Some experts believe that it is better for children to
begin learning a foreign language at primary school
rather than secondary school.
Do the advantages of this outweigh the
disadvantages?
Foreign languages have increasingly gained popularity
among students these years, given that the world is
shrinking and each country now has a more frequent
contact with the outside world. Many people[c1] argue that
children should begin learning a foreign language at
elementary school, instead of waiting until [c2] they enter
secondary school. There are several reasons for this.
Firstly, despite the fact that parents do not want to put too
much pressure on their children, they also do not want them
to lose at the starting line. This means, if the kids start to
learn a foreign language early, their parents are relieved
from the thought that their kids will have to catch up later
on, which is true to some extent.
On the other hand, it is scientifically proved that children
tend to learn a language faster before the age of 12. As far
as I know, my friends who started to learn English when
they were six or seven now have a much more satisfactory
English level than those who started at12 or 13. So it is wise
to have foreign language course in primary school
curriculum.
Additionally, learning a foreign language at an earlier age
can lay children a solid foundation for future
studying.Rather than just learning a language itself,
children learn a lot more about the learning methods. As a result, when they enter secondary school, they can explore
more languages and enrich their knowledge by extensive
readings.
The only disadvantage of learning a foreign language at
primary school might be one more course and pressure.
However,primary schools can introduce advanced teaching
methods to tackle this problem,such as playing games and
role play, and ensure that children can enjoy the language
learning process.
In conclusion, the advantages of learning foreign languages
at primary school rather than secondary school outweigh
the disadvantages.
注释：
[c1]people 和expert是有区别的，注意看题目指的是哪类人
[c2]til
Total: (6.5+6.5+7+7.5)/4=7分
Task response 6.5 分
1. address all parts of the task 7分
首先列举的advantages，然后提出disadvantage，紧接着驳斥了这个disadvantage。这一步证明了你都懂题目不仅是要让列举利弊还要做出比较
2. present a clear position throughout theresponse. 7分
主体赞成利大于弊，并在说弊的时候有力的反驳了 ，最后一段明确提出自己的立场。
3. main ideas may be unclear 6分
需要改进的段落
主体第一段 你写的是家长觉得孩子不能输在起跑线，但是题目里面说的是专家提出这个观点，把家长和专家混在一起，混淆了题目观点的出发角度。这里要扣分。
需要保持的段落
主体第二段 用你朋友的经历做例子完全可以！只要支持你的论点就行
主体第三段 学习一门外语的方法可以应用到其他语言学习上，确实！能看到不同语言的内在联系，很不错！
主体第四段 驳斥反方观点并提出一些解决方法
4. conclusions may become repetitive 6分
不要在结论里面把题目照搬一遍
Coherence and cohesion 6.5 分
1. logically organize information and ideas7分
2. present a clear central topic in each paragragh 7分
我个人比较支持一个段一个点 这样能保持段落长度一致 同时表意清晰
3. may use cohesive devices mechanically 6分
看下你的 主体段落的开头，一下 firstly 一下on the other
hand 一下additionally 这几个连接词属于不同类别 建议使用同类连词，如果是firstly 那后面就用 secondly thirdly, 如果是要用 on the other hand, 前面搭配使用 on the one
hand。 否则给读者的印象是你学过连词 但是不太会用。
4. 另外代词的使用不错，this, it, they 都能正确使用
Lexical resources 7分
1 use a wide range of vocabulary and allowsome
flexibility and precision
首段的对题目的paraphrase做的相当不错！
但是末尾段基本属于照抄题目了，很可能不算在字数里面。建议你学习一下结尾段的写法。
定冠词和不定冠词的使用很好
活用动词 learn learning teach teaching
形容词副词能正确使用
2. use less common vocabulary well
popularity foundation curriculum satisfactory extensive
3. use of collocation
Lay a solid foundation, language learning process,
advanced teaching method, extensive readings.
Grammar 7.5分
1 use a wide range of structures.
简单句 即符合基本主谓宾结构
There are several reasons for this.
宾语从句 第一段many people argue that xxx第三段 it is
scientifically proved that xxx
长句 第二段despite of xxx, xxx/ 第四段rather than xxx, xxx
第五段 第二句话用and连接的两个句子中间还有插入语
such as xxx
时间状语从句 第三段 my friends who xxxx when they were
xxx 第四段 when they enter xxx
2 the majority of sentences are error free
3 make occasional mistakes
第四段 Rather than learn a language itself 记得要和后半句的动词形态一致，后面已经是原形learn了，用rather than就得用原形。
