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《2024年高考英语读后续写高分宝典》专题02 2024浙江首考卷读后续写(一英里长跑)讲义及满分语料9类50句背默（解析版）目录真题呈现 1 答案解析 2 研读材料 3 难点讲解 4 情节梳理 4 满分语料分类背诵50例 5 满分秘诀一、无灵主语（时间、地点、情感、自然现象、动作行为类名词作主语） 5 满分秘诀二、动作链（A and B型，A, B and C 型） 5 满分秘诀三、独立主格结构/with复合结构 6 满分秘诀四、非谓语短语（作主语、宾语、状语、定语、宾语补足语等） 6 满分秘诀五、形容词+副词开头 6 满分秘诀六、特殊句式（倒装+强调+省略）7 满分秘诀七、介词短语位于句首7 满分秘诀八、环境描写8 满分秘诀九、主题升华句9 范文背诵9阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Eva spent the first week of high school trying to keep her head above water. One of the major headaches for her was finding her way in the huge school building. It was a six-story building. On each floor, hallways stretched in four directions, leading to classrooms, laboratories, and teachers’ offices. Somewhere in the building, there was also a library, a cafeteria, and a gym.Having a poor sense of direction, Eva found it impossible to get around in such a huge building. All the different hallways and rooms were too much to think about, let alone commit to memory. She decided that she would memorize where her classes were and then pretend that the rest of the place didn’t exist.In her fast P.E. class, Eva was shocked when Coach Pitt announced that everyone had to run one mile around the track outside. She searched the faces of her classmates for signs of panic. There was nothing she feared more than having to run a whole mile.To Eva, “a mile” was used to describe long distances. It was ten miles from her home to her grandfather’s, and that always seemed like a long way, even in a car!When Coach Pitt blew his whistle (哨子),Eva figured she would be left in the dust.However, w hile some of her classmates edged ahead, others actually fell behind. “It’s just the beginning,” she thought. “I’ll come in last for sure.”Soon Eva began to breathe hard, with her heart pounding and legs shaking. Feeling desperate, Eva started using a mind wick on herself. She stopped thinking about the word “mile.” Instead, she focused on reaching the shadow east on the track by an oak tree up ahead. Then she concentrated on jogging to the spot where the track curved (拐弯). After that, she tried to see if she could complete her first lap. One lap turned into two, then three, then four.Paragraph1:When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at t he finish line, Eva was surprised._______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph2:Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building._______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________In the vast expanse of her school, a girl with poor directional skills struggled to navigate and often got lost. One day, during gym class, she observed a unique way to find her way - following the shadows of trees.As the sun cast its rays, the girl noticed how the shadows created patterns on the ground, guiding her path. She took a leap of faith and followed the shadows, surprising herself with each turn and stretch. Her efforts were noticed by the teacher, who praised her innovative thinking.Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building. She used the shadows to navigate the school hallways, find her classes, and even locate the school's various facilities. This newfound skill not only helped the girl navigate her school but also instilled in her a sense of confidence and adventure. She learned excitedly that with a little creativity and observation, any challenge could be overcome. And with each step she too k, she left behind a legacy of inspiration for those who followed in her footsteps, knowing that even without a clear sense of direction, there's always a way to find one's way.【解析】【导语】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了高中生Eva因为方向感不强，经常在学校里迷路，在一次体育课上教练要求他们沿着校园跑步的时候Eva发现跟着树的影子能找到方向，她通过这个方法重新认识到了校园。
10 原文分析促进续写重构续写点的挖掘策略续写原文含有丰富的故事情节和语言知识，学习者在续写时，通过不断回顾原文，寻找续写线索，即续写点，来展开续写，确保续篇情节合理、衔接良好、主题明确、内容丰富、语言风格一致。
续写材料为“续”提供语境，具有支架功能，能促进语言理解和有效输出。
从故事背景、故事情节、情感线索、所给段首句、文章主题、语言风格六方面对续写点进行挖掘，能帮助学习者高效地展开续写，从而写出高质量续篇。
（一）从故事背景中寻找续写点故事背景即对人物、事件起作用的历史情况或现实环境。
对应着记叙文六要素中的5W。
此处主要分析时间（When）和地点（Where）。
人物（Who）、事件（What）、原因（Why）将在故事情节和情感线索这两部分讨论。
以浙江卷2021 年 1 月高考读后续写为例。
该读后续写语篇类型是记叙文，主题语境是人与社会，故事原材料讲述了作者在万圣节发生的一件事。
故事发生的时间是万圣节前夕。
此处涉及到国内外文化差异，中国学生对于万圣节的文化背景知识了解较少，因而影响了对续写点的捕捉。
首先，万圣节是国外全民关注和参与的节日，雕刻南瓜是一项主要活动。
在续写中第二段，可以写视频发布到网上之后，作者受到了网民的关注，pumpkin 也成为了a minor celebrity，人们争相与之自拍；其次，因为故事是在国外发生的，在续写中可以补充视频上传的网站是You Tube；另外，作者要把头从南瓜里拔出来，可以求助消防部门，这一点和中国是相同的；最后，万圣节雕刻南瓜的活动氛围是轻松愉快的，作者家庭选举最大南瓜的传统比赛活动氛围也是欢乐的，因此，在续写中要体现出和谐的家庭氛围。
故事发生的地点是在家里厨房内，另一个地点是作者的部分掏空的南瓜内部的半封闭空间，空间相对固定和狭小。
在续写中，可以从两个角度来扩大写作的空间。
首先是用心理空间和动作来弥补物理空间的不足，即用主人翁的心理描写和动作描写弥补情节的不足。
专题02如何巧妙构思读后续写的故事情节之高分技巧、高分手段和易错点❖故事构思读后续写能否拿否拿高分某种程度上取决于故事情节的构思。
这就要求考生做到学会分析情节。
分析故事情节一般从故事六要素着手，即who, when, where, what, why, how。
然后根据故事情节发展线和主人公的情感变化来续写文章。
简化为：第一步：分析段首句。
根据其关键信息，提出问题，预设故事情节发展走向。
第二步：关注段首句和续写部分的衔接。
思考续写第一段和第二段的衔接。
根据情节发展构思末句，通过收尾呼应，达到文章升华，体现故事主题。
❖高分技巧❖高分手段读后续写的故事情节设计中，矛盾冲突和转折总体上应当体现清代袁枚《随园诗话》中“文似看山不喜平”的意思，即写文章好比观赏山峰那样，喜欢起伏，不喜欢平铺直叙。
所以读后续写的冲突就体现了这种跌宕起伏，而最终的矛盾冲突会变为积极的正能量。
❖易错点在续写过程中，应当体会原材料故事中的语言特点，从人物动作描写，场景描写，情感情绪描写，人物心理和神态外貌描写等方面进行润色，提升语言表达的准确性，完成语言风格高契合度的短文。
典例剖析【2022年高考浙江卷6 月】阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
I needed to do something in my community (社区) in order to complete the community service hours required to graduate from high school. Some of my friends had signed up to spend time at a soup kitchen, so I did, too. It seemed like a good thing to do.I thought that we would just be passing out dinners to those in need, but I found out we would be doing everything from preparing to serving the dinner. We began preparing the food, from mixing salad dressing to separating frozen meat. Much still needed to be done before dinner was served, but already outside the building many homeless people were gathering. It wasn’t until a couple of hours later that we opened the doors and began serving dinner.As the line of people came toward me, I got a little scared. I’d come face to face with the hom eless: How should I act? How would they treat me? Would they hate me for having more than they did? While some of the people looked very friendly, some of them looked so dangerous. I didn’t have too much time to worry about it. I was assigned (分配) to serve the salad with the lady next to me. She smiled at me and said if I needed help, she’d be right there, which I found quite comforting.I had never seen so many people wanting food. They were of all ages and nationalities. Most of them wore clothes that were torn and dirty. Some looked like they had tally given up on life, while others seemed to be making the best of the situation, smiling and joking. Some were better off than others, but they all needed a good meal and a warm place to eat. It saddened me t o think of how many people there were who didn’t have a place to call home and the only food they got came from a soup kitchen.注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
