托福高分作文,满分范文
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For the development of a country, it is more important to spend money on education of
very young children than to spend on universities.
Education plays an increasing fundamental role in our days. We tie the future of our
country to the level of education standard and government is projecting to increase the
funding for students. But there is a substantial divergence of opinion. Some say that the
significance of educating our young children outweighs that of elder students and the
government should elevate the investment on the former. In my opinion, spending more
on universities is a great deal.
First, through the investment on university we can harvest an instant result on the
improved employment rate. The USA is suffering the aftermath of economy crisis in 2008.
Countless companies are shrinking their salary and cutting employees; highly educated
graduates are anxious for hunting an ordinary job. Therefore the request of new job
opportunity is increasing correspondingly. To fill the unemployment rate gap, government
can invest more money to enhance the education level in the universities, whose teaching
qualities link to the employment rate directly. For example, the university can make use of
the money into the extension of library and purchase of more books, motivating more
students to engage into library marathons. Or investing the money on the recruitment of
senior professors, who can not only deliver more practical knowledge to students, but also
use his/her strong personal network to recommend some excellent students to some
positions.
Second, numerous scientific research achievements come from universities labs. Doing
experiments is not so
cost-efficient but brings many progressions to our lives and our
society, which is closely related to everyone. So labs need more funding. For example,
enjoying a good reputation in the domain of physics, Stanford University uses her linear
accelerator, which is the largest in the world, to accomplish many researches. But starting
up the machines needs electricity much enough to light up a town for a whole year. Is that
worthy? Certainly it is. Seemingly not environmental-friendly at first sight, these
researches in Stanford are exceedingly important; without them, the nuclear power cannot
get its proper and safe use on generating electricity, which prohibits many trees from
being cut down and cuts the potential carbon emissions invisibly. There is no doubt that
the government should pay the bill, providing solid funding for universities to explore the
science.
Admittedly, scientists are more mindful of the preliminary education for young kids.
According to research, 5-10 year-old is the golden time to cultivate children’s intelligences.
Kids are unconsciously influenced by environmental elements such as the sophisticated
teaching facility. But we should take it with a grain of salt. Young children are prone to be
distracted in multi-media classrooms because their brains are not mature enough to resist
temptations of online games, which can be played secretly on the class. So, spending too
much money on young children is merely an exercise in vain.
In sum, although educational funding on young children cannot be left on the sidelines,
only the universities can live up to the great funding and make best use of it. Put more
money on the latter when facing limited budgets.
预估分数:4.5
论据展开的推理不错,叙述也清晰,说服力强
积累不错,单词量等都挺大的,但叙述的时候要注意细节
用词方面,有的地方不必那么正式。
Independent Task Level:Good
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We need tohave different sources of news and information to know which one is
the realone or who is telling the truth.
The ability of independent thinking, virtually symbolizes the [the去掉]intelligence, is
treasured nowadays. Lazy modern people tend to be misled by some single-sourced news,
because the same event can be reported in different versions which may either agitate
public anger or reassure their anxiety. Therefore, limited information will encumber people
to dig the truth. In my point, grasping varies sources of news are the cornerstone to
explore and identify the reality.
We are in the maze, the seemingly shortcut to the truth may be the deliberate pitfall. To
bury the truth or cover the crime, the government will control the public opinions and exert
influences on people. [这里可以说take advantage of 就不用这么累赘地说两个短句了]So
the sole source of news is not trustworthy. For example, in North Korea, numerous
dissidents are being muzzled by the leader. Kim Jong Eun cuts the connection to the
outside world and instills his extreme thought to citizens, making them believe that they
are the “happiest man” [men] in the world. Under such totalitarianism, it is difficult for
people to know their real life. But there are still some people who can secretly surf the
Internet, knowing their life and the truth of their nation from CNN or BBC. Increasing