江苏高考英语二轮课件：专题五书面表达 层级二 第二讲 句式要高级句子要鲜活38页PPT

第二类 语法类错误
1．时态错误 误：In the morning, we had bicycled in the suburbs to plant trees. 正：In the morning, we bicycled in the suburbs to plant trees.
2．语态错误 误：Children who raise in poor families can generally deal with problems more effectively in their adult years. 正：Children who are raised in poor families can generally deal with problems more effectively in their adult years. 3．主谓一致错误 误：My hobby is widespread, which include drawing, collecting stamps and so on. 正：My hobby is widespread, which includes drawing, collecting stamps and so on.
5．动宾搭配不当 误：They are trying their best to improve their production. 正：They are trying their best to increase their production. 6．形容词和名词搭配不当 误：We walked a far way before planting trees. 正：We walked a long way before planting trees.

例如： 主题句：Beijing is famous for its temperate climate, its large population, and its rapid industrial development.
该主题句有三个不同的观点揉在一起， 如果作为一个段落的主题句则不符合 要求，该主题句可分解为三个主题句， 由三个段落分别来完成.
请看下面的段落有什么问题：
My name is Roseanna, and I like to keep physically fit. I used to weigh two hundred pounds, but I joined the YMCA （Young men’s Christian Association 基督教青 年会）for an exercise class and diet program. In one year I lost eighty pounds. I feel much better and never want to have that much weight on my five-feet frame （身躯） again. I bought two new suitcases last week. Every day I practice jogging three miles, swimming fifteen laps, lifting twenty-pound weights and playing tennis for one hour. My mother was a premature baby.
例如主题句：“American food is terrible ”和“Pollution is a serious problem”就过于概括； 而主题句：“He speaks English”和 “ I bought a car last week”就过于具 体。

【参考范文2】 Nowadays, most commodities or services are rated through certain channels.These ratings, easy to access, are playing an increasingly important role in customers’ purchase
【评分标准】 内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。
【写作思路】 本篇书面表达要求考生根据两段文字材料写一篇文章，针对“消费排名”现象 论述自己的看法和观点，并阐述理由。文章为任务型读写，属于议论文，主要使用
第一和第三人称，一般现在时。写作时应注意紧扣两段材料表达的主题，不可偏题，
还应注意合理使用高级词汇和较复杂句型。
convenient and economical to buy books according to the ratings.
There is no doubt that it is unwise to depend completely on the ratings in consumption. The advantages and disadvantages of ratings are often closely related. It is necessary to hold an objective attitude towards ratings.

请阅读下面文字，并按照要求用英语写一篇150词左右的文章。
【写作内容】
1.用约30个词概括上述利用排名(ratings)进行消费的现象；
2.谈谈你如何看待消费排名，然后用2—3个理由或论据支撑你的看法。
【写作要求】

第二讲
如何写记叙文的摘要
对记叙文进行概括时，要抓住原文的人物、事件、结 果三大要素。有些记叙文的结尾有一个点题句，表达深刻 内涵或故事带给人们的启示，在写摘要时也需把故事寓意 表达出来。
一、记叙文摘要的模板 1．没有寓意只单纯介绍事件的记叙文摘要模板 (1)人物——事件 (2)人物——事件——结果 2．篇末有表示文章内涵的记叙文摘要模板 人物——事件——结果——启示
第二步：整合这些要素，提取重要信息，舍去次要细节
阅读全文之后，发现本文重要的信息是：人物和发生的事情。
第三步：确定人称和时态 人称：本文是讲述了一个小女孩和父亲的故事，应该用 第三人称； 时态：事情发生在过去，用一般过去时。 第四步：串联要素，确定表达
In this passage, the writer mainly tells us about a little girl, who wanted to buy some time from her busy father so that he could accompany her.
[点拨]
第一步：圈定本文的要素(见原文画线部分)
who when where
what
a girl and her father
at the time when her father came home from work
at home
The girl borrowed $10 from her father and wanted to buy an hour from her father.
参考答案：The passage mainly tells us about a father who posted his daughter's illness via WeChat to raise money for her treatment despite the fact that he had the ability to cover the medical expenses.

第二讲　句式要高级，句子要鲜活[学生用书P106]句式单一，缺乏生气的文章，哪怕无任何错误也不可能得高分。

精彩句式的合理使用会使文章极具可读性。

考生在写作时应多运用一些高级句式和复合句，并注意句式的灵活多变，让文章读起来抑扬顿挫，让考生深厚的语言功底得以体现，让作文跨上五档线！[策略1]　特殊句式，风景独好写作中，如果考生能够使用强调句、倒装句、省略句、感叹句等特殊句式，不仅能彰显考生的英语水平，还能提升写作档次。

1．运用强调句①(2019·太原模拟书面表达)With your generous help, I firmly believe that I will adapt to the college life as soon as possible.→It is with your generous help that I firmly believe that I will adapt to the college life as soon as possible.②(2019·全国卷Ⅱ书面表达)I believe hard work will pay off!→I do believe hard work will pay off!2．运用倒装句(2019·全国卷Ⅱ书面表达)The game is so significant that it is required that everyone should be present punctually.→So significant is the game that it is required that everyone should be present punctually.3．运用虚拟语气If you should accept my application, I would spare no effort to commit myself to your satisfaction.→Should you accept my application, I would spare no effort to commit myself to your satisfaction.4．运用省略句(2019·昆明高三摸底调研书面表达)While we travel along the way, we can enjoy the beautiful scenery as well as the new looks of the villages and towns.→While travelling along the way, we can enjoy the beautiful scenery as well as the new looks of the villages and towns.5．it 句型①(2018·全国卷Ⅰ书面表达)First of all, bear it in mind that you had better arrive punctually or some time earlier than the appointed time, which is of great significance to show your politeness.(it 作形式宾语)②(2018·江苏卷书面表达)It is necessary to hold an objective attitude towards ratings.(it作形式主语)[策略2]　三大句式，编排巧妙1．增加亮点的定语从句定语从句的应用可以非常有效地提升表达档次，在写作中如果我们可以把两个简单句合并为一个含有定语从句的复合句，或者把并列句改为含有定语从句的复合句，这些都能为文章增加亮点。

三、读写任务类——说明文典例写作内容30个单词概述上述信息的主要内容；结合上述信息，简要分析导致交通问题的主要原因；你的分析，从社会规范(rules regulations)和个人行为两方面谈谈你得到的满分作文阅卷老师点评评分标准一、说明文的概括技巧说明文通常会有明确的主题句，先抓住关键词，并根据各段落的主题，有序地组织语言，完整表达出文章的中心内容。

如果是分析型说明文，概括时要找出文章所说明的现象、产生该现象的原因及解决问题的方法或建议，然后用自己的话重组信息点。

概括时要找出： 1.文章说明的是什么现象？ 2.造成这种现象的原因是什么？3.解决这种现象或问题的措施或建议是什么？ 二、说明文读写任务类常用句型1.This article deals with/discusses/analyzes/strongly emphasizes the impact of...2.This article not only describes...but also suggests...3.This article compares the disadvantages/benefits of...and summarizes key findings...4.This article gives an account of/provides an analysis of/provides a method of...5.This article shows/tells us that...6.The author finds it necessary to.../The purpose of the report is to show that...7.The author holds the idea that...，giving it an example of sb.who...8.The author strongly emphasizes the benefits of getting up early such as...9.This article points out the common phenomenon ，which...(补充解释)Xue Zhaofeng ，a professor from Peking University ，reportedly has more than 170,000 subscribers to his online teaching course and could be making about 35 million yuan ($5.3 million) a year.Xue is only one among the hundreds of online teachers making millions of yuan a month.According to iResearch ，an agency specializing in Internet data collection ，the online education market was worth 156 billion yuan by the end of last year ，and it is expected to reach 260 billion yuan by 2019.Online education has also found mention in this year ’s Central Government Work Report ，which Premier Li Keqiang delivered to the annual National People ’s Congress.We can thusconclude that online education not only has huge economic potential，but it also enjoys government support.Online education is not without problems，though.Some online “educators” are extremely popular yet they hardly teach students anything useful.Worse，there is hardly any supervision of online education agencies.A China Central TV report on Nov 17 said quite a high percentage of such agencies are being operated without the education bureaus’ acknowledgement.写作内容1.用约30个单词写出上文概要；2.用约120个单词阐述网络课程流行的原因以及你对网络课程健康发展的建议。

• From where I stand, it is a blessing that Gaokao is accepted by overseas universities.
• …, it is absolutely a good news. • …, I am extremely delighted to hear about the
A Chinese boy consumed a large sum of money in two years overseas. What’s worse, he couldn’t live on himself and didn’t get a diploma eventually.
Para. 2 Voice your view
Previously, Chinese students would have to take standardized college admission tests, such as the SAT and ACT used in US schools.
The Gaokao is regarded as suitable preparation for Cambridge. The Gaokao scores of successful applicants will vary from province to province and year to year. As a guideline， successful applicants will usually have scores in the top 0. 1％ of those taking the Gaokao in their province. In addition to the total score， Cambridge Colleges will pay close attention to individual subject scores and scores in the Senior High School Examinations （Xueye Shuiping Kaoshi； previously the

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本文是一篇纯文本读写类作文。所给文本是两则日记,都是关于制订新年计 划的。要求结合所给文本,谈制订新年计划的意义,以及如何才能实现新年计划 。文章的主体时态应是一般现在时。 [写作要点]
1.用约30个词概括两段文字的主要内容: (1)很多人习惯在新年伊始表决心立计划; (2)有人成功实现,有人失败。
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2.你的观点: (1)制订新年计划的意义:
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(2019江苏苏北三市模拟) 请阅读下面文字,并按照要求用英语写一篇150词左高右考的导文航 章。 Li Jiang 1 January, Sunny It's that time of year again: Time to make New Year's resolutions. It has become
2020版高考英语新素养突破大二轮江 苏专用 ：专题 五 书面表达 3作文课件作文指导优秀作文专题 课件中 考作文 高考作 文ppt

Dear Ms Li， I'm very happy to have you as our English teacher.
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Sounds unusual，doesn't it？But it's not that unrealistic，with the development of China's highspeed railway system.And that's not all.China has an even greater highspeed railway plan—to connect the country with Southeast Asia，and eventually Eastern Europe.
7．Therefore，a good command of English will greatly benefit me in my work. 因此，善于运用英语能够大大地使我的工作受益。
8．A solid foundation of English means chances and opportunities.一个扎实的英语基础就意味着机遇。
3．Others feel learning English is nothing but a burden. 其他的人认为学英语只是一种负担。

[写作内容] 1．以约 30 个词概括短文内容； 2．用 120 个单词就“一个家庭是否应该有两个孩子”这一主题发表你的看法，
内容包括以下要点： (1)你是否赞成二孩政策，并用 2～3 个理由或论据支撑你的看法； (2)谈谈你自己作为独生子女或有兄弟姐妹的体会。
[写作要求] 1．写作过程中不能直接引用原文语句； 2．作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称； 3．不必写标题。
2．提出建议或进行呼吁 若是反映社会现象或某种行为的文章，学生可对此提出积极的呼吁，提出建 议或解决办法等。如： Therefore，it is suggested that you should make friends with people having different genders，characteristics or backgrounds. 因此，建议你应当与不同性别、性格以及背景的人结交朋友。
With reference to the new policy，some single­child parents can't wait to welcome new babies.However，many factors considered，some feel a dilemma associated with their decision to have one more child.For one thing，it seems beneficial as there are no other children in the family for the only child to associate with，and this may lead to the child feeling lonely at times，especially during va经历→叙述经历→发表看法、谈感受 2．注意事项：此类题型一般都要求学生“用自己的亲身经历或虚构的故事”对

专题五 书面表达
(对应学生用书第 93 页) [题型攻略]
读写任务 6 大解题技巧 1．仔细阅读所给短文，抓住关键词
一般而言，英语短文的主题句通常为首句或前两句，有时是首尾句。只要抓 住这些特征，也就抓住了短文的关键。 2．掌握内容要领，巧用同义词 实际上就是要求学生根据所学英语知识灵活运用同义词或近义词，并用不同 句式结构进行写作。当然，表述主题思想时，写作角度也要作相应变化。
In my opinion，online voting is an inseparable part of modern life and should be welcomed，since it is no more than a way to participate in public life.It makes no difference from ordinary voting events，in which candidates go around to seek supports.In addition，the Internet makes surveying and voting easy and convenient， regardless of time and space.Furthermore，voting on the Internet makes instant feedback possible.
China's economy is expected to grow at a medium speed in the coming years，so an increase is possible in the investment in the movie industry and the number of quality movies.Therefore，its box­office income will probably enjoy a slight increase.

我们可以从正反两方面来解读该要求：考生如果有意识地 去使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇，在这个过程中即使犯了少量 或轻微的语言错误，也可以不扣分，文章仍属于最高档次；相 反，如果考生仅使用基础词汇和基本句型，不能体现出较强的 语言运用能力，即使作文中无语法错误也不能给高分。这就要 求考生尽可能盘活英语词汇，尝试灵活使用较复杂的句型和结 构，使文章有声有色，从而提升得分档次。
第二讲
如何运用亮点词汇多增分
一份高考作文在阅卷时往往在1分钟内就被判定生死， 大众化的词汇、平庸的表达已使长时间工作的阅卷老师产生 了视觉疲劳。如果一篇作文中突然出现几个与众不同、让人 眼前一亮的词汇，阅卷老师的给分也绝不会吝啬！
高考英语书面表达评分标准对第五档的要求有这样一段 话：应用了较多的语法结构和词汇；语法结构或词汇方面有些 许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致。
②Our school photography club is going to hold an
International High School Student Photography Show. →An International High School Student Photography
1．他是一名优秀的足球运动员。 ①He is a very good football player.(一般) ②He is an excellent football player.(稍好) ③He is an outstanding/amazing football player.(更好) 2．这次会议非常重要。 ①The meeting is very important.(一般) ②The meeting is of great importance.(较好) ③The meeting is of vital significance.(更好) 至此，许多考生仍然感到困惑：为什么上面这些高级词汇 我都认识，而我却没有想到用它们呢？我很努力地背了很多靓 词妙语，考试时怎么一个也用不上呢？下面我们为考生集中解 决这一问题。