将劣势转化为优势地质类

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将劣势转化为优势(地质类)
在对这篇文章的修改中,我们把让原作者心中惴惴的劣势转化为他的优势。

原作者提到所受中专教育时闪烁其辞,似乎想躲开他这段历史。

不得已而进行的记述非常defensive,似乎干了什么见不得人的事。

其实,他的担忧是完全没有必要的。

老外们非常看重的是你的智慧和潜力。

如果你的起点比别人低得多,经受的磨难比别人大得多,而你取得了和别人一样甚至比别人高的成就,那恰说明你不仅勤奋努力而且聪明过人。

本作者没能上大学本科原不是自己的过错,但他在劣境中不断向上,最终进入了国家最高科研机构学习。

这完全没有什么不好意思说的。

所以,我们开篇伊始,就将他的背景和经历进行了概括的介绍,用他贫苦的出身和他日后的成就进行鲜明的对比,同时又提到他现在还志存高远。

这样就可以给人以深刻印象。

Born into a family beset with poverty, I had to give up a normal undergraduate university education in favor of vocational training before I finished high school. Exercising diligence to give full play to my intelligence, I parlayed my vocational career in the provinces into graduate studies at a top university in the nation's capital, Beijing. Now a Ph.D. candidate with China's topmost research institution and a postgraduate in a world-renowned program run out of Paris, I wish to vault to the forefront of the field of spatial statistics by pursuing doctorate studies at your university.
I made a most reluctant choice in 1986, when I finished my junior high school. In the entrance examinations for senior high school, I scored the highest total of grades in my county that year, making me eligible to join the privileged band of students at the best senior high school in my native Jiangxi Province. If I enrolled in that school, I would be virtually guaranteed acceptance into one of the country' top universities later on. But my family could not, in its destitution, possibly afford the exorbitant cost of sending me to that coveted school. In fact, they could not pay for my further education in any school. In a desperate effort to continue my education without putting any financial encumbrance on my family, I gave up on senior high school and went instead to the Changsha Nonferrous Metal College, a non-degree vocational training school that
waived all my tuition fees. Fighting against all odds, I pushed through four years of intensive studies in geology at this college by surviving on scholarships that I won every year.(这段话理清了原文的逻辑结构,使得自己出身贫苦、努力奋斗的特点得以突出,加强了说服力。


Upon graduation in 1990 with the second highest academic ranking among 120 students, I obtained a job working for the Jiangxi Geology Prospecting Bureau. The first project I worked on at the Bureau led to the finding of seven potential mineralization belts in Jiangxi Province. With this success, I was chosen, a year later, to join a team of geologists to prospect the Jinshan gold deposit field in the same province, a project funded by State Gold Administration. This project taught me different aspects of geological work. A significant part of my contribution to this project was that I developed a set of statistical prognosis models for gold deposit in Jinshan gold ore field, with which my colleagues and I circumscribed 10 promising prospecting targets. Eight of these were later found to be potential gold mines. This project was a significant boost to the China's gold industry and won us the prize of excellent performance among the geological prospecting teams of China in 1994.
(以下从略。

略去的部分大致讲:Thanks in part to my achievements at work, I won admission into the graduate program of mathematical geology at the Beijing University of Science and Technology in 1994. After obtaining my Master's Degree in 1997, I joined a Ph.D. program at the Chinese Academy of Sciences, which has decided to send me to Paris for advanced training.)。