2. We should show our respect for old people, our parents and our teachers.→改为Not only for old people should we show our respect, but also for our parents and our teachers. 常用句式: ①Our school calls on us to devote ourselves to doing... 我们学校号召我们投身于…… ②Dear fellow students, let’s spare no efforts to... 亲爱的同学们,让我们不遗余力的去做…… ③Only in this way can we... 仅仅通过这样的方式我们才能……
1. 文体信息: ①文体:应用文; ②语体:非正式语体; ③人称:第一人称; ④中心大意:为建设和谐社会向全省中学生写一封倡议书。 2. 主导时态:一般现在时。 3. 内容要点: ①交代倡议活动的原因; ②具体的倡议内容(人与社会、人与人、人与自然); ③自己的态度。 4. 温馨提示:格式正确,条理清晰,语言具有感染力。
As for myself, I will study even harder and try my best to do all the above. Dear fellow students, let’s start right now and spare no efforts to build a harmonious society! Yours, Li Xiaoping
本文符合倡议书格式,时态,人称运用正确,要点完整,表达流 畅,语言地道,行文连贯。作者对过渡词及几个固定短语的运用准 确,如:First of all, Secondly, Most important of all, Finally,使内容 阐述清晰明了。最后一句呼吁,感情真挚,非常有感召力。 如能把下列句子加以优化则文章能更上一个档次: 1. First of all, we should love our motherland. →改为 First of all, It’s our motherland that we should love, because it’s our root, our support and our soul.