高考英语写作锦囊

英语高考日渐凸显了书面表达的权重。然而考试日近，在考前的很短时间内还能使书面表达再提高一步吗？回答是肯定的。高考书面表达测试，要求短文内容清楚连贯、结构完整、逻辑性强、主题突出、用词及文体恰当。教师在评分时主要关注内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的数量及准确性、上下文的连贯性与语言的得体性。

英语高考日渐凸显了书面表达的权重。然而考试日近，在考前的很短时间内还能使书面表达再提高一步吗？回答是肯定的。高考书面表达测试，要求短文内容清楚连贯、结构完整、逻辑性强、主题突出、用词及文体恰当。教师在评分时主要关注内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的数量及准确性、上下文的连贯性与语言的得体性。

以2008 年安徽题为例：

假定你是李华，David 是你的美国笔友。他对中国鼓励使用环保购物袋很感兴趣，来信向你询问此事。请你给他写封回信。主要内容如下：

感谢他的关注。简要介绍相关情况。谈谈你的感想。

注意：

词数100左右，信的格式已为你写好。

可根据内容要点适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

参考词汇：环抱购物袋---environment-friendly shopping

bag; 关注---concern.

Dear David,

I’m glad that you’ve noticed our efforts directed towards

environmental protection. Thank you for your concern.( David对中国鼓励使用环保购物袋很感兴趣，来信向你询问此事。感谢他的关注。两句话将问题说明白了，用directed引导的一个分词短语来体现语法结构的多样性。)

As too much use of plastic bags has caused serious white

pollution, our government encourages us to use

environment-friendly shopping bags. These bags are made of a

variety of material that can be easily treated when they become

rubbish. Besides, they can be reused. More and more people in

China have realized the advantages of such bags and started

using them.( 简要介绍相关情况，根据内容要点适当增加了that can be easily treated when they become rubbish等细节，以使行文连贯。这一段中besides很好地起到了承上启下的作用。)

I believe that the wide use of these shopping bags can

greatly improve our environment. This is one of the many steps

we are to make our country an even cleaner place.( 短信至此theme部分完成，谈个人想法了。)

上述短文分三段，连贯清楚，结构完整。在第一段中使用了非谓语动词短语，中间叙述部分有定语从句，最后一段又用了we are to make our country an even cleaner place 这样较为复杂的语言结构，达到了各项要求。对于中等程度的考生而言，写出这样水平的短文并不难。

结合2008年各地高考试卷，不难发现各道书面表达的题目做到了贴近生活、容易表达，所叙述的内容发生过、正发生或很快能发生的事。即使稍有难度的题目如湖北要求更换手机信，福建的英语招聘广告也没有超出考生认知和应当掌握的范围。

下面就以2008年北京卷作为实例，与同学们谈组织短文应注意的方方面面，了解什么叫好文，得分低的文章问题所在，如何改进。

假设你是红星中学高三一班的学生李华，为校刊英语园地写一篇题为“Our Spring Outing” 的英文稿件。 请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，叙述上周你们班从准备春游到春游结束的完整过程。

注意： 词数不少于60.

提示词：游乐园 amusement park 垃圾箱 bin

例文

Last week, our class decided to have a spring outing.

Everyone was creativity to enjoy the discussion about the

destination of the outing. Someone said to go the amusement

park. Someone said to go boating and then, our monitor said

“How about to go the mountain?” everyone agreed her idea.

So, next day morning, we began our outing. We arrived the

destination by bus. As we had planed before, everyone of us all

taking a big bag many plastic bags. Because, except playing, we

have another destinate is to protect the environment. The

mountain is so beautiful that we all very excited to climb the

mountain. During the way, when we found the rubbish on the

ground, we pick them up and then put them into our plastic

bags.

When we arrived the top of the mountain, we found a lot of

rubbish on the ground. It was so dirty so we cleaned the ground

clearly and carefully. After a short time, the ground was clean

again.

After we got down from the mountain, we put the rubbish

into the bin but before this, we part the rubbish in two kinds,

recycle or unrecycle. I think, spring outing was very useful.

上面是篇三类文。

第一段长处是基本介绍了第一幅画的内容，但是语言、语句错误较多，比如Everyone was creativity, 很可能是active;

Someone said to go the amusement park,常识告诉我们， 英语中没有say to do sth.这一用法。更不可能how about to go … ,

因为介词后面不是不定式。

第二段作者对第二幅画描述，依照常理，文章的重点应当是后两张画，但是作者却用了较多笔墨，给人喧宾夺主的印象，更何况作者根本就忽略了天气、季节、美景。此外语言语法错误频出，如：the next morning; We arrived at the

destination; As we had planned before; everyone of us all taking

a big bag many plastic bags中谓语是谁？we have another

destinate is to protect the environment姑且不论此句在文章中的作用，单就语法而言就无法说通，另外we all very excited to

climb the mountain，能这样写吗？正确写法是we were all

excited. 至于we pick them 的时态，与其他错相比，在这段中都算不得大错了。

在山上捡拾垃圾的第三段用词最明显的错误是we

cleaned the ground，与图示大相径庭。

最后结尾部分I think, spring outing was very useful. 与全文有何逻辑关系？

总之，描述上的疏漏和诸多的错误影响了达意。这样的小文只能不及格。

如果此文的作者能依照提示将第二幅画写足，文章的最后一句的useful换成unforgettable，至少能升格为这个档次的最高！那样的话不就是及格分了吗？

Last week, the students in my class decided to go out for a

spring outing. Some of us wanted to go to the amusement park.

Some wanted to go boating and some wanted to climb the

mountain. Finally we decide to climb the mountain.

I was a shiny day. All of us were happy. But when we

reached the top of the mountain. We foud that rubbish

everywhere! We picked the rubbish and threw them into the

dustbin.

I think, we shouldn’t throw the rubbish everywhere and we

should do our best to protect the environment. The more we do.

The more beautiful the earth will be!

同学们读过上面短文后会得到什么样的印象？肯定不佳！其实第一段交待第一幅画还是基本合格的，虽然we

decide是个时态错，但能看出是忽略。第二段寥寥三两句就把后面的三幅画解释了，这与提示从准备春游到春游结束的完整过程这一要求相去太远了！

其实本文的作者对语言的把握较强，凭他的水平把二至四几幅画描述清楚，从而晋升至二类文应当没有疑问，然而，