高分满分作文借鉴

名校高分满分作文借鉴话题一：旅游／风俗习惯外国友人来信咨询在北京要注意的风土人情和文化习俗，请你写一封回信介绍并提醒他在北京需要注意的风俗习惯并如何得体的表现，包括打招呼、餐桌礼仪及家庭法则。

提示词：Greeting table manners home rules范文一：（101中学15分）How to behave when we are travellingNowadays, more and more Chinese people prefer to travel around the world. They bring the Chinese traditional virtue abroad, but at the same time, some of their behaviors really damage Chinese reputation in the world. It’s necessary for us to learn how to b ehave when we’re travelling.Above all, we’re supposed to be civilized while visiting famous places. Instead of doing boring things like cutting names on historical sites, listening to the guides are encouraged in order to show our respect for the country.It’s also a bad behavior to take photos secretly without permission. In the restaurant, it’s impolite to talk with friends loudly, which may annoy others. Why don’t we learn some polite words in foreign language and try to communicate with local people? This really helps us to have a better understanding about different cultures.Why are we supposed to do so? Good manners make our tour more comfortable and pleasant. As we all want to have a harmonious environment to live in, polite behaviors leave a good impression on everybody’s heart. Our courses are symbol of China, and each Chinese should pay his own effort.（189字）点评：整体看，作者运用长句的能力很强，而且文章的组织性很强，内容很充实，全篇无语法错误再加上高级的长句运用，当然必须满分。

1.开篇内容很充实，有标黄长句，用词地道，搭配贴切，给评委很好的第一印象。

2.中间标红句子运用without这一小词非常地道。

3.结尾部分也有标黄长句，再次形成前后呼应，开头结尾都有高级长句坐镇，所以文章从内容从形式上都是一流水准。

实用借鉴词组及句型：1.bring the Chinese traditional virtue abroad把中国美德带到国外2.damage Chinese reputation in the world破坏中国在国际上的名声3.have a better understanding of … 更好掌握…4.it’s also a bad behavior to… =we are not supposed to… 不建议做某事5.want to have a harmonious environment to live in想要有一个和谐的生存环境6.be symbol of sth. 是某事的象征7.sth. leave a good impression on everybody’s heart.某事在某人心中留下好的印象8.instead of doing sth, doing sth. is encouraged in order to… 与其做某事（不好的事）… 做某事（好事）是值得鼓励的，因为这样可以（后加好处）范文二：（101中学15分）How to be a civilized touristFrom time to time it was reported that Chinese tourist behave badly when travelling. It seems particularly important to tell everyone how to be a civilized tourist now. First of all, we are obligated to act properly, or rather, be polite and follow local rules when travelling. Obviously, littering and damaging historical sites by engraving letters, which are common among tourist, are hateful. We are definitely not supposed to do so. T o be civilized, we should behave politely. As well-educated people, tourist are not supposed to talk loudly in public, which is really annoying. In addition, I suggest learning some local customs before we go travelling, so that we won’t break the rules unconsciously when travelling. The locals will be glad to see us behave in their ways and we’ll feel a lot more relaxed to enjoy our trip, avoiding the cases when we’re blind about how to behave properly and politely. These are all about how to be civilized tourists. And we should never ignore that our behaviors not only represent our personal qualities and manners, they also symbolize the qualities of we Chinese.（185字）点评：这篇文章没有上一篇好，原因在于1.没有分段。

层次性不够强。

2.句型相对比较单一，长句结构不够丰富3.使用的高级词汇以及地道用法也不如上一篇多但这篇还是得到满分的主要在于无语法错误，表示建议类的句型比较丰富，并且句型在使用的时候比较地道的体现在于有插入语的运用。

实用借鉴词组及句型：1.It seems particularly important to… 做某事看起来尤其重要2.to be a civilized tourist 做一个文明的游客3.we are obligated to act properly我们有责任举止妥当4.break the rules unconsciously无意中没有遵守规则5.The locals will be glad to see us behave in their ways 按照当地人的做事风格来做会让他们很开心。

（此处如果能引用Do as Romans do 也不错。

）6.represent our personal qualities代表我们的个人品行7.symbolize the qualities of we Chinese.代表我们中国人的品行（注意这里两个代表“represent”和“ symbolize”体现词汇的丰富性）范文三：（101中学14分）How to behave when we are travellingIt is believed that “having good manners” is one of the Chinese cultures. Unfortunately, many Chinese tourists behave badly while they are travelling. As a student, everyone should behave as a civilized tourist.Everyone plays an important part while travelling, especially in foreign countries. First of all, we are not supposed to speak loudly when travelling as enjoying the beautiful scenery is far more important. Of course, we are not expected to little or damage the historical sites. The famous places of interest always full of people. Instead of jumping the queue, we had better stand in line and wait.The behavior of person reflects the spirit of his nation. It is reported that more and morestill long way to go, I believe that the better we behave, the better future there will be.（180字）点评：此篇和前两篇满分作文相比，差距较大1.最大的一个问题就是重复语意太多，几乎每一句的后面都有一个when/while (we are)travelling. （共出现5次）此外句子类型不够丰富，有车呼噜话来回说之嫌。