作文批改记录第一篇：作文批改记录作文批改记录一、写作内容本次习作的主要内容是看图作文，图中表现的是关于孩子们进行小足球比赛的一个场景，要求学生们认真观察图中所描绘的情景，观察人物的动作、神态，另外展开想象，推测小足球赛的激烈程度，然后把自己看到的和想到的用生动的语言表达出来。
二、成功之处本次习作的成功之处是同学们观察都很仔细，并能加上自己的想象，把自己看到的和想到的能融合在一起。
三、不足之处本次作文不足的地方有：（1）观察仔细，但描写的不全面，都能重点写守门员，但对其他的观众描写的不够具体。
（2）有的同学想象丰富了，以至于脱离了图画本身，不符合看图作文的要求。
四、优劣平台1、观察仔细，描写全面，并能按一定的顺序来写，语言生动形象的:2、描写的不够全面或想象太丰富，语言不够生动形象的：作文批改记录本次作文要求写自己游览过或了解到的一处自然景观，可以写著名的旅游景点，也可以写身边的景物。
从选材上来说没有大的问题。
有28%（7人）的同学得优，得良的占53%（17人），另外还有19%（6人）的同学为中或差。
主要问题有：1、书写不认真。
2、错别字多，有的还写拼音。
3、标点符号使用不准确。
一大段中只有几个标点符号，不会正确断句。
4、段落划分不准确。
有的同学整篇作文只有一段。
5、主题不突出，有的题目虽然是写某某地方，但整篇文章中几乎没有任何语句来描写景物。
有的虽然写到了景物，但所占篇幅太少，一些与主题不相干的内容，如去之前准备了什么东西，怎么去的，吃了什么东西等等这样的内容占的篇幅较多，偏离了主题。
6、精彩的语句或段落太少。
只有少数同学注意到了对语句的提炼和修饰，运用了比喻、拟人等手法，但多数作文文字平平。
第二篇：作文批改记录Income Sources of College Students1.The reasons of this phenomenon can be listed as the following: Above all, the conception of love between American and Chinese is different.American pay more attention to....Another reason is that the policy of education is different.2.I think Chinese students depend onparents too much.American students are more independent.I think Chinese parents take too care about their children.So students can’t live alonw without parents’ help.And chinese students lack of the spirit of independent.3.American students get the income from their parents just 50% and 35% comes from part-time job.But the Chinese students get the income from their parents up to 90%.4.Why so different between American students and Chinese students get the income.5.Students 50% of the income sources is from their parents.6.词性使用：There have a big different beween …7.There is just a/one half income sources come from their parents.8.The income sources of the Chinses college students is …9.The income source of American and Chinese students are major form their parents, the former is 50% and the later is 90%.10.An american students can get income half from theirparents 35% their earn by themselves and 15% from scholarship.But the Chinese students’ income are most given by their parents about 90% and the money from part-tome job and scholarship is very small.11.For most college students, the income must from their parents.12.So why?13.First, culture14.first, different sense..15.In America, the students ned 50% from their parents, about 35% come from their part-time job.16.The Chinese col lege students’ income sources are 90% from parents, 5% from part-time job and 5% from scholarship.17.pay attention to do somethingcapitalize第三篇：作文批改记录作文批改记录一、写作内容本次习作的主要内容是看图作文，图中表现的是关于孩子们进行小足球比赛的一个场景，要求学生们认真观察图中所描绘的情景，观察人物的动作、神态，另外展开想象，推测小足球赛的激烈程度，然后把自己看到的和想到的用生动的语言表达出来。
