argu_ets评分实验+很有意义+ouyang

对pooh的已判分argument的分析报告前篇：开头 Thesis和TS 还是首先把判据放在前面: Score: 4 Explanation of Score: A 4 paper presents a competent critique of the argument and conveys meaning adequately.

A typical paper in this category -- identifies and analyzes important features of the argument -- develops and organizes ideas satisfactorily but may not connect them with transitions -- supports the main points of the critique -- demonstrates sufficient control of language to express ideas with reasonable clarity -- generally demonstrates control of the conventions of standard written English but may have some errors Topic: The following appeared as a letter to the editor of a local newspaper. "Five years ago, we residents of Morganton voted to keep the publicly owned piece of land known as Scott Woods in a natural, undeveloped state. Our thinking was that, if no shopping centers or houses were built there, Scott Woods would continue to benefit our community as a natural parkland. But now that our town planning committee wants to purchase the land and build a school there, we should reconsider this issue. If the land becomes a school site, no shopping centers or houses can be built there, and substantial acreage would probably be devoted to athletic fields. There would be no better use of land in our community than this, since a large majority of our children participate in sports, and Scott Woods would continue to benefit our community as natural parkland."

Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument. Your Answer: In this argument, the author alleges that the best use of Scott Woods is to build a school there , thus a large majority of children could participate in sports at the same time Scott Woods could continue to benefit the community as a natural parkland. At the first glance, the argument seems reasonable, but a closer examination discloses that it is based on faulty reasoning which consequently detracts the validity from the conclusion. 借着这个机会要好好地分析一下argument的开头。让pooh和我都倒吸一口凉气的是ScoreItNow来了这么一句：Erater has not identified a thesis in your essay. A thesis is the most important sentence in an essay. 再仔细一看整个第一段都被判为了introductory material。（附ScoreItNow的说明：Introductory Material: Is this part of your introduction? An introduction attracts the reader’s interest and provides background information. It also contains your thesis sentence.）需要指出一下的是，虽然ScoreItNow说了―it also contains your thesis sentence‖，但是在pooh的issue里面introductory material和thesis statement是独立判定的（参见我前两天的帖子，pooh的issue第一段最后一句判定为thesis，而第一段前面的部分被判定为introductory message），而同时，在issue的技术分析时ScoreItNow给出的关于Introductory Material的说明和上文刚刚原封不动抄过来的这个是一样的。综上所述，这篇argument的确是没找到Thesis，而且这恐怕不是太好的事情，参见scoreitnow给出的对于thesis的说明：

1． thesis is the most important sentence in an essay.（argument里面没找到thesis时候给出的） 2．Is this your thesis? The purpose of a thesis is to organize, predict, control, and define your essay. （issue里面scoreitnow对找到的thesis做出的反馈信息，个人认为这句话值得记住！）

那么，如果说到organize，predict，control，define的话，有必要研究仔细了，argument到底是怎么开头的。没得说，一定是看官方范文：University of Claria的6-5-4分文章做个对比，看起来似乎比较典型：

claria 6 While the University of Claria appears to have an excellent reputation based on the accomplishments and reputations of its faculty, one would also wish to consider other issues before deciding upon this particular institution for undergraduate or graduate training.

Claria 5 While it is true that the facts presented in the above passage contribute to the idea that the University of Claria is a fine university, it can hardly be concluded from the propaganda that the University of Claria is the best university for every applicant.

应该说这两个都起到了统领全文的一个总起的作用(虽然我不敢保证这两句话就是典型的可被判为Thesis的句子，目前这一点缺乏证据)。让我们看看下面这个：

Claria 4分 The argument states that anyone who is looking for a quality education should choose The University of Claria based on the instructors they have to offer. The argument assumes that students can learn better from faculty members who are internationally renowned and who have been invited to universities in other countries to teach. The proof of their argument rests on the fact that two recent graduates have been candidates for the Nobel Prize in Physics, and that 75 percent