高考英语读后续写之一 ——动作描写 调研课(共29张PPT)

Summary S h o w, d o n ’ t t e l l
题材 题材
Skill1: 主语一致的主要动作≥2: Skill :从 面部/肢体和语言心理 多个方面编织
主+谓语动词A ，B and(then) C 动作面
Skill 2: 当出现两个动作， 1.Doing...,主句, doing...
原句
动作A
动作B
动作C
Seeing the gift, the boy widened his mouth in
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hesitation.
Homework
分解动作微写作： 1.She won the first prize in the race. 2.Tom thanked Jay.
Thank you !
Show, don’t tell
读后续写之“动作链”和动作“面”
读后续写作为记叙文，其核心只有一个，那就是“人”。因此一 切的笔墨，都是为了塑造人物形象，使人物更加饱满。
How to make your continuation writing vivid and attractive?
Dialogues
心理
肢体
面部
Encouraged by the teacher’s words, Lucy raised her
hand, whispering, “I’ll do it.”
主+谓, doing... and doing...
1.他欣喜若狂，在雨中又唱又跳。

“I volunteer.”
一个 动作
动作面
镜头1 肢体动作描写
整体
镜头2
面部神态描写
镜头3
语言描写
局部 镜头4
心理描写
One
面部
肢体 语言
Aragorn斩钉截铁，振臂一挥，下令： “放箭！”
Wearing a decisive and resolute look, Aragorn waved his hand down, ordering, ”Release the arrows!”
A, B and C.连动
她冲过去，蹲下来，一把抱住儿子。
谓语句
She dashed forward, squatted down and
gathered his son into her arms.
动作链
他瞄准小牛脖子，扔去绳索，套住了小牛。
He aimed at the calf’s neck, threw the rope and tied the calf successfully.
urgency demands immediate actions. When he
approached to the cow, he aimed at the calf’s neck, threw
and tied it successfully. (107)
第四档 18.5
Two
Review of the Story
先前动作
过渡动作
Transit-
action
Postaction
后续动作
Action
动作链
瞄准
先前动作
过渡动作 扔
绳索
套住

中英文区别:中文中可以出现一系列动词，英文中不允许，所 以英文写作非常依赖连词。
1. S + action A, B and C
2017年6月浙江卷读后续写中写到“用肉把狼引 开”的情节。 =拿出肉+瞄准狼+扔出去
He took out the meat, aimed at the wolf
and threw it straight to the fierce animal.
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3.洛容处娜在添此加走处内添容到加在内此窗容处在添前此加，打开窗子，抬头望向夜空
ball upJ.ordan shot the ball.
How to divide the action into small parts(slow motions)
1. S + action A, B and C
比如“搭车去警局”这个动作 = 拦车 + 上车 + 告诉目的地
He stopped the taxi, jumped in with the suitcase and told the driver, “ Go to the police station,please.”
动作链: 一连串的动题材作构题成材 画面
Skill 1: 描述一系列的动作。如果是同一个主语做了两个以上动作， 可用 : 主+谓1, 谓2 and (then) 谓3 Skill 2: 当出现两个动作，而前后两个动作逻辑主语一致时，可用: 1. 非谓语, 主+谓 非谓语: ①动作有明显先后: Having done sth 2. 主+谓, 非谓语 ②主动:doing ③被动done

As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me? Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again. (2016.10浙江)
Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落) somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy,she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now. Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake.
No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.