coordination and sentence combination

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Coordination and Sentence Combination
Simple sentences are easy to write; however, neither the writer nor the reader will be satisfied with a piece of writing full of simple sentences. Read the following paragraph.
Zhou En-lai was premier of China from 1949 until he died in 1976. He was born in 1898 in Huai’an. He graduated from a middle school in Tianjin. He went to Japan to study in 1917. He was in France on a work-study program from 1921 to 1924. He joined the Communist Party there. He soon returned to take part in Sun Yat-sen’s revolution. From then until after World War II, Zhou was a Communist leader. He was involved in the struggle against the Japanese invasion. He was involved in the struggle against the ruling of Chiang Kai-shek’s Nationalist Part y. He took part in Mao’s Long March of 1934-35. His success in creating a united front was a crucial factor in the eventual Communist victory and downfall of Chiang in 1949. He was foreign minister from 1949 to 1955. He played a key role in strengthening C hina’s ties with other developing countries. Zhou’s name still inspires Chinese people in their drive towards modernization.
What do you think of the paragraph? You have found the problem if you have found it childish or boring. The paragraph moves from simple sentence to simple sentence. A piece of writing is choppy and disconnected when it is stuffed with simple sentences; it sounds immature.
One way to achieve mature writing is through coordination. Coordination in writing is the use of coordinating conjunctions and connective adverbs to form compound sentences. It links simple sentences (independent clauses) and shows close relationships between ideas. A coordinated sentence (a compound sentence) links ideas better than two separate simple sentences. Now, read the following paragraph, which, with simple sentences coordinated, is an improved version of the previous paragraph.
Zhou En-lai was premier of China from 1949 until he died in 1976, and he was born in 1898 in Huai’an. He graduated from a middle school in Tianjin and went to Japan to study in 1917. He was in France on a work-study program from 1921 to 1924 and he joined the Communist Party there, and soon he returned to take part in Sun Yat-sen’s revolution. From then until after World War II, Zhou was a Communist leader, and he was involved in the struggle against the Japanese invasion and against the ruling of Chiang Kai-shek’s Nationalist Party. He took part in Mao’s Long March of 1934-35, and his success in creating a united front was a crucial factor in the eventual Communist victory and downfall of Chiang in 1949. He was foreign minister from 1949 to 1955, and he played a key role in strengthening China’s ties with other developing countries. Zhou’s name still inspires Chinese people in their drive towards modernization.
Can you sense the improvement over the previous simple sentence paragraph? It sounds better now.
Simple sentences can often be coordinated through the use of coordinating conjunctions and connectives if they are closely related and equally important.。