contact with the outside world. Many people[c1] argue that children should begin learning a foreign language atelementary school, instead of waiting until [c2] they enter secondary school. There are several reasons for this.
Firstly, despite the fact that parents donot want to put too much pressure on their children, they also do not want themto lose at the starting line. This means, if the kids start to learn a foreignlanguage early, their parents are relieved from the thought that their kidswill have to catch up later on, which is true to some extent.
On the other hand, it is scientificallyproved that children tend to learn a language faster before the age of 12. Asfar as I know, my friends who started to learn English when they were six orseven now have a much more satisfactory English level than those who started at12 or 13. So it is wise to have foreign language course in primary schoolcurriculum.
Additionally, learning a foreign languageat an earlier age can lay children a solid foundation for future studying.Rather than just learning a language itself, children
（下面评分项里面的小分意在指出你的优势劣势）
Task response 6.5 分
1. address all parts of the task 7分
首先列举的advantages，然后提出disadvantage，紧接着驳斥了这个disadvantage。这一步证明了你都懂题目不仅是要让列举利弊还要做出比较
2. present a clear position throughout theresponse. 7分
主体赞成利大于弊，并在说弊的时候有力的反驳了，最后一段明确提出自己的立场。
3. main ideas may be unclear 6分
需要改进的段落
主体第一段你写的是家长觉得孩子不能输在起跑线，但是题目里面说的是专家提出这个观点，把家长和专家混在一起，混淆了题目观点的出发角度。这里要扣分。
需要保持的段落
主体第二段用你朋友的经历做例子完全可以！只要支持你的论点就行
主体第三段学习一门外语的方法可以应用到其他语言学习上，确实！能看到不同语言的内在联系，很不错！
主体第四段驳斥反方观点并提出一些解决方法
4. conclusions may become repetitive 6分
不要在结论里面把题目照搬一遍
Coherence and cohesion 6.5 分
1. logically organize information and ideas7分
2. present a clear central topic in eachparagragh 7分
我个人比较支持一个段一个点这样能保持段落长度一致同时表意清晰
3. may use cohesive devices mechanically 6分
看下你的主体段落的开头，一下 firstly 一下on the other hand 一下additionally 这几个连接词属于不同类别建议使用同类连词，如果是firstly 那后面就用 secondly thirdly, 如果是要用 on the other hand, 前面搭配使用 on the one hand。否则给读者的印象是你学过连词但是不太会用。
4. 另外代词的使用不错，this, it, they 都能正确使用
Lexical resources 7分
https://www.doczj.com/doc/c718749369.html,e a wide range of vocabulary and allowsome flexibility and precision
首段的对题目的paraphrase做的相当不错！
但是末尾段基本属于照抄题目了，很可能不算在字数里面。建议你学习一下结尾段的写法。
定冠词和不定冠词的使用很好
活用动词 learnlearning teach teaching
形容词副词能正确使用
2. use less common vocabulary well
popularity foundation curriculum satisfactoryextensive
3. use of collocation
Lay a solid foundation, language learningprocess, advanced teaching method, extensive readings.
Grammar 7.5分
https://www.doczj.com/doc/c718749369.html,e a wide range of structures.
简单句即符合基本主谓宾结构
There are several reasons for this.
宾语从句第一段many people argue that xxx第三段 it is scientifically proved that xxx
长句第二段despite of xxx, xxx/ 第四段rather than xxx, xxx
第五段第二句话用and连接的两个句子中间还有插入语 such as xxx
时间状语从句第三段 my friends who xxxx when they were xxx 第四段 when they enter xxx
2 the majority of sentences are error free
3 make occasional mistakes
第四段 Ratherthan learn a language itself 记得要和后半句的动词形态一致，后面已经是原形learn了，用rather than就得用原形。
雅思7分大作文范文批改和解析 距离雅思写作7分你大概还有3个步骤要走，是的，不是谁都可以轻轻松松活动雅思高分的。今天给大家带来了雅思7分大作范文批改和解析,希望能够帮助到大家，一起来学习吧。 雅思7分大作范文批改和解析 雅思写作提高第一步：结构(5.0 - 5.5) 问题：出国留学的优点(the advantages of disadvantages of study abroad) 同学：One reason for those who decide to go overseas to get a higher degree is that they believe they can get better education in certain fields. That is to say, different universities in different countries have their specialized courses and rich resources can be provided according to their needs and requirements. Another reason is that they can learn a foreign language in a more efficient way. There is no denying that living in an all-round English environment and being affected by local culture make people quick learners. 解析：出国留学和高学历完全是两回事(出去读初中和高中都算出国);出国就是better education，在国内就不是better? 出
1.依靠：dependon=relyon 2.导致：leadto=cause=resultin 3.源于：resultfrom=stemfrom 4.使用：use=apply 5.利用：takeadvantageof=makeuseof 6.带来：bring=provide=offer=supply 7.努力做：makemosteffortsto=workhardto=striveto 8.花时间做：spendtime/money/energy/lifeonsth/doingsth 9.专注于：focuson=payattentionto=concentrateto 10.分心/打扰： distractsbfromsth=disturbsb/sth=interruptsb/sth=obsesssbwithsthdistraction=diver sion=disturbance 11.起到作用：servetodo=playarole in doing = have a function to do = make a contribution to (对……做出贡献) 12.目的是：attempt to do = have an intention to do/of = have a purpose to do/of = have an objective to do/of = aim at doing/sth 13.为了：in order to do = for the purpose of doing/sth = with the view of doing/sth 14.有利于：bring benefits to = be benefitial to = bring advantages to 15.有害于：bring harms to = damage sth = ruin sth = undermine sth = be harmful to/for = be detrimental to/for 16.威胁到：endanger sb/sth = risk sb/sth = threaten sb/sth = place sb/sth into the danger/risk/threat 17.影响：have (positive/negative) effects/influence/impacts on sth 18.强调：stress = emphasize 19.忽略：ignore = neglect = overlook 20.联系：connect to/with = communicate with = contact to/with = have an access to = associate with(和……相关) 21.处理：deal with = cope with = handle = tackle 22.避免/预防/远离：keep A from B = prevent A from B = A avoid B = A refrain from B = A be away from B
雅思5分剑桥7 Test1 小作文范文 学生原文： The graph shows the total number of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country from 1979 to 2004. In this graph, we can see the consumption of chicken experienced a erratic rise of almost 100 Grans per person per week during 25 years. Then, the consumption of fish always rank the last. And the consumption of the Lamp underwent a erratic decline from 1976 to 2004. In the spite of the fact that from 1979 to 1984 withnessed a wild fluctuation rise in consumption of Beef, when it experienced a sharply decline over last 20 years. While the consumption of chicken underwent a erratic rise from 1979 to 2004. After that, the consumption of fish almost remain the same level at 50 grans per person per week in 25 years. And subsequently, the comsuption of lamb showed a moderate decline, dropping by almost 50 Grans per person per week in 25 years, and the consumption of chicken surpassed it in the early 5 years.
在雅思写作的四大评分标准当中，连贯性与衔接性是其中的一项评分标准，连贯性与衔接性其中一方面就是用连接手段（即连接词）来实现的。连接词本身是非常繁琐的知识，在教授连接词时也会遇到很多困难，那么学连接词首先把连接词词性掌握并掌握各词性的用法，学连接词就简便得多。朗阁海外考试研究中心分析认为，连接词大体可分为四种词性：连词，副词，介词和短语，它们各自的用法又不一样。 连词 如but, and,后接句子，连接并列句时前面逗号可有可无。当然连词也可放句首，这一点在考官范文里有很多体现。 例：In the past, populations were partly regulated by frequent war and widespread disease, but in recent years the effects of those factors have been diminished. (并列句中的连词) 段落开始：But how should it be achieved ( 连词放句首) 介词 如before, despite：后接名词或动名词 例：Before talking about the essential role of death penalty, you have to think about the meaning, and the purpose, of any kind of punishment. 副词 副词连接并列句，前面用句号或分号，后面用逗号（当然，如果副词前用句号，那就是另起一句了，不称之为并列句） 例：In many places today, children start primary school at around the age of six or seven. However, because it is more likely now that both parents work, there is little opportunities for children to stay in their own home up to that age.( 副词另起一句) The crime rate is increasingly high; therefore, the government needs to enforce more laws to curb this situation. ( 副词在并列句中) 短语 如on the contrary, in addition：用法和副词用法完全一样 例：They feel this is one area of life where they have the right to make decisions for themselves. For that reason, it would seem that the best approach would be work by persuasion rather than compulsion. The government plays a crucial role in scientific research; on the other hand, private companies hold certain advantages in conducting scientific research. ( 短语在并列句中) 掌握连接词的四大词性及用法以后，连接词的教学和运用就容易展开。我们可以参看考官范文，看看各类关系的时候考官如何使用连接词，使文章凸显出来。 因果关系 根据词性及用法可归结于: because / since/ as / for, so (连词), because of/ due to / owing to/ as a result of (介词) for that reason/as a result/ therefore/ accordingly (短语和副词) 例：I think the amount of waste produced is also as a result of our tendency to use sth once and throw it away. （可代替词汇because of/ due to / owing to）
Some people think government should pay for public libraries in every town, while others think itis a waste of money because people can access information from the internet. Discuss both viewsand give your own opinion. It is argued that government should invest more money in public libraries; the other people believe that we can search the information from the internet, so government should not cost money in public libraries. I agree with this idea. Surfing on the internet is the fashion way to search information in modern life, there are a lot of people use computer or mobile phone to find some information on the internet. It is because people believe that internet is the most convenient platform to find the key. People can get all the information they want effectively, rather than go to the library cost a large amount of time to read book. On the other handthe books in libraries are though many times of check and reserve, that can ensure the authority of every book. So some people would like to go to library to read the book and find the truth. Especially in medical book, if doctor find some information is wrong, it will affect the patient who was saved by the doctor. Considering the
Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? Foreign languages have increasingly gained popularity among students these years, given that the world is shrinking and each country now has a more frequent contact with the outside world. Many people[c1]argue that children should begin learning a foreign language at elementary school, instead of waiting until [c2] they enter secondary school. There are several reasons for this. Firstly, despite the fact that parents do not want to put too much pressure on their children, they also do not want them to lose at the starting line. This means, if the kids start to learn a foreign language early, their parents are relieved from the thought that their kids will have to catch up later on, which is true to some extent. On the other hand, it is scientifically proved that children tend to learn a language faster before the age of 12. As far as I know, my friends who started to learn English when they were six or seven now have a much more satisfactory English level than those who started at12 or 13. So it is wise to have foreign language course in primary school curriculum. Additionally, learning a foreign language at an earlier age can lay children a solid foundation for future studying.Rather than just learning a language itself, children learn a lot more about the learning methods. As a result, when they enter secondary school, they can explore more languages and enrich their knowledge by extensive readings.
雅思大作文常用词汇替换 大家都知道，写雅思作文的时候有个很大的问题就是腹中纵有千言万语，表达出来却都是小学词语。词汇量是拦路虎，但是要克服它却不是一朝一夕的事情。怎么办呢，最高效的办法就是背诵老师们精挑细选出来的常用替换词语了。下面的单词是我们单词系列里的第一部分，针对所有话题的大总结，也是最最常用的。每组里第一个单词是大家最常用的，后面的单词是它的替换词。需要注意的是，每个词的意思还是有小小的区别与常见的搭配，这点也是我给班上的学生讲解的重点，自己备考的同学可以通过查字典和例句来体会这些单词用法的区别。 1.people n. individuals, men, human beings, humanity 2.solve v. resolve, tackle, address, deal with 3.reason n. cause, 4.destroy v. ruin, devastate, harm(伤害), 5.influence, n. effect, impact v. affect 6.dangers n. hazards, perils 7.obvious adj. apparent, evident, manifest 8.good adj. beneficial, positive, meaningful, desirable, 9.bad adj. harmful, negative, baneful 10.famous adj. well-known, prominent, eminent, fame n., reputation n. 11.big adj. huge, vast, enormous, tremendous, immense 12.main adj. major, dominant, predominant, 13.poor adj. deprived, impoverished, poverty n. 14.rich adj. well-off, wealthy, affluent, prosperous +country/economy 15.enough adj. sufficient, adequate, abundant 16. a lot of, a host of, a great deal of +可数/不可数名词 a vast number of +可数 a large amount of + 不可数提示: great, vast, large可以互换位置 17.advantage n. benefit, merit, strong point 18.disadvantage n. drawback, weakness, weak point 19.improve v. enhance, boost, promote, augment, 20.claim v. argue, insist, assert, 21.agree with v. conform to, accord with 22.disagree with v. oppose to, be against 23.ban v. forbid, prohibit prohibition n. 24.obstruct v. hinder, impede obstruction n. obstacle barrier
WRITING TASK 2: Band Descriptors (public version) Band Task response Coherence and cohesion Lexical resource Grammatical range and accuracy 9 ?fully addresses all parts of the task ?presents a fully developed position in answer to the question with relevant, fully extended and well supported ideas ?uses cohesion in such a way that it attracts no attention ?skilfully manages paragraphing ?uses a wide range of vocabulary with very natural and sophisticated control of lexical features; rare minor errors occur only as ‘slips’ ?uses a wide range of structures with full flexibility and accuracy; rare minor errors occur only as ‘slips’ 8 ?sufficiently addresses all parts of the task ?presents a well-developed response to the question with relevant, extended and supported ideas ?sequences information and ideas logically ?manages all aspects of cohesion well ?uses paragraphing sufficiently and appropriately ?uses a wide range of vocabulary fluently and flexibly to convey precise meanings ?skilfully uses uncommon lexical items but there may be occasional inaccuracies in word choice and collocation ?produces rare errors in spelling and/or word formation ?uses a wide range of structures ?the majority of sentences are error-free ?makes only very occasional errors or inappropriacies 7 ?addresses all parts of the task ?presents a clear position throughout the response ?presents, extends and supports main ideas, but there may be a tendency to over-generalise and/or supporting ideas may lack focus ?logically organises information and ideas; there is clear progression throughout ?uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-/over-use ?presents a clear central topic within each paragraph ?uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision ?uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation ?may produce occasional errors in word choice, spelling and/or word formation ?uses a variety of complex structures ?produces frequent error-free sentences ?has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors 6 ?addresses all parts of the task although some parts may be more fully covered than others ?presents a relevant position although the conclusions may become unclear or repetitive ?presents relevant main ideas but some may be inadequately developed/unclear ?arranges information and ideas coherently and there is a clear overall progression ?uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical ?may not always use referencing clearly or appropriately ?uses paragraphing, but not always logically ?uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task ?attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy ?makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation, but they do not impede communication ?uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms ?makes some errors in grammar and punctuation but they rarely reduce communication 5 ?addresses the task only partially; the format may be inappropriate in places ?expresses a position but the development is not always clear and there may be no conclusions drawn ?presents some main ideas but these are limited and not sufficiently developed; there may be irrelevant detail ?presents information with some organisation but there may be a lack of overall progression ?makes inadequate, inaccurate or over-use of cohesive devices ?may be repetitive because of lack of referencing and substitution ?may not write in paragraphs, or paragraphing may be inadequate ?uses a limited range of vocabulary, but this is minimally adequate for the task ?may make noticeable errors in spelling and/or word formation that may cause some difficulty for the reader ?uses only a limited range of structures ?attempts complex sentences but these tend to be less accurate than simple sentences ?may make frequent grammatical errors and punctuation may be faulty; errors can cause some difficulty for the reader 4 ?responds to the task only in a minimal way or the answer is tangential; the format may be inappropriate ?presents a position but this is unclear ?presents some main ideas but these are difficult to identify and may be repetitive, irrelevant or not well supported ?presents information and ideas but these are not arranged coherently and there is no clear progression in the response ?uses some basic cohesive devices but these may be inaccurate or repetitive ?may not write in paragraphs or their use may be confusing ?uses only basic vocabulary which may be used repetitively or which may be inappropriate for the task ?has limited control of word formation and/or spelling; errors may cause strain for the reader ?uses only a very limited range of structures with only rare use of subordinate clauses ?some structures are accurate but errors predominate, and punctuation is often faulty 3 ?does not adequately address any part of the task ?does not express a clear position ?presents few ideas, which are largely undeveloped or irrelevant ?does not organise ideas logically ?may use a very limited range of cohesive devices, and those used may not indicate a logical relationship between ideas ?uses only a very limited range of words and expressions with very limited control of word formation and/or spelling ?errors may severely distort the message ?attempts sentence forms but errors in grammar and punctuation predominate and distort the meaning 2?barely responds to the task ?does not express a position ?may attempt to present one or two ideas but there is no development ?has very little control of organisational features ?uses an extremely limited range of vocabulary; essentially no control of word formation and/or spelling ?cannot use sentence forms except in memorised phrases 1?answer is completely unrelated to the task ?fails to communicate any message ?can only use a few isolated words ?cannot use sentence forms at all ?does not attend ?does not attempt the task in any way ?writes a totally memorised response IELTS is jointly owned by the British Council, IDP: IELTS Australia and the University of Cambridge ESOL Examinations (Cambridge ESOL). 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General Knowledge 注意： 1. 作文要有实质内容。 2. 6分：260~270个词左右；6.5分：280个词以上。 3. 没有必要一定写长难句，但要提高句子的准确度和多样性。必须在对英语造句知识准确理解和把握的基础上流畅地写出复杂的长句子，而不是刻意、机械地拉长句子。（准确、严密、多样、清晰） 4. 对于零星出现的少量拼写错误，只要不引起歧义，是不会导致严重扣分的，但要努力减少作文里出现拼写错误的可能。 5. 考场里没有时间打草稿，但可以在印考题的试题纸上把看到题目后头脑里闪现出的ideas、考前准备的相关加分词汇和句型大致记录一下。 6. 当考官要求停笔时即使还没有写完也一定要停下来，否则会被判为违纪行为。 7. 考前练习一定要尽可能模拟实战：下载标准格式的答题纸；用铅笔写作，每行10~12个单词；严格控制时间，Task 1不应超过25 min，Task 2不应超过45 min。备考初期，可将Task 1和Task 2分开练习，但在考前一周内，必须演练完整的写作考试全程，严格控制时间，写完后再核对或请有经验的老师批改。 8.
如果Task 2准备得较为充分，有信心在40min写出一篇自己满意的议论文，那么就先完成Task 2。反之，就先写Task 1。 9. 齐头式：每段开头顶格写，每两段之间空一行 缩入式：每段开头后退3~4个字母的距离，每个段落之间不空行 10. 可使用I/we、被动语态，但不宜滥用；可将But/So放在句首 11. 7分或以上的作文对于用词的要求是准确，而不是冗长 ?Topics ?学术类写作的特殊要求 1. 不接受缩写形式 2. 不使用非正式口语表达 3. 英美拼写不能混淆 4. 用词要有特色 5. 句式不能过于短促 6. 句式不能过于干瘪 7. 感情色彩不能过于强烈
●批改By Will 本次批改严格按照ILETS小作文评分标准进行。ILETS小作文评分项：TA (内容的完整性), CC (连贯性及一致性), GRA (语法范围及精准度), LR (词汇资源)。文末会进行总评及打分。 ●文中标识： 用词不当逻辑错误语法错误修改添加 The graph provides the information concerning the average temperatures on a month basis in three major cities.(介于有两张图，都要提一下。此后可加一句：In addition, clearly demonstrated in the table are the time of sunshine on an annual base.) (补充：在下一段看到了你对于后一张图的总结，这样的话建议你在开头强调一下“the first graph”) As can be seen from the graph, there is a similar trend in terms of average monthly temperature between London and New York during the period from January to December. (可加入连接词：To be specific) The average temperature in London (介于你后面写的是两个城市的数据，这里改为：for both of the cities) gradually rises from January to July both in London and new york, reaching a peak at 25 degrees and 20 degrees respectively. After that, the following 4 months witness a dramatic decrease both in London and new york. In comparison (这里不妨分段), an opposite trend is found in Sydney. It (这是悉尼的第一句，建议写出来具体的量词至少：The temperature) keeps stable at 25 degrees from January to march, after which the average temperature undergoes a considerable descent, reaching the bottom point at approximately 15 degrees, before there is (there is 没必要了，可以去除) a steady ascent by 10 degrees. It is obvious that the table depicts the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. As we can see from the statistics, when it comes to the total annual hours of sunshine, new york ranks first, followed by Sydney ,London lies last. Specifically, people who live in new york enjoy 2,353 hours of sunshine every year, which is similar to people living in London with 2,473 hours (不是人和人像，是时间长短像，改为：which is similar to the amount of sunshine for those in London). However, only 1,180 hours of sunshine are found in London annually. 总评6.5（TA6.5 CC6.5 LR6.5 GRA7.0） 1.语法变化上从句数量可以了，分词的使用还可以多一些。偶尔试试一到两句倒装，如我在开头给你的那个。 2.趋势等词汇变化可以，试着多换换题目话题词汇，如people=residents=citizens
Task：Some people think getting old is entirely bad. However, others think that life of the elderly in modern world is much easier than in the past. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. 思路解析： 2016年雅思收官之战的作文来了一道新题，问当今社会老年人的生活是不是很 糟糕?说是新题，因为本题以前从未原题出现过，但关于年龄的话题却不缺少。 比如2010年7月10日“年轻人是否适合担任政府要职”，2012年3月10日“老 龄化现象的原因及解决方法”，2012年3月31日“年轻人和老年人谁的价值更 高?”，2013年6月8日“政府是否应该对老年人养老提供财政支持?”，2015 年1月1日“年轻人当领导，行不行?”，2015年4月11日“老年人与年轻人 争夺工作职位，怎么办?”等等。 本题需要论证的对立观点是：年老很糟糕 vs. 当今社会年老没有那么糟糕。那 么，变老有哪些坏处呢?首先，当然是身体条件没有以前好了，甚至可能出现多 种疾病(物质层面);其次，不工作了，与人的联系少了，心里可能会感觉孤单， 甚至感觉没有价值了(精神层面);最后，变老后对社会的依赖程度更高，给社会 增加了压力(社会层面)。那么，这些问题在当今社会是不是得到了解决呢?首先， 医疗条件的改善有助于保持老年人的身体状况;互联网的出现有助于缓解老年人 的心理孤单问题;物质水平的提高也降低了老年人给社会造成的压力。如此观之， 现代社会老年人的生活的确容易多了，但我的观点是：外部条件只是改善老年人 生活的一个方面，最重要的还是老年人自己要积极调整心态，努力适应退休后的 生活，从而过一个更幸福更祥和的晚年。 Sample answer： Getting old is a natural process that nobody really likes. When you reach a certain age, your physical conditions will inevitably deteriorate, and you may suffer from various kinds of diseases. When you retire, you will feel isolated because your previous work contacts may be all gone, then you may feel useless to the world. Furthermore, when you get too old, you’ ll have to rely heavily on the support from others, either physically or emotionally, and your life will become a great pressure to your family and the whole society as well. For all these bad things about getting old, many people argue that the life of the elderly today is much easier than in the past. In the first place, medical advances nowadays have made it possible for the old people to stay sound and healthy for quite a long while even after they retire. Diseases such as diabetes, hypertension and heart attack which might have