高中英语读后续写技巧
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新高考英语读后续写
写作技巧提升详解
技巧一：动作描写：心中有“画”，笔下有“话”(画面感)
通过分解动作使之更具有画面感
①Hethankedtheman,tookoverthereinsandledtheponyinmydirection.
②Seeingthis,Mr.Rowecameuptohim,croucheddownandaskedinatoneoftendersolicitude,“What’sup?”
③Withapangofnervousnessseizinghishearttightly,hestoodinfrontofthedoor,wonderingabouttheoldman’sreactiontobeing
disturbedasecondtime.Finally,hesummonedupallhiscourageandknockedatthedoor.
情景1：碰到难题，苦思冥想。
Whatacomplicatedanddifficultmathproblem!Onesecond,LittleJohnrestedhischininhishandandfiddledwiththepencil.The
next,hefidgetedinhisseatandscratchedhisheadoverandoveragain,nothavingthefaintestideahowtoworkitout.
情景2：成功爬上山顶。
Themagnificentlandscapeunfoldinginfrontofme,asenseofrefreshmentspreadthroughme.Involuntarily,Istretchedoutmyarms,tiltedmyheadandexclaimedindelightatthetopofmyvoice,feelingthecrispbreezeonmyface.
鉴赏案例1：请根据所给句子内容，结合原文，续写后面的句子。
句子①：Suddenly,aboyranaroundthecornerandcrashedintomebeforeIcouldjumpedoutoftheway.[习作展示和赏析]
学生句子1:Asresult,wefelldownandthegiftboxdroppedtotheground.
学生句子2:Wefellhardtotheground,andmygiftboxflewfrommyhandsandlandedonthestreetwithathump.
【点评】句子1只停留在发生了什么，属于叙述。而句子2我们重重的摔在地上，礼物随之飞出去砰的一声落在地上，则是通过
fell,flewfrom,landedon这三个动作来描写杯子掉落的场景。这个句子不仅讲述了事件发生的经过，还给句子加上了声音“with
thump”!要使一个平淡的叙述句子转换成一个生动形象的描写句子可以通过分解动作或给句子加上声音，来使描写更具有画面
感。
添加符合情境的细节描写使之更具有画面感。在人物动作描写之外添加其心理、神态等，有时也可以辅以适当的环境描写。
给动作“涂脂抹粉”①Withhisheaddrooping,Johnreluctantlyturnedaround,andslowlyinchedhiswaytohisroom.
②Inasobbingvoice,headmittedandregrettedhavingcheatedinthetest.
③Withoutamomentaryhesitation,IelbowedmywaythroughthecrowdinthedirectionofLegosectionandallthewaykeptcallingmybrother’sname,anoteofuneasinessinmyvoice.
情景3：发现一只受伤的小鸟。
Onthegrassaheadlayaswallowwithanoutstretchedwingthatwasobviouslybroken.Seeingthis,Little
Bettywalkedswiftlybesidethepoorlittlecreature,stoopeddown,andlifteditinhercuppedhandsgentlyand
carefullyasifholdingapreciousandfragiletreasure.
给动作“配上声音”
给动作“加上表情”Takingadeepbreath,hesummonedupallhisremainingcourageandgentlyknockedatthedoor.Witha
flickerofangerinhiseyes,theoldmanopenedthedoorandsnappedinacoldvoice,“Whycomeagain?!”
Timidly,theboystretchedouthishandsandstuffedhisdogfigurineintotheoldman’spalm.“Forme?”askedthe
man,confusionregisteringonhisface.Theboynodded,“Ihopeyou’lllikeit.”Eyeslingeringonthefigurine,the
man’sfacesoftened,and,muchtotheboy’sastonishment,itcreasedintoafaintsmile.“Thankyou,”utteredthe
oldman,hiseyesred-rimmedwithtears.情景4：久别之后回到家。
Thefamiliarsightcameintoview.Involuntarily,heclutchedthehandleoftheluggagemorefirmlyand
quickenedhispacetowardshishome,hisminddriftingtothesurprisedanddelightedexpressiononhismother’s
face.Reachingthedoorstep,hepausedtocomposehimself,pushedopenthedoorandexclaimedindelight,
“Mum,I’mhome,”withhiseyessparklingwithanticipation.
给动作“融入心理”①ButI,consumedwithintenseangerathersuddenappearanceinmydoorway,justcastheranindifferent
glance,ignoredherpleadinglookandutterednoword.
②TornbetweentheoverwhelmingyearningforthedelicatebootsandthemelancholyforourdepressingChristmas,Icametoahalthalfwaytotheshoestore.
情景5：憧憬假期。
Withhischininhiscuppedhand,hesattheremotionlessly,allhismindonwheretospendthe
long-anticipatedholiday.Actually,allthesedayshehadbeenrackinghisbrainstofigureoutaplan.Thenallofa
sudden,hehadanidea—howaboutgoingtothebeachforrelaxation?“Yes,that’sit!”hewhisperedtohimself,
hislipscurvingintoabeamingsmile.
给动作“添上环境”①Anxiouslystrainingmyeyes,Iscannedthetoystore,buthewasnowheretobefound.Outside,thunderand
lightningcontinued;inside,chaoticnoiseranginmyears.Deepanxietydominatingme,Iwasonthevergeof
tearsandstoodrootedinblackness,hopelessandhelpless.
②Worsestill,whenthefiredieddown,thewholewildernesswasenvelopedinpitchdarkness,withnooneinsight.Whatkeptuscompanywasthechillwindthatruthlesslywhippedmyface,graduallydevouringthelast
bitoftheremaininghopeinmyheart.
情景6：得知被心仪的大学录取。
TheAdmissionLetterclutchedtightlyinmyhand,Ijumpedupanddownwithundisguisedexcitement.Tired,
Ilaydownonthegrassandhummedmylittletunealongwiththebirds’twittering.Thebreeze,thoughabitcool,
blewintomyheart,dispellingtheanxietythathadhauntedmeforalongtime.
鉴赏案例2：请比较以下两句话，哪句话更符合例1中的情境。
1:Whenwegottotheapartment,weploppeddownonchairs.Theairfeltwarmer,andtheroomseemedbrighter.
2:Whenwegottotheapartment,weploppeddownonchairs.Theairfroze,andtheroomseemeddarkerthanitsupposedtobeatdusk.
【解析】句2更符合。解析：回到家后，我和Aide生气的坐在椅子上。此刻，我们的心情应该是沉重的。仔细阅读句子1、2,不
难发现，句子2更符合当时的情景。我们俩因为心爱的礼物被撞碎了，又伤心又难过。此时空气犹如凝固了一般，整个家看起来比往日显得更加沉闷了。可见，添加符合情境的环境描写能使描写更具画面感。
写作案例3：请用描写的方式将下句话中的省略部分补充完整。
"Itisn'tfair!Whydidthathappen？"Aidencried.Hislowerliptrembled…
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参考答案："Itisn'tfair!Whydidthathappen?"Aidencried.Hislowerliptrembled,hiseyeswerefilledwithtearsandhishandsshook.
