2011广州一模英语读写任务作文讲评

2011年广东省高考英语读写任务评卷分析今年的广东省英语高考读写任务试题和往年的形式一样，要求考生在阅读短文的基础上，写一篇相关主题的作文。

主要考查考生的篇章概括能力和语言表达能力。

本年度读写任务的阅读短文有191个词，比2010年的词数稍多。

短文主要讲述了一名叫Sam的孩子被送到寄宿学校后，因为不能适应新的生活环境而想家的经历，以及这种经历给他思想上和情感上所带来的冲击。

写作内容：以约30个词来概括短文的主要内容。

（满分5分）以约120个词讲述一次你（或你的朋友）想家的经历（满分20分），内容包括：时间、地点和起因；想家给学习或生活带来的影响；你（或你的朋友）是如何应对的。

本题具有较好的创新性和适度的开放性。

试题内容是学生熟悉的，有利于考生借助提示展开合理的想象和组织文字表达，利用目标语分析问题，表达思想。

大部分学生能抓住题意，完成试题规定任务。

较多学生注意使用语句间的连接成分，达到了预期的写作目的。

从阅卷的总体情况看，本试题具有应有的难度和良好的区分度。

一、卷面答题情况1. 概括部分题目要求用大约30个词来概括短文的主要内容。

在评卷过程中我们发现，大多数考生在概括部分都能抓住文章的主要信息点，不拘泥于原文的用词和表达方式，而是大胆地使用了各种复合句、分词短语、同义和近义表达等灵活多样的表现形式，体现出比较强的英语语言表达能力。

有两位考生是这样概括的：After being sent to a boarding school, Sam deeply fell into strong homesickness, which made him seve- rely angry with his parents and lonely because he couldn’t adjust to the boarding life at all and misunderstood his parents’ love.The article tells us that it’s the first time that Sam got to boarding school leaving his family,which made him have a homesickness and he didn’t adapt himself to his study life.有的考生照抄原文，依赖原文。

2011广州市普通高中毕业班综合测试-英语（一模）深度点评完形填空本次完形填空难度较大，原因在于内容比较抽象，理解需要一定时间。

下面做详细分析：(1) pattern. 出自选修6单词。

此处为“模式”。

诱惑项为“prediction”,但是我们不能说“share prediction”。

本句翻译：但是科学家知道几乎所有人都拥有清楚的模式。

(2) good. 答案的提示为“still”和“Certain important high-points come later in life.”(3) smartest. 由后面的“IQ”得知，说的是智商。

(4) experienced. Powerful 和energetic为同义词，不能选；与wise有关的应该是一种能力，而不是态度satisfied.(5) particularly。

“尤其是”.(6) climb. “攀升,提高”. “但是，你完成其它任务的能力不断提高”.(7) possess. “拥有”, 同样出自选修6单词。

(8) adults. 本题很容易出错，由“Maturity”（成熟）可排除babies 和teenagers. 不选elder 是因为elder 仅仅指“前辈，长者”，不一定是老年人；而且“adults”已经包括老年人。

(9) physical. 由“energetic”可知指生理方面。

(10) come. “24岁之前，我们相信我们快乐的时光还没到来。

”(11) realistic. “现实的”。

(12) happiness “现实”体现在后文“我们不再视快乐为目标。

如果我们拥有健康，获得工作和感情的目标，那么我们觉得快乐也会随之而来。

”(13) varies. 出自选修6. 由“different”可知。

(14) early. “许多诺贝尔得奖者在20到30岁期间完成了顶尖的研究”可知。

(15) limit. “但对于保持思维活跃的人，没有年龄上限的限制”。

2011年广州市英语听说模拟考试评分标准（因没有收到正式的高考评分标准，此标准仅限此次评卷使用）原则：先根据表中各档次的评分标准确定考生答案所属档次，然后按该档次的要求做调整，最后给出得分。

注意：考生修正、重复个别单词或句子，按最后一次答案进行评价。

语言结构基本正确，关键信息齐全时，可考虑给满分；回答部分主要关注信息是否准确，使用简单和完整回答皆可。

完整回答时若出现不影响意思表达的语法错误不扣分。

回答了部分信息按比例给分，回答的信息与答案毫不相关，刚评零分。

注意：允许考生在录音规定时间内，修正答案，按最后一个答案评价。

Part C 故事复述题评分标准（共24分）原则：采用整体评分法与要素评分法相结合。

评分时从内容（完整性）、语言（准确性）、流利程度（连贯性）和语音语调（地道性）四个方面确定考生答案所属档次。

内容上主要关注信息的完整、语言上主要关注语法和句子结构、流利性上主要关注连贯与节奏。

注意：考生只复述了故事的一小部分内容，按该部分内容所占的大约比例为最高分起评。

注意几种情况的处理：1. 出现以下情况评零分：1）一直都有说，但不是在说英语，或一个单词都听不懂的；2）可听到背景声音（有其他考生的声音，但很确定考生本身完全没有出声说的）；3）考生乱说一气或背诵一些与考试答案完全无关的内容。

2. 若录音中完全没有录到声音的，请及时上报组长，由技术人员处理。

3. 若录音声音偏小，但能听清楚内容的，不能因声音小而扣学生的分。

听说模拟考试题（文字稿）：A卷（2011年1月15日上午使用）Part A Reading AloudOur sense of taste has evolved to guide us to what we need wherever we go. It lets us enjoy a wonderful range of foods, limited only by the preferences we’re born with, and the occasional dish that poisons us. It takes us right to the edge of what’s safe to eat. And there’s one food above all others that shows just how far we’re willing to push those limits. We’ve come to a hot chilli-eatingcompetition in the American Mid West, to find out just how far the human sense of taste can go. Keeping watch in the audience is Professor Paul Jones, who’s spent years studying why we keep coming back for the burn.Part BW: Oh, hi, Billy. I come here to take the modern dancing class. And what about you? Are you a member?M: Not yet. The summer holiday is coming and I want to take some lessons before I travel to Europe in August. So a few of my friends recommended that I join this club. You seem to be doing really well. How long have you been coming here?W: For about six months. I come here every Friday after school. I really love dancing. When I was young, I dreamed of becoming a dancer and giving performances on the stage. Now I am preparing for a dancing contest next month.Task 11) 你是怎么为舞蹈比赛做参赛准备的?W: Well, I mainly just practice really hard. I also like to dance in front of my friends to build up my confidence. Before going to bed, I also listen to the music to get familiar with the rhythm.2) 你喜欢俱乐部里的老师吗?W: Of course, they are all kind and patient. I have made great progress since I came here.3) 我怎样才能成为这个俱乐部的成员呢？W: Err… first, you have to fill a form at the reception desk. The teachers will introduce to you some popular courses. If you haven’t got time now you can call the off ice for more information on 866 17958. As we’re students, we will get a 10% discount for our courses.Task 24)What does Billy plan to do in August?5)What does Lucy study at the club?6)How does Lucy build up her confidence?7)What does Lucy think of the teachers in the club?8)What’s the phone number for more information?A daughter complained to her father that her life was difficult and that she didn’t know what to do. Her father, a cook, took her to the kitchen. He filled two pots with water and placed each on a high fire. Then he put potatoes in one pot and eggs in the second. He then let them boil, without saying a word to his daughter. The daughter waited impatiently, wondering what he was doing. After twenty minutes he turned off the burners and took the food out. He asked his daughter what she could see. “Potatoes and eggs,” she replied quickly. Her father then asked her to look closer and touch them. The daughter was still puzzled. The father explained to her that the potatoes and the eggs had each faced the same difficulty --- the boiling water. However, each one reacted differently. In the boiling water, the strong and hard potato became soft and weak. However, the egg, with only a thin shell to protect it became hard. The father asked his daughter again, “When difficulty knocks on your door, how do you respond? Are you a potato or an egg?” The daughter smiled and understood that when faced with difficulty, she should be determined to fight back.B卷（2011年1月15日下午使用）Part A Reading AloudTo test how well human beings balance, we’ve set up a simple test with a suitcase, some weights and a group of volunteers. First the suitcase is filled with around 12 kilos of weight. The volunteers are asked to pick up the suitcase and repeat the movement a few times. Then we take them out of the studio and ask them a question that has nothing to do with the experiment. And while the volunteer is elsewhere we replace the weighted suitcase with an empty one. Because they don’t know that a switch has been made they automatically balance themselves for a heavy case. So they falter but they don’t fall over.Part BW:Honda, a blue one.M: Madam, when did this happen? Where exactly was your car?W: I guess it was about 3:20 this afternoon. I had just parked the car in the school car park area, that’s where I always leave it, and was hurrying into the school playground to find my son and take him home.M: Hm, Madam. I’ll give you a crime report number and I will need some more information. Do you mind if I ask you a few more questions?W: Of course not.M: Did you see the person who stole it?W: Mm, only his back.Task 11) 你能把那个小偷描述一下么？W: Umm, well, he seemed quite tall and very thin. He was wearing a blue coat and black jeans.But I’m not sure. I couldn’t see his face. It all happened very quickly. Less than 10 secondsafter I got out, he had stolen the car.2) 他怎么能这么快把车偷走呢？W: You see I was in such a hurry and I … I think I forgot to lock the car. I shouldn’t have been so careless. But I thought it would be safe in a school car park.3) 能告诉我你的姓名和电话号码吗？M: Elaine Brown. That’s E-l-a-i-n-e, and Brown. And my mobile phone number is 7956-117234.Task 24) Where was the car stolen from?5) What was the lady doing there?6) What did the thief look like?7) Why was the thief able to steal the car quickly?8) What is the lady’s phone number?Once, a terrible disaster hit a village. All the crops died. The villagers were hungry and people had to hide what little food they had so no one else could steal it.One day, a poor traveler arrived in a village. He hadn’t eaten for three days, and the only thing he had was a cooking pot. He poured some water in the pot and put it on a small fire. When a few villagers asked what he was doing, he replied that he was making a special stone soup using a secret method. He took out an ordinary stone from his pocket and put it in the pot. As the water boiled, he tasted his soup and said it was delicious, but a bit of salt would make it even better. One curio us villager brought him some salt. “How tasty it would be with some oil,” said the traveler. Another man rushed home and brought him some oil. This continued with the traveler casually asking for some tomatoes, potatoes and a bit of meat. Finally, the whole village was able to enjoy the delicious soup. “The soup smelled so good. It must be that special stone,” they said. But the secret is that life will be better with everyone’s contribution.A卷参考答案及要点Part B Role Play（接受所有正确的答案）Task 11) How do you prepare for the dancing contest? / What do you do to prepare for the dancingcontest?/ How are you preparing for the dancing contest?2) Do you like the teachers in the club / here?3) How can I become a member of this club?/ How can I join?Task 24）He plans to travel to Europe./ travel to Europe.5）She studies modern dancing./ Modern dancing.6）By dancing before her friends./ She often dances before her friends./ Dances before her friends.7）She thinks they are all kind and patient./ They are all kind and patient./ Kind and patient. 8）It’s 866 17958./ 866 17958.模拟A卷Part B Role Play评分细则B卷参考答案及要点Part B Role Play（接受所有正确的答案）Task 11)Can you describe the thief?/ What does the thief look like?/ Tell me what the thief look like.2)How (Why) did (could) he steal it so quickly?3)Could I have your name and phone number, please?/ Could you tell me your name and phonenumber? / What’s your name and phone number?/ And your name and phone number please? Task 24) (From) the school car park.5) (She came) to pick up (get) her son./ (She came) to take her son home./ Picking up (Getting)her son./ Taking her son home.6) He was quite tall and thin./ Tall and thin.7) The woman forgot to lock her car.8) Her phone number is 7956-117234./ It’s 7956-117234./ 7956-117234.A卷Part C Story Retelling应包括要点：（参考）1）女儿抱怨生活艰难2）父亲把马铃薯和鸡蛋放在锅里煮3）煮了很久，女儿不耐烦4）终于煮完，父亲问女儿看到什么，女儿不明白5）父亲让女儿仔细看并触摸一下，女儿仍不明白6）父亲解释马铃薯和鸡蛋面临两样困难7）但两者反应不同：马铃薯变软，鸡蛋变硬8）女儿明白道理：面对困难要抗争B卷Part C Story Retelling应包括要点：（参考）1）村庄发生天灾，庄稼死，人挨饿2）人们收藏食物防盗3）穷旅人到来，用仅有的锅煮水4）村民问他干嘛，他说煮特别的石头汤5）旅人尝了一下，说汤很美味，但缺点盐，马上有村民拿盐给他6）就这样，旅人从村民那得到油和其他食材7）最后，全村人都尝上了美味的汤8）秘诀在于：人人都奉献，生活更美好。

2011广东卷答案与解析Ⅰ. 语言知识及应用第一节完形填空【主旨大意】是不是有天赋的学生就一定得上特长班？本文讲述有天赋的学生在特长班里的表现，许多人的担心说明如果有天赋的学生对学习感到厌烦了，这回压制了他们的发展。

1解析：由上一句的It has been argued可知，此处填argument，只这些辩论是有依据的。

答案：C2解析：普通班里的学习环境是根据普通学生设计的。

learning situation学习环境。

答案：C3解析：regular class的学习环境当然是为一般学生设计的。

smart聪明的,curious 好奇的，mature成熟的，average一般的，智力平常的。

由句意可知D项正确。

答案：D4解析：句意：也有点疑问特长班能帮助有天赋的孩子早毕业，早早在社会上立足。

文章第一句就提到了It has been argued by some that gifted children should be grouped in special classes，故B项正确。

答案：B5解析：句意：但是，把这些孩子带出普通班也会造成许多问题。

children 指的是“有天赋的孩子”。

6解析：句意：我观察了许多聪明孩子被带出了特长班进入普通班。

intelligent 聪明的，competent 有能力的，ordinary 普通的，independent独立的。

由句意可知A项正确。

答案：A7解析：上一句提到，把这些孩子从特长班带到普通班。

regular class正常的班级，普通班。

答案：B8解析：句意：在特长班里，他们很少用他们自己的判断力，在很大程度上依赖老师的指导。

Specially特别地，专门地，slightly 稍微，wrongly 错误地，heavily很大地。

由句意可知D项正确。

答案：D9解析：句意：在普通班里，他们不用担心跟得上跟不上，他们开始思考许多问题。

reflect on思考，为固定短语，符合句意。

广州市普通高中2011年高中毕业班综合测试（一）英语试题I．语言知识及应用（共两节，满分45分）第一节完形填空（共15小题，每小题2分，满分30分）The ups and downs of life may seem unpredictable. But scientists know there are clear 1 that almost all people share. Even if you’ve passed your “best”, you still have othe r 2 years to come. Certain important high-points come later in life.When are you 3 ? From 18 to 25, according to I.Q. scores; but you’re wiser and more 4 with increasing age. At around 30, metal abilities begin to decline, 5 your ability to do maths. But your ability to complete other tasks 6 . For example, your vocabulary increases over time. At 60, your brain 7 almost four times as much information as it did at age 21. Bec ause of this, some psychologists suggest that “maturity quotients” (M.Q.) be used to measure intelligence for8 .When are you happiest? You have the best 9 sense of yourself from 15 to 24, when you feel energetic all the time. The best professional sense is from 40 to 49. Before age 24, we believe that our happiest years are yet to 10 , but when we are over 30, we believe that they’re behind us. After age 30, we’re more11 and don’t view happiness as a goal in itself. If we maintain our health, achieve professional and emotional goals, then 12 , we feel, will follow.When are you most creative? Generally between 30 and 39, but it 13 with different professions. The high-points in areas such as science and economics come 14 —most Nobel prize winners did their top research in their 20’s and 30’s —but for people who keep an active mind, there is no upper age 15 . 1．A．plans B．lives C．patterns D．predictions 2．A．good B．stranger C．interesting D．difficult3．A．best B．smartest C．most mature D．most skilled 4．A．powerful B．energetic C．experienced D．satisfied 5．A．generally B．specially C．mainly D．particularly 6．A．climbs B．stops C．matters D．works 7．A．recognizes B．posseses C．communicates D．receives8．A．babies B．teenagers C．adults D．elders9．A．mental B．emotional C．physical D．personal 10．A．come B．last C．remember D．disappear 11．A．confident B．realistic C．hopeful D．grateful 12．A．wealth B．sharpness C．wisdom D．happiness 13．A．agrees B．varies C goes D．ends14．A．early B．naturally C．unexpectedly D．recently 15．A．demand B．reason C．choice D．limit第二节语法填空（共10题，每小题1.5分，满分15分）阅读下面短文，按照句子结构的语法性和上下文连贯的要求，在空格处填入一个适当的词或使用括号中词语的正确形式填空，并将答案填写在答题卡标号为16 ~ 25 的相应位置上。

2011广东英语高考读写任务如何概括原文读懂阅读材料，找出文章的内容要点后，用自己的话转述原文内容要点。

要注意在用词或句式上做到同义替换，避免抄袭之嫌。

要依照作者的观点，客观地转述其要点，不要强加自己的观点。

切忌说"In my opinion．．．”诸如此类的话。

记叙文的概括方法记叙文体的阅读材料，写概要时应抓住六个要素：when，where，who，what，why，how。

在这六个要素中，所占内容比重最大的是what，但是不要把what写得太详细。

如：When Sam first got to his boarding school with his parents, he was very happy. He thought he would be able to go home every weekend. When he was told he would not, he started crying because the thought of not seeing his parents was driving him crazy.He was given uniforms and all other things that he would need for the term. He started crying when it was time for his parents to leave. He was then taken to the dorm, where he saw other children happy. He tried as much as he could to fit in but could not because his mind was at home. He started feeling homesick (想家) and wanted to go homes as soon as possible.He got sick soon because he could not eat the school food. He could not concentrate in the classroom. All he could think was being at home with his family. He had no mobile phone or other means to get in touch with his parents. He was angry and felt lonely. He thought his parents hated him and that was why they left him in a boarding school.When--____________________________Where--____________________________Who--____________________________What--____________________________Why--____________________________Result--____________________________列出要点之后，我们就可以用自己的话将要点组织起来，概括成一个约30个词的通顺文段：_____________________________________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________________________[遣词造句]一、词汇1．寄宿学校____________________________2．想念父母____________________________3．生病____________________________4．专心学习____________________________5．事实上____________________________6．想家的经历____________________________7．适应那儿的气候____________________________8．感到孤独____________________________9．与……交流____________________________10．与某人交朋友____________________________二、句式1．翻译下列句子(1)山姆是一名学生。

AIt was about 11:15 pm on the passenger ship California. The night was freezing cold and the water was filled with ice from the North Pole, making it difficult for the ship to sail on .In the radio room, operator Cyril Evans listened to the radio-talk between a nearby passenger ship and the telegraph station on the Canadian island of Newfoundland. Evans interrupted it and said, “We’re stopped and surrounded by ice. Be careful as you pass through these waters.” The radio operator on the nearby ship repli ed, “I’m too busy to talk now. I have many messages to send to the telegraph station. ” Twenty minutes later, as he turned off his radio and went to bed, Evans could still hear the ship sending its passengers’ telegrams.Earlier in the evening the Californ ia’s captain, Stanley Lord, had seen another ship approaching. It looked about the size of his own, but attempts to contact the ship failed. It lay dark and mysterious about 10 miles away. At 12:40 am there appeared a sudden flash of light just over the mystery ship. Captain Lord, thinking the ship might need help, ordered his officers to signal the ship by lamp. There was no reply. Three more rockets then exploded, none appeared to go higher than halfway up the mast of the mystery ship. Then at about 2:00 am it turned and slipped into the darkness.In the light of the sawn there was no mystery ship, but 20 miles away was the scene of a great disaster. Unfortunately, the mystery ship had stopped directly in front of the California, preventing people on board from seeing clearly. If this ship had not been there, Captain Lord would have recognized that the rockets were SOS rockets that came not from the mystery ship but from a more distant ship which the California could not see. If Cyril Evans had kept his radio on for just 30 minutes more he would have heard SOS signals coming from that distant ship he spoke with the night before. That ship was the Titanic which was sinking fast, leaving 1,500 of its passengers dead. It was April 14, 1912.26．From whose point of view is the story told?A．People on the Titanic. B．People on the California.C．People at telegraph station. D．People on Newfoundland.27．Why were the rockets really fired?A．To celebrate the journey. B．To signal for help.C．To contact the Titanic. D．To warn other ships.28．What is the main function of the last paragraph of this passage?A．It shows how unlucky the Titanic was.B．It describes how the Titanic sank.C．It indicates that the people on the California were careless.D．It lists how many people died in the disaster.29．How many ships are mentioned in the passage?A．One. B．Two. C．Three. D．Four. 30．From the passage we know that .A．the rockets were fired from the mystery shipB．Cyril Evans went to bed earlier than usual that nightC．the Titanic started sinking at dawn the next dayD．the Titanic sent out many telegrams that night【答案与解析】语篇解读：该篇记叙文，讲述了California船没能及时判断Titanic的求救信号，最终产生里历史上的重大沉船灾难。

The Power of Perseverance: Lessons from the 2011 Guangdong Junior High SchoolEnglish ExamIn the world of learning, perseverance is often touted as a key ingredient to success. The 2011 Guangdong Junior High School English Exam, with its essay prompt, served as a stark reminder of this truth. The essay, with its focus on the importance of perseverance in achieving goals, challenged students to delve into their own experiences and reflect on the role of persistence in their lives.The essay began by posing a question: "What is the most valuable thing in the world?" This question, simple yet profound, encouraged students to dig deep and consider what truly mattered most. For many, the answer lay in the concept of perseverance - the unwavering determination to keep going, despite obstacles and challenges.Perseverance, as the essay pointed out, is not just about sticking to a task until it's done. It's about maintaining focus and momentum, even when faced with setbacks and failures. It's about learning from mistakes, dusting oneself off, and starting again. It's about havingthe courage to persevere in the face of adversity and the belief that with enough effort, anything is possible.The essay went on to illustrate the power of perseverance through real-life examples. It spoke ofathletes who trained relentlessly for years, only to win a gold medal in the Olympics. It talked about scientists who spent decades researching and experimenting, only to make a groundbreaking discovery. And it reminded us of theordinary individuals who, through their tireless effortsand dedication, achieved remarkable successes in their respective fields.These examples served as inspiration for students to draw from their own lives and share their own stories of perseverance. Whether it was overcoming academic challenges, mastering a new skill, or achieving a personal goal, the essay invited students to reflect on the moments when they persevered and emerged stronger and wiser.In conclusion, the essay强调，毅力是通往成功的关键。