读后续写微技能
微技能 1 如何梳理原文情节和情感
1.概括原文情节和或主旨
方法一：用完整叙述的思维模板何时何地何人由于何原因做了何事，经过是什么、结果怎样。
方法二：主要人物角度思维模板主要人物开始做了什么、然后做了什么、接着做了什么、最后做了什么。
情感是通过叙述、描写、说明、抒情、议论来表达。
微技能 2 动态动词对故事节奏的影响
动态动词：表示一种运动状态。
静态动词包涵：1.感觉类动词，see ，hear,smell,taste, feel (感到)，2. 表感情或情绪类动词excite, disappoint,amaze,annoy等。
3. 表示心理或者精神活动类的词like,appreciate, miss 等。
比较：
①Unpacking the box, I saw a delicate watch inside.
②I unpacked the box and my jaw dropped, a delicate watch inside.
案例请用动态动词改写下面句子：
1.After the earthquake,in the corner Lily just had her dog named Floppy by her side.
修改后：地震后，角落里lily身子蜷得（snuggle）更靠近她的狗Floppy了。
2.There is a broken car on the road.
修改后：这辆车失控了，撞到了墙上。
小牛试刀
请用动态动词改写下面句子
1.The sisters were reading and I felt the room was very quiet.
修改后：我只听见纸在轻轻地翻阅。
2.Wilbur Walked up to the fence and saw one board was loose. He removed the board. In a minute he had been out of the fence and was standing in the long grass outside his yard.
修改后：从栅栏中间挤出来
3.Seeing his mother was asleep, he had his shoes in hands and walked out of the room.
修改后：踮起脚尖（tiptoe）朝门走去然后溜出房间。
4.The story tickled john’s funny bone and he felt joyful but his sister didn’t think it was any good.
修改后：咯吱笑（giggle）个不停
5.I was walking alone on the street in the darkness, which scared me so much.
修改后：我的心砰砰直跳。
6.His parents were secretly discussing in the bedroom. He tried to listen but heard nothing.
修改后：把耳朵贴贴在门上
7.His mother was complaining about his bad performance at school. He didn’t want to listen.
修改后：把手捂住耳朵以便听不到（block out）他妈妈说的内容。
8.I didn’t see any familiar faces in this room.
修改后：扫视(cast eyes) 房间四周但是没有看见
9.No sooner had she heard the news than she was unconscious on the floor.
修改后：她两腿发软弯曲(buckle)、晕倒(collapse)在地板上
10.She felt extremely tired after a whole day’s work.
修改后：拖着(drag) 双脚
微技能三控制句子长短，调节句子节奏
长句10至40个不等，平均25-20字。
短句一般是指句子结构简单、词语较少的句子，如主谓宾、主谓或主系表结构，字数少于10词。
长短句合理运用让文章结构合理，利于体现人物性格、突显文章主题。
如何改写短句：
描写急迫、紧急的场景时，主要依靠短句营造气势。
改写短句的6种方法：运用倒装句、形容词、非谓语、同位语、动态动词、名词。
1.用倒装句改写短句。
分为部分倒装与完全倒装，语篇中的功能是：连贯语意、凸显信息、平衡结构、体现修饰或强调。
案例请把划线部分改为短句。
原句：The bell rang and Lily’s mother came out. She picked up the phone immediately to see if it was from her husband, out of contact for several days.
修改后：
2.运用形容词改写短句。
形容词（组）可在句中做状语，如原因状语，一般置于句首；做伴随状语，句首句末都可。
用形容词可以让句子变得简洁。
案例请把划线部分改为短句。
原句：We shared a thirst to return. Although we didn’t speak out, it was undeniable.
修改后：
3.运用非谓语改写短句。
非谓语使句内语意紧凑。
案例请把划线部分改为短句。
原句：She laughed. She was so excited that her eyes were sparkling with excitement.
修改后：
4.运用同位语改写短句。
同位语可以是名词、代词、名词短语或从句，位于名词或代词之后。
案例请把划线部分改为短句。
丰富了句子内涵信息，又让句子变得简洁。
原句：He had done it all. Gerald was a little man and he was hard-headed and blustering.
修改后：
5.用动态动词改写短句
案例请把划线部分改为短句。
原句：Late roses began to blossom,climbing up the wall and becoming clusters.
修改后：
6.运用名词改写短句巧妙运用名词使句意更加明确、句子更加精炼。
案例请把划线部分改为短句。
原句：It seemed that they had been known each other for a long time.
修改后：他们感觉像老熟人（acquaintance）
小牛试刀
请采用适当的方式改写下列短句。
1.原句：The man heard people shouting after him, “He is a thief!”He kept running until he spotted a taxi, and then he went in at once.
修改后：然后出租车来了，他进去了。
2.原句：John walked in the wind and he felt the wind was extremely cold and he was hungry.
修改后：
3.原句：Her mother lifted her hand to her mouth and she was so sad that tears filled her eyes.
修改后：非谓语
4.原句：Mr Wilson lived in a grand house, but his neighbors all called him a lonely man because he had no family.
修改后：
5.原句：It was so difficult for him to keep his balance, so he staggered back and toppled over on the ground.
修改后：三个并列动态动词
6. 原句：He entered the shop, picking out the items he wanted within several minutes because he often came here to buy daily staff.
修改后：同位语
如何扩写句子
1、运用背景信息，如原因、结果、目的等写长句
原句：He went jogging every morning.
修改后：为了碰见小区里面的一个女孩子
2、运用细节描写写长句加入外貌描写、神态描写、心理描写、环境描写等，使描写更具画面感。
原句：He stared at me.
修改后：他盯着我，蹒跚（stagger）向我走来, 满脸通红、双拳（fist）紧握(clench)
3、运用修辞手法改写长句。
原句：He was hungry.
修改后：。
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