno substitute for face-to-face communication. Meanwhile, the complete dependenceon the Internet for communication may result in the sense of alienation anddepression which will keep us apart from the rest of the real world.尽管如此,越来越多的科学证据表明,数字技术的出现正在对人际关系产生有害影响.从肢体语言和面部表情到关注度和投入度可以表示不同的想法和感觉,而这些只有通过面对面的交流才能真正地被观察到.所以,尽管数字交流有明显的优势,但在某些情况下,面对面的交流是无法替代的.同时,完全依赖互联网来交流交流可能导致疏远和沮丧的感觉,这将使我们远离现实世界.In conclusion, it is necessary to balance those Internet interactions withface-to-face communication. It is hard to say how far the Internet would go, butface-to-face communication has not yet been and never will be replaced bytechnology.(274 words)总之,必须平衡网络互动和面对面的交流.很难说互联网能走多远,但面对面的交流还没有.也永远不会被科技所取代._年4月_日雅思写作大作文范文In modern world, it’s possible to shop, work and communicate with people viathe Internet and without any face-to-face contact with others.To whate_tent isthis a positive or negative development?雅思写作真题解析本题属于科技类话题.该题也是科技类话题的经典例题之一,讨论科技与人们日常生活和工作的关系.考生在思考论点时可以围绕题目中给出的〝shop〞,〝work〞和〝communication〞这几个层面入手;此外,论点偏向好处更好写一些.paragraph 1 :结合时代背景引入话题且表明自己的观点.paragraph 2: 论述远程办公和交流的好处.(1.节约员工的时间;2.扩大朋友圈和缓解相思之苦)paragraph 3: 论述网络购物的好处.(1. 快速便捷 2. 更多购物选择)paragraph 4: 论述缺乏面对面接触的坏处.(1.缺乏现实交际技能)Paragraph 5: 总结上文论点,强调自己的观点.雅思写作大作文范文In such a digital age, which features the wide available of internettoindividuals, users are able to deal with a bunch of daily tasks online, rangingfrom doing shopping, arranging and completing working projects as well asinteracting with strangers and friends. In my view, this tendency is largelybeneficial for people’s work and life.To commence with, it is conceivable that telecommuting saves time foremployees. Without spending time on the way to and from work, office workershave more disposable time and the fle_ible schedule, in which case, they couldwork the hours they wished and have a better rest. In addition, onlinecommunication enlarges the circle of friends. More specifically, socialnetworking websites is deemed as an effective way to make connections withpeople with similar interests and goals. What’s more, long distancecommunication relieves couples or families from lovesickness and homesickness.Even though living thousands of miles away from hometown, they can stare at thefaces of their beloved and listen to their voice.In terms of online shopping, it has been thought as the indispensable part ofmodern life due to its convenience. Instead of going to malls, the only thingconsumers have to do is viewing the high-definition pictures and click thebutton of payment, the commodities they choose would be delivered at home inseveral days or appointed time. This is especially useful for people working ona tight schedule or in times of inclement weather. Undeniably, customers canpurchase goods all over the world; in consequence, there is no need for them totravel to foreign countries for some fancy dresses or handbags.On the flip side, a lack of face-to-face contact does generate harmfuleffects, among which the most obvious is that the loss of interpersonalskillsin reality. In fact, body language such as eye contact and gestures, and socialpsychology laid emphasis on in real way are invalid and ignored in virtualworld, making people incompetent and unskilled in face-to-face situations. In conclusion, although the dimension of communication would be diminished, Istrongly contend that the increasing popularity of communication via internetbenefits people from all walks of life.雅思真题大作文高分范文。
contact with the outside world. Many people[c1] argue that children should begin learning a foreign language atelementary school, instead of waiting until [c2] they enter secondary school. There are several reasons for this.
Firstly, despite the fact that parents donot want to put too much pressure on their children, they also do not want themto lose at the starting line. This means, if the kids start to learn a foreignlanguage early, their parents are relieved from the thought that their kidswill have to catch up later on, which is true to some extent.
On the other hand, it is scientificallyproved that children tend to learn a language faster before the age of 12. Asfar as I know, my friends who started to learn English when they were six orseven now have a much more satisfactory English level than those who started at12 or 13. So it is wise to have foreign language course in primary schoolcurriculum.
Additionally, learning a foreign languageat an earlier age can lay children a solid foundation for future studying.Rather than just learning a language itself, children
(下面评分项里面的小分意在指出你的优势劣势)
Task response 6.5 分
1. address all parts of the task 7分
首先列举的advantages,然后提出disadvantage,紧接着驳斥了这个disadvantage。
这一步证明了你都懂题目不仅是要让列举利弊还要做出比较
2. present a clear position throughout theresponse. 7分
主体赞成利大于弊,并在说弊的时候有力的反驳了,最后一段明确提出自己的立场。
3. main ideas may be unclear 6分
需要改进的段落
主体第一段你写的是家长觉得孩子不能输在起跑线,但是题目里面说的是专家提出这个观点,把家长和专家混在一起,混淆了题目观点的出发角度。
这里要扣分。
需要保持的段落
主体第二段用你朋友的经历做例子完全可以!只要支持你的论点就行
主体第三段学习一门外语的方法可以应用到其他语言学习上,确实!能看到不同语言的内在联系,很不错!
主体第四段驳斥反方观点并提出一些解决方法
4. conclusions may become repetitive 6分
不要在结论里面把题目照搬一遍
Coherence and cohesion 6.5 分
1. logically organize information and ideas7分
2. present a clear central topic in eachparagragh 7分
我个人比较支持一个段一个点这样能保持段落长度一致同时表意清晰
3. may use cohesive devices mechanically 6分
看下你的主体段落的开头,一下 firstly 一下on the other hand 一下additionally 这几个连接词属于不同类别建议使用同类连词,如果是firstly 那后面就用 secondly thirdly, 如果是要用 on the other hand, 前面搭配使用 on the one hand。
否则给读者的印象是你学过连词但是不太会用。
4. 另外代词的使用不错,this, it, they 都能正确使用
Lexical resources 7分
e a wide range of vocabulary and allowsome flexibility and precision
首段的对题目的paraphrase做的相当不错!
但是末尾段基本属于照抄题目了,很可能不算在字数里面。
建议你学习一下结尾段的写法。
定冠词和不定冠词的使用很好
活用动词 learnlearning teach teaching
形容词副词能正确使用
2. use less common vocabulary well
popularity foundation curriculum satisfactoryextensive
3. use of collocation
Lay a solid foundation, language learningprocess, advanced teaching method, extensive readings.
Grammar 7.5分
e a wide range of structures.
简单句即符合基本主谓宾结构
There are several reasons for this.
宾语从句第一段many people argue that xxx第三段 it is scientifically proved that xxx
长句第二段despite of xxx, xxx/ 第四段rather than xxx, xxx
第五段第二句话用and连接的两个句子中间还有插入语 such as xxx
时间状语从句第三段 my friends who xxxx when they were xxx 第四段 when they enter xxx
2 the majority of sentences are error free
3 make occasional mistakes
第四段 Ratherthan learn a language itself 记得要和后半句的动词形态一致,后面已经是原形learn了,用rather than就得用原形。