2020届新高考高三英语作文教案设计(十二)图解读后续写之情节扩展写作指导

读后续写高分作文的写作方法指导（以衡水中学四月联考英语作文为例）2020江苏省丰县中学上课讲义正文指导版本一：But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. The ceiling of thick branches shut out the sky and covered the path in darkness. Jane looked around blankly, a shiver of alarm going through her. Soon the full moon rose, large, round and clear, shining in the deep blue. “Why not pick stones from the stream and make them in the form of SOS?” cried Jane excitedly, determined to save herself independently. Having finished it, she felt so exhausted and slept beside the stones. Tomorrow will be another day.It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Birds were chirping, the branches swaying to the rhythm of the wind, and the leaves fluttering like graceful butterflies. A ray of hope rose naturally in her heart. Suddenly, the buzzing of the helicopter came overhead again. It did saw her waving yellow blouse and most important the SOS. Upon its landing, so thrilled was she that she threw herself at Tom and hugged him tightly, tears of joy welling up in their eyes.“I miss you so much. Have you found the spot?”“Yes, in our heart.”版本二：But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. The trees cracked and groaned in the dark. A thrill of alarm came through Jane. Eventually, she determined on spotting an open area, awaiting another helicopter. She stumbled her way through the horrible forests and climbed to a high place. No time to waste. After she flagged her yellow blouse, Jane sank to the ground, anguished and defeated. Gazing at the sky, Jane recalled Tom and tears blurred her eyes. Terrified as she was, she fell fast asleep in the wild.It was daybreak when Jane woke up. And, as luck would have it, a helicopter just came by! Jane yelled and skipped, waving her yellow blouse. To her great joy, the helicopter noticed her and landed. What astounded her most was that it was Tom who sat in the helicopter! Out rushed Tom. A huge smile spread across Jane's face and the couple hugged tightly for a long time. It was the narrow escape that made Jane perceive that love was priceless. Over the next years, a change came over the couple. Reasoned discussion replaced fierce arguments and politeness replaced contrariness. They treasured the life and love more.结论是：1.首先要找到conflict在哪里，然后最多五句话说清楚solution。

2020届山东省新高考模拟英语作文读后续写写作指导一、续写原题阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一个完整的故事短文。

续写的词数为150左右。

Though it is one of the faded memories of my life today, there are times when I remember his face clearly, especially his eyes. As he had yellow spots on his eyes we called him Spotty. He would have been a stray(流浪) dog, until he came to me.I was seven years old. My dad had just got a new job in Nasik. We had moved into a rented house. It was raining very heavily on the day we moved.It was a cold dark night. We had our meal and went to sleep. Somehow in the midnight I heard some strange sounds outside the main door. I gathered courage and looked out through the window and I was really amused with what I saw outside.There was a small puppy lying on an old doormat which my mother had put outside the door. It was wet and trembling. At first it was difficult to see the little one. It was the yellow spots on its eyes that made me realize its presence.It was trying to get under the doormat to avoid the cold air outside and it had managed to get in as I could see only its head outside the doormat. Was it sick or injured?I felt pity for the poor soul. I went in and came out with an old towel. I went near the innocent one and held it in my hand and wiped the puppy till he had become dry. I took him into my room and made a bed for him with a woolen blanket and a small pillow. He seemed very healthy and comfortable in his new bed as he went to sleep immediately.The next morning, everyone in the family came to know about the unusual guest. "Shall we keep him with us?" I questioned my mom.Like any other parents would, my parents first totally refused my idea but my sister and I convinced them to keep Spotty.Slowly Spotty got on with everyone and became one of the family members.Paragraph 1:One day, Spotty returned from his daily walk with a broken leg. ____Paragraph 2:Almost a year later, one midnight we heard Spotty barking breathlessly ____二、下水续写总体思路第一段第一句：Spotty有一天回家，断了一条腿。

2020高中英语新高考读后续写的升华：删繁就简三秋树，领异标新二月花引言我在近日提出读后续写的两个概念。

读后续写的内容可以分为：Be a story; Beyond a story.所谓Be a story,就是把故事说完整即可，不一定要突出一定的道理，类似于情景剧《老友记》，娱乐一下；而Beyond a story是基于一定的主旨（theme)去挖掘人物的内心情感，所有情节的拓展都是服务于主旨。

从浙江的历年读后续写材料和提供的范文看，文章并没有突出一定的主旨，纯粹的Be a story。

譬如2016年的妻子赌气和丈夫旅游中分开，然后迷路。

续写也是最后两人又和好。

包括今年的儿子上学，父母给家里的狗又添了一个伙伴，然后儿子回家。

这里面的故事就是单纯地围绕人物线展开，把故事讲完了，就结束了。

我认为无论是be a story还是beyond a story，只要把人物形象刻画出来了，并且续写部分的想象合情合理，都是达到了高考的写作要求。

但有人说，beyond a story对学生来说，太难了。

其实这就误解了我的意思。

就具体写而言，要想写好，都不容易。

甚至be a story对学生的遣词造句要求更高。

因为你完全靠情节胜出，就要在用词上卯足劲，否则这篇文章就干巴巴的。

不仅仅没有思想，而且语言平庸，味同嚼蜡。

而beyond a story，你虽然语言平庸一点，但是你的思想非常动人，这就弥补了语言表达的匮乏。

以浙江作文题为例材料大致是：丈夫和妻子去旅游，来到森林里，二人意见不合，妻子赌气跑开了。

然后突然发现迷路了。

此时看到头上的飞机，估计是找她，但无法让它看到。

续写部分的范文是：天黑了，妻子找了写果实吃了后睡去；天亮，又和丈夫重逢。

我的想法：这几年的续写材料说实话，不知道是不是命题人觉得学生水平有限，选材都没有一定的思想深度，即使和完形填空比都差一截。

作为考生，如果要从思想上拔高，就要如此考虑，由于文章主要写妻子的活动，人物此时就一个：妻子。

读后续写高分作文的写作方法指导（以衡水中学四月联考英语作文为例）江苏省丰县中学上课讲义2020正文指导版本一：But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. The ceiling of thick branches shut out the sky and covered the path in darkness. Jane looked around blankly, a shiver of alarmgoing through her. Soon the full moon rose, large, round and clear, shining in the deep blue.“Why not pick stones from the stream and make them in the form of SOS?”cried Jane excitedly, determined to save herself independently. Having finished it, she feltso exhausted and slept beside the stones. Tomorrow will be another day. It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Birds were chirping, the branches swaying to the rhythm of the wind, and the leaves fluttering like graceful butterflies. A ray of hope rosenaturally in her heart. Suddenly, the buzzing of the helicopter came overhead again. It didsaw her waving yellow blouse and most important the SOS. Upon its landing, so thrilledwas she that she threw herself at Tom and hugged him tightly, tears of joy welling up intheir eyes.“I miss you so much. Have you found the spot?”“Yes, in our heart.”版本二：But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. The treescracked andgroaned in the dark. A thrill of alarm came through Jane. Eventually, she determined on spottingan open area, awaiting another helicopter. She stumbled her way through the horrible forestsand climbed to a high place. No time to waste. After she flagged her yellow blouse, Jane sank tothe ground, anguished and defeated. Gazing at the sky, Jane recalled Tom and tears blurred hereyes. Terrified as she was, she fell fast asleep in the wild.It was daybreak when Janewoke up. And, as luck would have it, a helicopter just came by!Jane yelled and skipped, waving her yellow blouse. To her great joy, the helicopter noticed herand landed. What astounded her most was that it was Tom who sat in the helicopter! Out rushedTom. A huge smile spread across Jane's face and the couple hugged tightly for a long time. Itwas the narrow escape that made Jane perceive that love was priceless. Over the next years, achange came over the couple. Reasoned discussion replaced fierce arguments and politenessreplaced contrariness. They treasured the life and love more.结论是：1.首先要找到conflict在哪里，然后最多五句话说清楚solution。

新高考英语读后续写：如何推动其故事情节发展（思路分析+出彩表达）读后续写是新高考模式的一个重要的改革，这个题型对学生的读和写提出了更高的能力要求，学生要能够基于文章的理解用自己的语言对原文进行续写，想要写出一个情节逻辑合理，对老师和学生来说无疑是一个巨大的挑战。

下面以浙江高考2020年和2018年真题为例，一步一步讲解分析。

2020原题材料阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

Onefall, my wife Elli and I had a single goal: to photograph polarbears. We were staying at a research camp outside “the polar bear capital ofthe world”—the town of Churchill in Manitoba, Canada.Taking pictures ofpolar bears is amazing but also dangerous. Polar bears —like all wild animals—should be photographed from a safe distance. When I’m faceto face with a polar bear, I like it to be through a camera witha telephoto lens. But sometimes, that is easier said than done. This was one ofthose times.As Elliand I cooked dinner, a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby lakesniffed, and smelled our garlic bread.The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp,which was surrounded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit thewire. He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts.Terrified,Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew. We yelled at the bear,hit pots hard, and fired blank shotgun shells into the air. Sometimesloud noises like these will scare bears off. Not this polarbearthough —he just kept trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws(爪子). I radioed the camp manager for help. He told me ahelicopter was on its way, but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived. Makingthe best of this close encounter（相遇）, I took some pictures of the bear.Elli and I feared the fence wouldn’t lastthrough 30 more minutes of the bear’s punishment. The camp manager suggested Iuse pepper spray. The spray burns the bears’eyes, but doesn’t hurtthem. So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and, through the fence,sprayed him in the face. With an angry roar（吼叫）, the bear ran to the lake towash his eyes.注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

新高考英语·记叙文的读后续写执教者：授课班级：时间：I.Learning objectives（学习目标）Through this period, the students will be able to: master how to complete a narrative article.1.analyse a given narrative passage and classify the ten given words.2.plot logically a reasonable ending on the underlined words and the given two sentences.3.learn the ways to write vividly.4.Learn the criteria of continuation writing.II.Learning procedures（学习步骤）Step 1. Lead in: What five elements are there in a narrative article?Step 2. Analyse the given passage.Step 3. Logical plottingStep 4. Vivid writingStep 5. Group creation work for the ending of the given passage.Step 6. Presentation of volunteering groups.Step 7. Sum up附1：阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整故事。

A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day. As he walked along Park Avenue nearthe First National Bank, he heard the sound of someone trying to start a car. He tried again and again but couldn’t get the car moving. Arthur turned and looked inside at the face of a young man who looked worried. Arthur stopped and asked, “It looks like you’ve got a problem,” Arthur said.“I’m afraid so. I’m in a big hurry and I can’t start my car.”“Is there something I can do to help? Arthur asked. The young man looked at the two suitcasesin the back seat and then said, “Thanks. If you’re sure it wouldn’t be too much trouble, you could help me get these suitcases into a taxi.”“No trouble at all. I’d be glad to help.”The young man got out and took one of the suitcases from the back seat. After placing it on the ground, he turned to get the other one. Just as Arthur picked up the first suitcase and started walking, he heard the long loud noise of an alarm(警报).It was from the bank. There had been a robbery!Park Avenue had been quiet a moment before. Now the air was filled with the sound of the alarm and the shouts of people running from all directions. Cars stopped and the passengers joined the crowd in front of the bank. People asked each other, “What happened?” But everyone had a different answer.Arthur, still carrying the suitcase, turned to look at the bank and walked right into the young woman in front of him.She looked at the suitcase and then at him. Arthur was surprised. “Why is she looking at me like that?” He thought. “The suitcase! She thinks I’m the bank thief!”Arthur looked around at the crowd of people. He became frightened, and without another thought, he started to run.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

新高考英语读后续写：如何推动其故事情节发展（思路分析+出彩表达）读后续写是新高考模式的一个重要的改革，这个题型对学生的读和写提出了更高的能力要求，学生要能够基于文章的理解用自己的语言对原文进行续写，想要写出一个情节逻辑合理，对老师和学生来说无疑是一个巨大的挑战。

下面以浙江高考2020年和2018年真题为例，一步一步讲解分析。

2020原题材料阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

Onefall, my wife Elli and I had a single goal: to photograph polarbears. We were staying at a research camp outside “the polar bear capital ofthe world”—the town of Churchill in Manitoba, Canada.Taking pictures ofpolar bears is amazing but also dangerous. Polar bears —like all wild animals—should be photographed from a safe distance. When I’m faceto face with a polar bear, I like it to be through a camera witha telephoto lens. But sometimes, that is easier said than done. This was one ofthose times.As Elliand I cooked dinner, a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby lakesniffed, and smelled our garlic bread.The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp,which was surrounded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit thewire. He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts.Terrified,Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew. We yelled at the bear,hit pots hard, and fired blank shotgun shells into the air. Sometimesloud noises like these will scare bears off. Not this polarbearthough —he just kept trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws(爪子). I radioed the camp manager for help. He told me ahelicopter was on its way, but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived. Makingthe best of this close encounter（相遇）, I took some pictures of the bear.Elli and I feared the fence wouldn’t lastthrough 30 more minutes of the bear’s punishment. The camp manager suggested Iuse pepper spray. The spray burns the bears’eyes, but doesn’t hurtthem. So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and, through the fence,sprayed him in the face. With an angry roar（吼叫）, the bear ran to the lake towash his eyes.注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

新高考英语-读后续写-技巧解读详解一、读后续写的解读1．读后续写概念：读一段330词左右的语言材料，要求考生依据该材料内容和所给段落开头语进行续写（150词左右），将其发展成一篇与给定材料逻辑衔接自然、情节合理、结构完整、表达恰当的短文。

2．读后续写考查学生的综合语言运用能力：（1）读原文。

具有把握短文关键信息和语言特点的能力；了解给定短文的主要内容，结构、及清楚其关键词和语言结构等。

（2）写续文。

具有把控情节发展的能力（会融合）；具有运用语言的能力（会用词句）；具有创造性思维能力（会编）二、读后续写实践中的问题在教学实践中，发现学生在读后续写的写作中，续写达不到要求，不会融合上下文情节，不会编。

存在上下文难以衔接自然，想象不合理，或情节突兀，主题表达不准确等问题。

究其原因，问题还是出在第一步读原文上。

原文虽然不难，但要在很短的时间内读出续写所需要的关键信息，找到逻辑衔接，情节发展的切点，就要求学生要会读，善读。

这是我们读后续写教学中首先要解决的问题。

以下文为例，让我们探究一下如何快速很好地解读原文，找到续写的信息。

三、实例解读如何读好原文阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

A friend of mine, named Jack, received an expensive car from his brother as a Christmas present. On Christmas Eve when Jack came out of his office, a street urchin(顽童)was walking around the shining car.“Is this your car, sir?”he asked.“Yes, my brother gave it to me for Christmas.”Jack answered.The boy was surprised. “You mean your brother gave it to you and it did cost you nothing? Sir, I wish…”he hesitated.Jack smiled, thinking of course he knew what the boy wanted, but what the boy said surprised him greatly.“I wish,”the boy went on, “that I could be a brother like that.”Jack looked at the boy in surprise, and then he said again, “Would you like to take a ride in my car?”“Oh yes, I’d love to ”the boy answered cheerfully.After a short ride, the boy turned and with his eyes shining, said, “Sir, would you mind driving in front of my house?”Unexpected at the abrupt request, Jack looked at the house the boy was pointing at. Submerged(淹没) in flourish(茂密的) head-high weeds and biers(荆棘) was a shabby, seemingly abandoned cottage, with a mud alley leading to its weather-beaten wooden door. Jack smiled a little. This time he was sure he knew what the boy wanted.“Will you stop where those two steps are?”the boy asked.“Of course. I don’t mind waiting for a few minutes.”Promised Jack, expecting the boy to take some companions back to show off his lucky experience.Satisfied with the response, the boy got out and ran up to the steps. Jack got out and lifted the boy to the front seat of his car.原文的不长和难度不大，但要带着目的去读，方能关注有用信息。