18雷雨》修改

PING(hurrying across to the centre door):Feng!(opening the door)Come in! (Sifeng comes in ,her face wet whit tears and rain,and her tangled纠缠的,dripping hair hanging in her eyes.She starts at Zhou Ping as if in a trance恍惚.)FENG:Ping!---(Tinmidly)Anyone about?PING(perturbed):No ,it’s all right.(He grasps her hands)FENG:Oh,Ping!(She flings her arms round him and sobs convulsively) PING:How—how did you get into such a stste?How did you know I was here?(Babbling with relief.)How did you get in?FENG:I slipped in through the back way.PING:Your hands are like ice.you’d better hurry up and get those wet things off. FENG:No—(with a sob)let me have a look at you first.PING(taking her over to a sofa and sitting her down beside him):But –but where have you been?FENG(looking at Zhou Ping with here eyes fuul of tears):Here you areat last,Ping.It seems ages since I last saw you.PING:My poor darling,how can you be so silly?But where have you been ,my silly sister? FENG:I just ran on and on in the rain untill I didn’t where I was.The noise of thunder seemed to driced everything out of in my mind.I thought I heard Mother calling after me,but I was afraid,and I ran as fast as I could. I was looking for the river out in front of our place.I was going to throw myself in.PING(aghast):FENG!FENG--:But somehow I couldn’t find it,though I went round and round in circles looking forit.PING:Oh,FENG,it’s all my fault.Please forgive me.Don’t hold it against me. FENG:Somehow I stumbled here in a daze.Suddenly I saw there was a lirht in your window and I relized you were in .ALL of a sudden I felt that I couldn’t just die:I couldn’t bear to be part from you.I think we can still go away—only we must go away together. PING(solemnly):Yes,we must go away together.FENG(earnestly):It’s the only way out,PING. I ‘ve got nothing now—no family ,no friends. I’ve got only you ,PING.Take me away with you tomorrow.(A pause)PING(after a pause):No ,no.FENG(in despair):PING!PING:We must go right now.FENG(incredulous):What ,this minute?PING(tenderly):Yes. I was intending to go alone and then come back for you later.but there is no need to wait now.FENG(still incredulous):You really mean it?We’ll go together?PING:Yes, I really do mean it.FENG(tears stream down her cheeks):So it’s true.I t’s true,then!Oh Ping!You darling,you! You’re the darest darling in the whole world.You—you’ve saved my life!PING(fervently):From now on we’ll always be together.FENG:Yes ,once we get away from this place,we’ll never be parted from each other. PING(getting up):All right,FENG, but before we go there’s someone we must see.As soon as we’ve done that ,we’ll be away.FENG: What do you mean?PING:Your brother.FENG:Dahai?PING:He’s been looking for you.He’s in the diningroom there.FENG(frightened):No, no ,don't see him. He hates you.He’ll hurt you.Let’s go—let’s get out—quick.PING:I’ve already seen him—and wo must seen him once more.—(with an air of finality)otherwise we just won’t be able to go.FENG(timoroulsly):But ,PING, you---(ZHOU PING goes across to the dining-room door and opens it)PING(calling):LU Dahai!LUDhai!—I say!He’s gone! That’s funny.He must have gone out through the other door.(He looks at sifeng)FENG(going up to ZHOU PING and pleading with him):Come on,PING, let’s go.(Dragging him towards the centre door.)Let’s go just as we are.(As sifeng gets ZHOU PING to the door,it opens.LU MA and LU Dahai come in.) (LU MA looks a changed woman.She has cried and shouted herself hoarse in the rain.She seems to have aged considerably.)FENG(in alarm):Mother!(a silght pause)MA(in a agonized voice ,her arms held out towards sifeng.):FENG.(sifeng rushes towards her mother)FENG:Oh,Mother!MA(stroking sifeng’s head):M y child, my poor poor child.FENG(sobbing quietly):Oh ,Mother ,forgive me ,forgive me.MA:Why didn’t you tell me eariler?FENG(hanging her head):I was afraid.I was afraid you might be angry with me,and despise me ,and turn me out.I just didn’t dare tell you.MA(sorrowfully):It’s my own fault for being so stupid.I should have thought it before.But who could have expected anything like this?And to thing that it should have happened to my own child of all people!My own fate’s been hard enough ,but you---HAI(unemotionally)Let’s get going,then.Sifeng will be going home with you for the time being.—I’ve arranged everything with him—(pointing to ZHOU PING)he can go on in advance and come back for Sifeng later.MA(bewildered):What are you saying?What are you saying?HAI(looking at his mother ,unperturbed):I know what’s worrying you,Mother,but there’s no other way out.So---(after a pause)we may as well let them go.MA:What?Let them go?PING(hesitantly):You can trust me,Mrs .LU.I’ll be good to her.I’m taking her with me and leaving at once.MA(her voice trembling):Do you want to go with him,FENG?FENG( tightly gripping her mother’s hands):Mother,I’m afraid I’ll have to leave you for a while.MA:You can’t live together!HAI(surprised)What’s the matter ,Mother?MA(firmly):No! It wouldn’t do!FENG:Mother!MA:sifeng, we’re going home.(To Dahai)Go and call a rickshaw.I don’t suppose Sifeng can do any more walking.We must go—as fast as we can!FENG(recoiling from her in desperation):You can’t do this to me ,Mother!MA:It wouldn’t do,I e on, we must go.FENG:Do you want to drive your daughter to distraction and see her die of worry before your very eyes?PING(going up to LU MA):Mrs.Lu,I know I’ve done you wrong,but I’ll do my best to make up fot it.Now that things have come to such a pass,you---HAI(at a loss to understand his mother’s hehaviour):What’s the matter with you?Mother? MA:You go and get a rickshaw!(To sifeng).Now listen to me,FENG:I’d rather lose you than see you living with him!—Come on ,then.(Just as Dahai gets to the door,sifeng screams.) FENG:A—a—ah!Mother!(She faints into her mother’s arms.)MA(holding her in her arms):My child!You---PING(agitated):She’s fainted.MA(feeling sifeng’s forhead and softly calling her name):sifeng.(ZHOU PING runs towards the dining room)HAI:Don't’s panic:a drop of cold water and she’ll be all right.She was like that when she was little.(ZHOU PING gets some cold water on her face):Wake up wake up,sifeng.FENG(drawing a deep breath):Ah ,mother.MA(trying to comfort her):Don’t be hard on me,child.I’m not being hard—hearted.I just can’t tell you what I’m going through.FENG(sighting deeply):Mother.MA:What is it?FENG(to ZHOU PING): I—there’s something I’ve got to tell you .PING: feel better now, Feng?FENG:I ---I’ve been keeping it from you all the time. (looking piteously at her mother .) MA: What is it ,child ?FENG: (sobbing):I----we’re going to have a –(She breaks down in a flood of tears.) MA:What? You mean you---(Words fail her.)PING(seizing SiFeng’s hand)：Sifeng! You mean it ? You---FENG:(weeping): Yes.PING:But when? How long?FENG:(hanging her head): About three months now.PING: But ,Sifeng,why didn’t you tell me? I ---oh, my—MA:(hoarsely) : My God!PING:（going over to Lu Ma）: You just can’t stand in our way now, Mrs.Lu. Its all my fault. Now., please. Please let her go. I give you my word I’ll be worthy of her ,and a credit to you FENG :(going down on her knees at her mother’ feet) Have pity on us, Mother. Say yes and let us go.MA:(sitting there in a daze, unable to speak for a moment): I must be dreaming. My children, my own children, after thirsty years---Oh, my God!( She buries her face in herhands and bursts into tears,then waves them away.)Go away! I don’t know you! (she turns her face away)PING:In that case ---(rising)we’d better go.(Sifeng gets to her feet again)MA:(unable to control herself): No,you can’t do itFENG:(falling on her knees again and pleading with her): What’s the matter with you, Mother? My mind’s made up. Whoever he is , I belong to him now. my heart was promised to him from the very first, and there can never be anybody else for me but him. I’ve got now so that wherever he goes I’ll go with him and whatever he does I’ll do too.Can’t you understand .Mother, that I –MA:(stopping her with a gesture , distressed): Child!HAI: Well, things being as they are, I don’t see why we should n’t let her go PING:Mrs. Lu , if you refuse to let her go , we’ll have no alternative but to disobey you and just go .---Feng!FENG:(shaking her hand ):No---(still looking up at Lu Ma )Mother!MA(in a low voice ): Oh , God knows what this is a punishment for ---what have I ever done to bring such a calamity down on our heads?—My poor children , they did n’t know what they doing. Oh ,God ,if anyone has to be punished, why can’t it just be me? It’s my fault and no one else’s: it all began when I took the first false step.(Heart-broken.)They’re my innocent children; they deserve a chance in life , The guilt is here in my heart , and I should be the one to suffer for it ,(she rises to her feet and looks heavenwards,)And tonight, here I am letting them go away together , I know I’m doing wrong, but this way the responsibility will all be mine; all this trouble was caused by me in the first place ,My children haven’tdone anything wrong, they’re too good and innocent to do anything wrong , If there must be a punishment, let me bear it ---along, (looking away ,)Feng---FENG:(uneasily) :What’s the matter with you ,Mother? What are you talking about? MA: (turning her face away):It doesn’t matter.( Gently.) Now get up. And go. Both of you. FENG:(getting up an embracing her mother):Oh, Mother!PING:Come on, then.(Looking at his watch.) We haven’t got much time.Only twenty-five minutes before the train goes. Tell them to get the car out . Come on.MA: (calmly): No ,don’t do that, Feng,If you’re going away secretly like this in the middle of the night ,it would be best not to attract too much attention.(To Dahai.)Dahai, you can go and get a rickshaw. I’m going home now.You can see the off at the stationHAI:All right (He goes out through the centre door)MA:（To Sifeng,with a sad tenderness）:come here,my child.let me kiss you good-bye.(Sifeng goes up to her mother and embraces her.)MA(to Zhou Ping):you come here,too.letme have a look at you.(Zhou Ping goes and stands in front of Lu Ma ,hishead bent.)MA(looking at him and wiping her eyes):go on,then .Off you go.-----I want you both to promise me one thing before you go,though.PING:what is it?MA:if you don’t promise,then I won’tlet Sifeng go after all.FENG:tell us what it is,mother.i’ll promise.MA(looking from one to the other):when you go,you’dbest go as far as you can and never come back.one you’ve left tonight ,you must never see me again as long as you live. FENG(in distress):oh, mother,don’t-----PING(tipping her a wink and whispering):she’s overwrought just now-----will be all right later on.FENG:yes all right,then.----we’ll be off now,then,mother.(her eyes full with tears as she knees for a farewell kowtow to her mother.)(Lu Ma is controlling her own emotions with an effort.)MA(waving them away):off you go,then.PING:let’s go out through the dining-room.five still got some of my things in there.(just as the three of them get to the dining-room door,it opens and Fanyi comes in.) FENG(invluntarily);Madanm!FAN(with composure):why,where are you all going ?there’s still a thunderstorm onoutside,you know!PING(to Fanyi):so you’ve been eaverdropping at the door,have you?FAN:yes,and I’m not the only one.there’s someone else here.(turning back to thedining-room.)come oyt,you!(a sheepish ZhouChong emerges from the dining-room.) FENG(startled):Master Chong!CHONG(disconcerted):Hullo,Sifeng!PING(annoyed): I did n’t expect such behaviour from you.ChongCONG(still at sea) it was mother who told me to come here,I’d no idea what was going on.FAN(coldly):you’ll know soon enough.PING(to Fanyi,furning):now what’s the meaning of all this?FAN(mockingly):I just wanted your brother to come and give you a send-off.PING(furiously):what a dirty,mean trick!----CHONG:noe,Ping!PING(to Zhou Chong): I’m sorry!(rounding obruptly on Fanyi again.)but there isn’t another mother like you on earth!CHONG(bewildered):what’s going on.then,mother?FAN:see for youself!(to Sifeng.)where are you going,Sifeng?FENG(falteringly): i-----er—i------PING:nothing silly,now.tell them we’re going away toghter.CHONG(noe that the light has dawned): what’s this,Sifeng?you’regoing awaywith him? FENG:yes,master Chong.i----I’mCHONG(somewhat reproachfully):then why didn’t you tell me so before? FENG:but I did:I told you to leave me alone because i---I was no longer a--- PING（to Sifeng）：go on,tell them all about it!(pointing to Fanyi)tell hea that you’re going to marry me!CHONG(rather taken aback):Sifeng,you------FAN(to Zhou Chong):now you know what it’s all about.(Zhou Chong hangs his head)PING(rounding on Fanyi with a sudden viciousness):you spiteful creture!you thingk he’ll spoil everything to help you?well,Chong?what ideas have you got on the subject?eh? what are you going to do about it?eh?(Zhou Chong looks from his mother to Sifeng,then hangs his head in silence.) FAN:come on ,Chong!(after a pause,more insistently.)why don’t you say something,Chong?whydon’t you ask him?why don’t you ask your brother something?(another pause.everybody looks at Zhou Chong,who stands mute.)FAN:say something,Chong!you’re not dead,are you?or dumb?or are youjust a stupid child?surely you’re not just going to stand there with all this going on and not make a murmur?CHONG(lifting his head and replying with a lamblike bleat):no,mother.(he looks at Sifeng is willing,I’vno objection.PING(going up to Zhou Chong):spoken like a sensible fellow,Chong! CHONG(with a pizzled frown):no,I’v suddenly realizes-----it’s just come to me-----that Iwasn’t really in love with Sifeng after all.(Staring abstractedly into space.) what I felt about her was----probable only a silly infatuation.(Shrinking back from the triumphant Zhou Ping.) yes.take her away with you------only be good to her.FAN(all her hopes dashed):ugh,you!(with a sudden fury.)you’re no son of mine!(incoherently.)you’re no man at all!if I were you-----(turning onSifeng)I’d smash her, burn her,kill her!you’re just a poor,feeble idiot----not a spark none of life in you!ishould have known better----you’re none of mine---no son of mine!CHONG(pained):what’s the matter with you,mother?FAN(to Zhou Chong,hysterically):don’t think I’m your not her.(raising her voice.)your mother died long ago.she was crushed and smothered by your father.(wiping her eyes,in an anguished voice.)after all these eighteen years of the Zhou family that’s more like a prison,married to a hateful tyrant---after may have made me spirit is still not dead.your father may have made me have you,Chong,butmy heart----my soul is still my own.(pointing to Zhou Ping.)he’s the only one that’s ever possessed me body and soul.but now he doesn’twant me,he doesn’t want me any more.CHONG(considerably distressed):mother,my dearest mother,what is all this about? PING(heatedly):copying your father now,areyou?you hypocrite,you!no.i’m not mad—not in the least! And now it’s your turn to speak,and tell them all about it----it’s my last chance to get even with you!PING(embarrassed):what is there for me to tell? I think you’d better go up to bed. FAN(sneering):stop pretending!tell them that I’m not your stepmother at all.(general astonishment.a short pause.)CHONG(at his wit’s end):mother!FAN(recklessly):go on,tell them.tell Sifeng. Go on,tell her!FENG(overcome):oh,mother!(she throes herself into her mother’s arms.) FAN:remember:it was you,and you alone,that deceived your brother,and deceived me,and deceivedyou father!(she looks at him with a contemptuous sneer.)PING(to sifeng):Tke no notice of her.Let’s get out of here.FAN:You wouldn’t get far.The gate’s locked.Your father will be down any minute.I’ve sent for him.MA:God!PING:What are you trying to do?FAN(with icy calm):I want your father to meet his dear future daughter-in law before you leave(Calling her husband)Puyuan!Puyuan!CHONG:Mother!Please!PING(*advancing on FANYI):don’t you dare shout again,you lunatic!(FANYI runs to the door of the study and shouts again)MA(in great agitation):Let’s get out of here,Sifeng.FAN:No,He’s coming!(ZHOU PUYUAN comes ion from the study.There is a deathly hush,and no one moves an inch.)ZHOU(in the doorway):What’s all the shouting for?You ought to be in bed by now.FAN(haughtily):I want you to meet some relatives of yours.ZHOU(amazed to find LU MA and Sifeng here):Why,what the –what are you two doing here?FAN(taking sifeng’s hand and turning to PUYUAN):Let me introduce your daughter-in-law.(To sifeng,indicating PUYUAN.)Say hello to your father!(Then to PUYUAN,indicanting LU MA)And I’d likeyou to meet this lady here,too.MA:Oh,madam!FAN:Come here,PING!You can pay your respects to your new mother now that your father’s here.PING(embarrassed):Father,I—I—ZHOU(taking in the situation):Why—(To LU MA.) Sp you’ve come back again after all,Shiping.FAN(startled):What?MA(desperately):No ,no,you’re mistaken.ZHOU(remorsefully):Yes,Shiping,I thought you’d be back.MA: No!(Hanging her head)Oh ,God!FAN(stupefied):Shiping?You mean she’s Shiping?ZHOU(irritated):Don’t start pretending you did’nt know, and asking silly questions.She’s Ping’s mother, the one that died thirty years ago.FAN:In heaven’s name!(A long silence,broken only by a cry of anguish from Sifeng as she stares at her mother,who sits there with her head bent,as if in pain.Dazedly,ZHOU PING’s eyes travel from his father to LU MA,while Fanyi steals round to ZHOU CHONG. She isgradually becoming aware that a far greater tragedy than her won is unfolding before her eyes.)ZHOU(with a heavy heart):PING,come here.Your won mother never died at all.She’s here,alive.PING(beside himself):No,it can’t be her!Father,say it’s not her!ZHOU(severely):Idoit!Don’t talk such utter nonsense!She may not be from a good family but she’syour mother just the same.PING(in utter despair)Oh,Father!ZHOU(seriously):Don’t forget that you owe her something for bringing you into the world,even if ti is a bit of a blow to find that Sifeng’s your half-sister.FENG(overcome with grief):Oh ,mother!ZHOU(despondently):Forgive me ,PING.This was the real mistake I ever made.I never imagined for one moment that she was still alive and that one day she’d find us here.I can only put it down to divine justice(Turning to LU MA with a sign)I’m getting old now.I felt very sorry after I told you to go this afternoon,and I’ve arranged to have twenty thousand doolars sent to you.Now that you’ve come back again,I think PING will be a good son to you and look after you.He’ll help to make amends for the wrong I did you.)PING(to LU MA):So you--- you’re my---MA(unable to control herself any longer):Oh,PING!—(She turns her head away and sobs) ZHOU:Down on your knees to her ,PING!You’re not dreaming.She ‘s your mother. FENG(in utter bewilderment):This can’t be true,Mother.(LU MA makes no reply) FAN(to ZHOU PING, repentantly):I never ecpected it to—to turn out like this ping!—PING(to PUYUAN)Father!(TO LU MA)Mother!FENG(she and ZHOU PING atare at one another until,suddently, she can bear it no longer):Oh,my God!(She rushes out through the centre door.)(ZHOU PING throws himself down on sofa and buries his bead in his arms.LU MA atands motionless ,lifeless.)FAN(calling anxiously):Sifeng!Sifeng!(Turning to ZHOU CHONG.)I don’t like look of this, CHONG.You’d better hurry out and find her.(ZHOU Chong runs out through the centre door ,calling after sifeng.)ZHOU(going up to ZHOU PING):Now PING, what’s all this about?PING(bursting out):You should never have fathered me!(He runs out through the dining—room)(Suddenly, a scream is heard from Sifeng in the distance,followed by ZHOU CHONG’S frantic shouting of Sifeng Sifeng.Then comes a scream from ZHOU CHONG.)MA(shouting):Sifeng,what’s happened?FAN(simultaneously)CHONG!MY BOY!(They both run out through the centre door.) ZHOU(hurries to the window ,pulls aside the curtain, and quavers):What’s happened? What’s happened?［仆由中门跑上。

谈《雷雨》的一处修改作者：吴福辉来源：《汉语言文学研究》2014年第03期现代作家之中很有几位是嗜爱修改自己作品的，如巴金、沈从文、钱锺书诸人，皆几十年如一日，有意地不使自己的文字凝固下来，其中包括曹禺。

记得好多年前曾参加过某研究生的答辩，他做的题目是研究1949年后曹禺对他剧作的全部改动，结论是：大部因政治形势而改，基本归于失败。

我当时并无异议，论文通过了。

但是后来我接触到一些曹禺创作的第一手材料，觉得问题并不简单，不能就这么“一刀切”。

比如曹禺修改《雷雨》一剧最具艺术魅力的人物蘩漪的出场提示，就不是越改越坏，反倒是在长久的时间里不断磨砺自己的文字使之放出光彩的。

关于剧作家所写人物出场的“提示语”，是整个文本不可分割的有机部分，其地位不容小视。

一个主要人物登场了，作者就是这个人物的第一创造者，正好比十月怀胎的母亲，要向世人介绍自己的孩子，形容自己的孩子，提出创造的依据，表达对人物知根知底的了解。

这个提示语并不供具体演出，却是辅助“演出”的作者宣言，一个集中凝练的阐释，一束打在人物身上的光亮。

它的作用，足可让剧本未来的二次创造者，包括导演、演员、读者（观众）受到启发，据此掌握剧中的人物。

它是了解识别人物的“眼”，还可能是显示全剧主题的“魂”。

尤其对于曹禺来说，他是用尽他的全部心思才力来写这些文字的。

这是他的创作特色之一。

蘩漪这段出场提示语，便几乎迷倒了几代的《雷雨》读者。

它对于蘩漪的真知灼见，直如一把解剖刀那样犀利、明快，又满带着激情，像一首诗唱响了这个中国现代文学历程中最复杂的女性形象（还可举出丁玲的莎菲、茅盾的梅女士、张爱玲的七巧）的主调和辅音，真是不可多得的美文。

现将1934年初刊于《文学季刊》上的《雷雨》这段蘩漪提示语，抄录如下。

其时，第一幕开场不久，年轻的侍女四凤、她的当仆人的父亲鲁贵、在周家矿上当工人的哥哥鲁大海以及周家小少爷周冲都先后上场，全剧的人物关系和情节线索刚刚展开。

这当儿，周公馆现在的太太蘩漪穿着一身黑衣服下楼了：她一望就知道是个果敢阴鸷的女人，她的脸色苍白，只有嘴唇微红，她的大而灰暗的眼睛同高鼻子令人觉得有些可怕。

雷雨教学目标：1正确、流利地朗读课文，弄清楚本课是按照“雷雨前、雷雨中、雷雨后”的顺序写的。

2创设情境，使孩子学习并理解“压、沉、乱、阵、逃、垂、越”7个字，正确、美观地书写“垂”和“越”。

3利用形声字规律独立自主的识字，并体会雷雨前的变化。

教学重点：创设情境，让孩子愉快地学习“压、、沉、乱、阵、、逃、垂、越”7个字，写好“垂”和“越”。

教学难点：1正确、美观地书写“垂”和“越”字。

2体会雷雨前的变化。

教学准备：教师：风的录音、生字卡、课件学生：课本、铅笔课时安排：第一课时教学过程设计：一、猜谜激趣引学。

课件出示谜面：①天上有面鼓，藏在云深处，响时先冒火，声音震山谷。

②千根线来万根线，颗颗珍珠线上串，看得见来摸得着，掉在地上却不见2、学生猜谜，分先后板书课题：雷雨。

师：认真观察课题，你发现了什么？（边板书边指导：雷字是个雨字头，第三笔变横折钩为横钩，而雨字的第三笔则依然是横折钩）过渡：今天，让我们一起走进18课去看看这场雷雨吧！一起读课题。

二、初步感知课文，扫清阅读障碍1请同学们打开语文书到80页先借助音节把课文读通顺。

（教师巡回指导，及时表扬一些好现象如读书姿势，读书习惯等）师：有不会认的字吗？（让学生提问疑难字，帮助解决。

）2（课件出示思考）我想请三位同学来给我们朗读课文，其他同学边听边思考老师的问题。

（师相机板书：雷雨前、雷雨中、雷雨后）5师：这篇课文就是按照雷雨前，雷雨中，雷雨后的顺序来写的，接下来咱们一起走进雷雨前的世界，去看看当时的景象。

三对话建构，随文识字（一）课件出示：默读课文雷雨前的1---3自然段，用笔圈出课文描写了哪些景象？（教师板书：云、树、蝉、风、蜘蛛、闪电、雷声）1、（课件图片出示）让我们看看此时的云怎样？（压下来）字卡出示学习:压A、这是今天要学习的第一个汉字，谁能正确、响亮地读一读这个字？B、做一做“压”的动作，我发现同学们都在用力地往下按。

你们会识记吗？（学生说识记方法）我们用手书空一遍（强调读法：压，半包围结构，再边书空笔画边说笔顺）我们要把“压”字送回家，你们能找到这句话吗？用“——”画出来（出示句子：满天的乌云，黑沉沉地压下来）C、是怎样的云压下来？（黑沉沉的）黑沉沉说明了什么？（多、厚）谁能通过朗读让我们感觉到这样的乌云？字卡出示学习：沉师：这句话里还有一个“沉”字是要让我们识记的，我们一起书空“沉”字（读法：音，部首，结构，书空），“黑沉沉”是个ABB句式，你还能说一个吗？指名学生说。

《雷雨》修改说明及反思《雷雨》修改说明：在评课时赵文学老师提出：“增加生活中识字、随文识字，这都是学生重要的识字方法。

”我认为赵老师提得很有道理，所以增加了随文识字，在具体的语境中识字；也增加了生活中识字，这能够培养学生在生活中主动识字意识。

《雷雨》教学反思：一、合理运用多媒体，优化教学环节本节课的教学，紧紧围绕低年级语文阅读教学的读好课文、识字写字、积累语言三大任务展开教学。

充分发挥多媒体课件、文本、教师、学生四个教学资源的优势，激发孩子学习的积极性。

每个环节充分发挥多媒体的优势，创设生动形象的学习情境，让学生感受雷雨神奇的自然景象，激发观察兴趣，体会雷雨的变化过程，培养想象能力，达到情感共鸣。

充分利用教学PPT、动画、声像的功能，创设形象直观、生动有趣、可靠有效的学习情境，为学生感知、观察、说话提供材料，营造情感基调，丰富内心体验。

例如，用大屏幕ppt呈现谜面，谜底出现时换下一张画面并伴有雷声，增加了形象化、直观化、可视化，信息合理冗余。

让学生在ppt 创设的情境中体验、感受、达到情感共鸣。

又如，在“看动画视频听录音课文，整体感知”环节，利用视频的动画、声像功能，创设形象直观、生动有趣的学习情境。

为学生感知、观察、说话提供材料，唤醒了学生生活体验，打开了学生思维、说话智慧的大门。

二、识字、写字教学扎实有效识字、写字教学是小学第一学段语文教学的重要任务之一。

《语文课程标准》（2011年版）第一学段指出：“掌握汉字的基本笔画和常用的偏旁部首，能按笔顺股则用硬笔写字，注意间架结构。

初步感受汉字的形体美”我充分运用度媒体，很好的优化了识字、写字环节，目标达成度高。

例如，在识字环节用多媒体课件演示“虹”从古到今的演变过程，既让学生感受“虹”字的形体美，又了解了“虹”字的字义，还使学生主动记住了“虹”字的偏旁。

又如，写“垂”：课件出示要写的字：垂。

让认真观察“垂”字，让学生先想一想说一说在写这个“垂”的时候要注意什么，怎样才能写好“垂”字。