英语夹叙夹议类作文学案
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夹叙夹议类作文 夹叙夹议类作文所给材料通常有一定的寓意或能说明一定的道理。一般要求先介绍图画或材料的内容，再根据该现象发表评论或自己的看法。 夹叙夹议类作文并非议论文，不需要深入论证所提出的观点。对故事中涉及到的哲理、寓意、讽刺等，用三两句话概括一下即可。 Step1 作文模板 One day, ______________.1 ____________. ___________. ___________.2 In my opinion, we should_____________. 模板说明： 1. 交代故事发生的时间、地点等 （1） Last night, when I was driving on my way home, I saw a child begging for help in the middle of the road. 昨天晚上，在开车回家的路上，我看见一个小孩在路中间求助。 （2） Not long ago, I had an unforgettable experience. 不久前，我有一次难忘的经历。 （3） About two weeks ago, we had a trip to Jiuzhaigou Nature Park. 大约两个星期前，我们去九寨沟旅行。 2．介绍故事发展常用的句式： （1） To tell the truth, we were very frightened at that moment. 说实话，当时我们很害怕。 （2） After that, the man helped Peter look for his missing ball. 之后，那个人帮彼得找那颗丢失的钢珠。 （3） Before long, the water reached the top of the tree. 不久，水就涨到了树顶。 （4） Hardly had he realized what had happened when the wave swept him away. 他还没意识到发生了什么事就被海浪卷走了。 3．发表议论或看法 （1）I think we should learn to help each other. 我认为我们应该互相帮助。 (2) If everyone saves one drop of water a day, how much will be saved in one year in this world? You do the maths. 假如每人每天节约一滴水，全世界一年能节约多少水呢？你来算算。 (3) It can happen to everyone. What can wa learn from this story/ Sure, for the sake of others and ourselves, we should be careful when we are doing something dangerous. 这可能发生在每个人身上。从这个故事我们能得到什么启示呢？毫无疑问，为了他人以及我们自己，我们今后在做危险事情的时候一定要小心。 （4）Personally, I think that--- 我个人认为--- （5）In my opinion, --- 我认为--- Step 2 真题例析 假设你是图1中的男孩，请根据以下图画提供的情节线索，以 “Sharing Housework”为题，用英文叙述你帮妈妈做家务的经过及感想。 注意：1.书面表达必须包括图画所表现的主要内容，可以适当增减细节，使其连贯、完整。 2.词数：100左右。
审题立意 审题第一步：确定文体。这是一篇夹叙夹议的作文。 审题第二步：确定写作目的。让大家懂得父母为我们 付出之不易。 审题第三步：确定写作内容。我要出去踢球，看见妈妈要洗衣服；觉得妈妈太累了，决定要帮妈妈洗衣服；小朋友叫我去踢球，我没去；我觉得洗衣服很累人；我把衣服洗完了，妈妈也回来了；我很高兴；我的感想：我们的父母工作很辛苦，我们应该经常帮他们。 撰写提纲 第一步：确定文章布局。这是一篇夹叙夹议的作文，先按一般记叙类作文的方式交代故事的起因、经过、结果‘再写自己的感想或看法。 第二步：列要点：go out with my football（要去踢球）；do some washing, decide to help mum（妈妈要洗衣服，我决定帮忙）； invite me to play football, refuse（朋友来请我踢球，我拒绝了）； hard work for me, mum gets back and praises me, feel proud（妈妈回来表扬了我，我很高兴）； do something in return（谈我的感想）。 中档作文（第四档，8分） Sharing Housework In the pictures, you can see that a boy is going out with a football. He is going to play with his friends, but his mother is busy washing clothes. When he finds that his mother is busy, he decides to help his mother. So he begins to wash clothes when his mother is away. After some time, one of his friends comes to ask him to play football. But he refuse, he finds it very hard to wash clothes. Finally, he finishes washing all the clothes and hangs them on a line. When his mother comes back, he is praised by his mother. He feels very happy. From this story, we learn that our parents do everything for us; they are very busy. Sometimes, we can do something to help them a little. [失分点] 这篇作文审题错误，题目中要求“你”是图中的男孩，因此全文必须以第一人称写，而不能用其他人称。另外，写夹叙夹议类作文时，前面一般要讲一个故事，而不能是对图画本身进行描述。以上两点是全文的失误。 高分作文 （第一档，15分） Last Saturday morning, I saw my mother was getting ready to wash some clothes when 1 I was about to go out with my football. I thought, “ How hard mum is working! She must be very tired.” So I decided to give up my plan and to help mum with the washing. I began to wash the clothes when my mum was away doing some shopping. 2 While I was washing, my friend Tim came to invite me to play football. I refused and continued washing. It was hard work for me, for I had seldom done such housework. After about two hours, I finished all the washing and hung all the clothes on a line. Later, 3 mum came back from shopping. When she saw what I had done, she was so pleased that she praised me. I felt proud of myself, too. I think our parents are working hard for us, and we should do what we can to help in return.4 [得分点] 1． When 在句中表示“正在那时”。如果不用when连接，写成两个简单句，也不是不可以，但不如文中的写法好。 高分要决：找到两个句子的关系，然后用相应的词或短语把它们连接起来，就可以写出并列句、复合句。 2． Mum去干什么，图画中看不出来，要凭自己的想象写。问中的想象是合理的，并和后面的come back from shopping 照应。 高分要决：如果只凭图画中的情况来讲故事，有时情节不好展开，所以要凭自己的想象添加一些合理的细节。 3． Later 和前面的after about two hours 都是表示时间推移的词。 高分要决：在讲述故事时，later, then, after that, two hours later 等作时间状语的词是最常见的连接词。文中有了这些词， 句与句之间就很连贯。 4． 用 I think--- 说明自己的感想，符合题意 高分要决：夹叙夹议类作文在最后一般都要说明自己的感想或看法，而一般记叙类作文只需在结尾时说明故事的结果即可，无需谈自己对这件事的看法或感想。 Step 3 满分克隆 Michael是一名美国中学生，在学校里选修汉语。他利用暑假到中国进修，希望进一步了解中国文化。有一天，他看到下面有关成语的漫画，不大明白其中的意思。请你用英语把漫画所表达的故事和寓意写成一段短文，向他解释。 注意：1．要求用五句话表达； 2．参考词汇：bump into (撞上)，hoe (锄头)
