公开课Polishyourwriting

How to polish your writing?Teaching objective:By the end of the class, the students are supposed to:1. know the factors contributing to an excellent composition2. be able to polish a composition using the skills learntTeaching procedures:Step one: What makes a good writing?Watch a short video, and fill in the blanks.1. _____________ your readers and what they want2. _____________ your writing3. Organize your ideas into paragraphs, with _____________ idea each paragraph4. Cut _____________ words and sentencesThree aspects: _____________ _____________ _____________Step two: How to polish your language used in the writing?Tip 1: Language variation1. ____________________________________ (words)2. ____________________________________ (phrases)3. ____________________________________ (sentences)Practice:Fresh and not overused words (one or more words)1. It can be difficult to figure out what to save and what to toss.It can be ____________ to figure out what to save and what to toss.It can be __________ __________ to figure out what to save and what to toss.It can be__________ __________ __________ to figure out what to save and what to toss. (an idiom is suggested)2. It is classmates’ encouragement and love that help me go through this period of difficult time. (南京、盐城2017二模作文）It is classmates’ __________ and __________ that help me go through this period of __________ time.3. With our economy going from strength to strength, China has become a strong nation and is playing an important role in the world.（2018苏锡常镇二模作文）With our economy going from strength to strength, China has become a __________ nation and is playing a/an__________ role in the world.4. On-line voting becomes more and more popular, and many competitions have people take part in it. (2016江苏卷作文）On-line voting becomes __________, and many competitions __________.5. For many reasons, we often have to meet unfairness in a complex society. (2018无锡一模作文)For many reasons, we often have to __________ unfairness in a complex society.Phrases come first (one word for each blank)1. He ignored what had happened to his friends, which made them upset.He ________ _______ ________ _______ to what had happened to his friends, which made them upset.2. We try our best to promote the traditional friendship between us.We ________ _______ ________ to promote the traditional friendship between us.3. Your fluency in English makes you better than the other candidates for the job.Your fluency in English gives you _______ _______ ________ the other candidates for the job.4. We should remember that everyone is the master of his own fate.We should ________ _______ ________ that everyone is the master of his own fate.Variation of sentences1. Trevor puts his genius idea into action by doing a favor for three people. He also appeals to the recipients of favor to pay the favor forward. (苏州2017一模）Tip: transitional words______________________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________2. When people talk about success, they often fix their mind on success itself and ignore some hidden factors. (镇江2017一模）Tip: non-finite verb______________________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________3. If you use it and see it more frequently, it can be better remembered. (常州2017一模）Tip: inversion______________________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________4. From my perspective, such an initiative and behavior should be encouraged. (苏锡常镇2017二模）Tip: change the word order______________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________5. Because there is no enough relevant regulations, some uncivilized people deliberately damage shared bikes. They throw them into rivers or pile them up randomly. (南京、淮安2017三模作文）Tip: use the phrases to replace sentences______________________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________Tip 2: Language richnessCompare: Which sentence is better and why?1. We can feast our eyes on the flowers in the wild.2. We can feast our eyes on the dedicate flowers in the wild in various colors and gestures.______________________________________________________________________________ Practice:1. For the benefit of the future generation, it is our duty to seek a/an_____________ economic growth (adj.)______________________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________2. _____________laws and regulations (v.)______________________________________________________________________________ issue _____________laws and regulations (adj.)______________________________________________________________________________ issue effective laws and regulations_____________ (topic of the writing)______________________________________________________________________________ Step three: Group work—Peer assessmentComment on the given writing from the three aspects mentioned: structure, content, language. The students are supposed to:1. Mark the writing2. Polish the writingStep four: Homework1. polish your writingMaterial (2018南通市二模作文)。