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小黑雅思作文批改样文欣赏Task: Millions of people every year move to English-speaking countries such as Australia, Britain or America, In order to study at school, college or university. Why do so many people want to study in English? Why is English such an important international language?According to a latest official statistics by CHINA government, there have been millions of people to attend the mainstream ,International English language tests such as IELTS, TOFEL and GRE for getting their study opportunity in commonware countries or USA every year in china , improve their English language level furtherly and their main purpose, the English speaking countries is to improve their English language ability furthly by daily English-speaking with native English speaker, and it seems that the trend will become even more popular in future and It is quite necessary for us to learn what cause it.English as a only common language in the whole world are widely used in recording the famous or castes knowledge and technology with better English language ability, people can benefit more and broaden their horizons more by learning may different opinions different cultures. In addition, To snatch with the more and more tough global competition, English language ability has become an must capability for good occupations when companies recruit the new employees.Further more, what make English language such powerful and can be an international language. I believe the root factor is from the huge economic gap between Britain and other countries in the period when our ancestor over planning to choose one language as the common international language to solve global communication and trading problems. At that Britain was the most powerful country in the world and the country owned the most latest andadvanced knowledge and technology, So it happen naturaly that English had become the really international language, After hundreds of years that acculatingsEnglish has become so popular in all the world no other languages can competeHowever advocating English spearing all over the world can also takes some clraubacks the severe ohe is the country which depend on English speak too much may lead them losing their own language, and then losing their national charoteristic and culture.So the country should balance the advantages and disadvantages of launching English-speaking, and do the decision with great care.Task: In many countries schools have server problem with student behavior, what do think are the cause of this are the cause of this? What solution can suggest?It’s quite common these days for most schools in a lot of countries to be suffered with the problems of student behavior, even more. It seems the problem has arisen to a severe degree that we have to acquire what cause it and what kinds of measures should be taken to control or eliminate it as soon as possibleThe essential factor of this trend is led by the characteristic of students them selves. At that age Researchers are telling us that the children with the age from 6 years old to 18 years one trending to do some behaviors against their teachers or parents to catch the peer’s eyes or present their personality then whatever their teachers or parents advocate, they tend to do the opposite the take more and more students behavior’s problems in the schools Meanwhile, the mass media in the society are sometimes giring the good examples for them to follow against Their teachers and parents, as most of us aware, there are many obscene or violent contents offered on world wide web or our daily TV programs or films and most of these contents are very easily reached by children. It is the current mass media who mislead children to behavior problem at a significant degree.About the solutions, the immediate one should be taken is government need to work out a series of measures to protect the children from negative contents of mass media, such as sorting out the moss media especially internet in different watching or reading levels, then parents can do the effective supervision when children watch or read them. At long term, teacher should enhance their patience and consciousness to do heart-to-heart communication with students,and school is necessary initiative to introduce some subject to help students cross the special life period safely and healthily.作文点评：1、长句容易出现有头无尾，或者没有主语、谓语的情况；2、一些词汇的常见用法和搭配不当；3、对于一些熟悉的句型，并不熟知它的使用套路，需要勤加训练。

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剑桥8test2大作文范文

剑桥8test2大作文范文

雅思小作文求批改+评论内容：剑桥8 test 2第一段changes -----varies第二段spending---expenditure on this leaped by 10%, reaching the proportion of 50%第四段There was a downward trend. It decreased from 28% in 1981 to 22% in 1991. Consequently, it descended to only 5% in 2001.最好连成一句吧 There was a downward trend, which subsided from 28% in 1981 to 22% in 1991, and consequently descended to merely 5% 10 years later第五段experienced up and down---fluctuated,spending---expense结尾时态不大对。

按你原来的可以改成 In a word, the most principal segment turned out to be the salaries of teachers, occupying approximately half of the overall expenditure. The fluctuation of spending on other issues, such as insurance and resources, could be witnessed as well.求剑桥8雅思作文范文《剑桥雅思8》Test1大作文范文 Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. 分析：这道题是问儿童教育应该谁来负责，是家长还是学校。

有道写作雅思批改

有道写作雅思批改

有道写作雅思批改全文共四篇示例，供读者参考第一篇示例：有道写作雅思批改是一种针对雅思考试写作部分的辅导服务，通过专业的老师批改学生的作文并提供建议和指导，帮助学生提高写作水平和得分。

有道写作雅思批改服务不仅可以帮助学生了解雅思写作考试的要求和标准，还可以提供个性化的写作指导，帮助学生克服写作难题，打破写作瓶颈，快速提升写作水平。

有道写作雅思批改的服务流程通常包括以下几个步骤：学生需要注册并购买服务，然后按照指定的格式将写作任务提交到有道系统中。

接下来，专业的老师会在规定的时间内对学生的作文进行批改，并在作文中标注错误和提出改进意见。

学生可以通过系统查看批改结果，了解自己的不足之处，并根据老师的建议进行调整和改进。

有道写作雅思批改服务的特点主要有以下几点：1. 专业老师提供指导：有道写作服务的老师都是经验丰富的雅思写作批改专家，能够深入了解学生的写作水平和需求，针对性提出建议和指导，帮助学生解决各种写作难题。

2. 定制化建议：每位学生的写作水平和需求都各不相同，有道写作雅思批改服务可以根据学生的具体情况提供个性化的建议和指导，帮助学生有效提高写作水平。

3. 及时回馈：有道写作雅思批改服务通常在24小时内完成批改，学生可以及时查看批改结果，并根据老师的建议进行调整和改进，从而提高写作效率和质量。

4. 多样化练习题目：有道写作雅思批改服务提供了多样化的写作练习题目，涵盖了雅思写作考试的各个方面，帮助学生全面提高写作能力。

5. 追踪服务：有道写作雅思批改服务还可以提供学生的写作成绩和进步情况追踪服务，帮助学生了解自己的强弱项，及时调整学习计划，针对性提高写作水平。

第二篇示例：有道写作雅思批改是为那些想提高雅思写作能力的学生提供的一项专业化服务。

雅思考试是国际上最具权威性的英语语言能力测试之一，对于许多留学生来说，取得一定的分数是必须的。

而写作部分往往是许多学生的难点，因为它要求考生具备一定的逻辑思维能力、语言表达能力和写作技巧。

雅思大作文批改实录

雅思大作文批改实录

雅思大作文批改实录2016雅思大作文批改实录精选雅思考试要想取得好成绩，考生们必须好好复习，为了帮助大家更好的备考，下面是yjbys网店铺提供给大家关于雅思大作文批改实录精选，希望对大家的备考有所帮助。

题目When children make mistakes, they should be punished. Do you think so? How should they be punished?学生习作The issue about punishment on children has always been discussed in these days. From my perspective, I strongly agree with the opinion that punishment can help children realise the difference between right and wrong, although some slight problems still exist.The reason why punishment seems to be a must is that this is one of the most efficient method to teach the kids what is right. By criticizing the children who have done something by mistake, they are aware of the danger or wrong of their behaviours. As a result, children will be afraid of to do such a kind of things, which is of benefit to their future life.Although the advantage of punishment is undoubtedly true, the opponents would argue that it might make the kids feel inferior to others. A good case in point is that if a kid is beaten by their parents in front of his classmates, he will regard it as humiliation. When he is faced with his classmates, he might feel inactive and being separated from his friends, which may lead to long-term mental diseases including depression and anxiety.According to the above words I have said, punishment is necessary while the methods must be chosen carefully. Forexample, kids’ mood must be taken good care of so that he can realise his false. Objective persuasion is recommended while the violent behaviours is banned. Since the aim is to help them grow but notto punish them.To sum up, children are our future so we should pay more attention to our ways of punishment.评分：5.5整体评价：文章基本按照题目要求，完成了题目要求的各项内容。

【雅思作文批改】2011年10月雅思考试真题小作文批改

【雅思作文批改】2011年10月雅思考试真题小作文批改

【雅思作文批改】2011年10月雅思考试真题小作文批改雅思作文是雅思考试中比较难得分的部分，很多雅思考生在雅思作文上都很头疼，怎么都拿不到好的雅思作文分数，所以大家掌握一些雅思作文模板、雅思作文技巧是非常重要的。

为了让大家快速的提高雅思写作成绩，这里跟大家分享关于“【汇总】晟睿教育原创板块：雅思作文批改|雅思作文范文“的相关内容，希望大家耐心的复习，认真的准备，好好总结，到时你会发现，其实要取得雅思作文高分并没有想象中的那么难！更多雅思作文批改请关注晟睿教育-雅思作文批改栏目!雅思作文题目：2011年10月考试真题In many countries, the proportion of older people is steadily increasing. Does this trend have more positive or negative effects on society?考生原文Nowadays, an increasing number of people are concerned about the aging population. However, whether the population aging makes a positive influence or a negative impact has caused heated debate. As to this topic, I mainly agree with the latter view for the following reasons.First, it is obvious that the increasing share of aging population has become an emergency problem for sustainable economy development. As we all know, workforce is an essential part of industries, such as the house construction and manufacture. This means that government will be confronted with extra heavy economic burden brought by labour shortage. Therefore, it is necessary to find a decent solution to cope with this upset situation.Moreover, for the old generation is getting aged, the young will have heavy stress of life. Take the situation in china for example, each young couple has to make enough money to afford four old persons and one child’s lives, such as the fees for expensive healthy care of the old, the tuition for the child’s education and even the daily living costs. Beside that, the serious competition in the work will add the pressure to youth.This is not to say that an aging population is all useless. Of course, they will be helpful to make society in the rapid development, when enormous young people pour into careers with the advanced knowledge. But the elderly also have rich experience, which is an indispensable part of the work.In conclusion, the population aging will impose heavy economic burden on the young and cause serious labour shortage. Meanwhile, we should not ignore the important roles which the aging population is undertaking. And it is integrant for government to raise a policy to reach the balance between the old and the young.批改 by Angela令狐本次批改严格按照IELTS小作文评分标准进行。