读后续写
一、考纲解读
提供一段350词以内的语言材料，要求考生依据该材料内容、所给段落开头语和所标示关键词进行续写（150词左右），将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。
二、原题分析
①原文材料350词以内，所续写文章150词左右。
②原文多是情节丰富的记叙文，偶有少量的议论文。
③原文给出10处左右的标有下划线的关键词语，所续写短文应使用5个以上。
，每段开头语已经给出。
④续写部分分为两段
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⑤续写部分分为两大类别：
1)半开放性质。必须依据文章的语境逻辑推理续写。
2)完全开放性质。可以依据文章的思路，自己发挥。
三、注意事项
①词数要求。②与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度。③内容的丰富性和对所标出关键词语的应用。
④应用语言结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性。⑤上下文的连贯性。
四、评分原则
①本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。
②评分时，先根据所续写短文的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量、确定或调整档次，最后给分。
③词数少于130的，从总分中减去2分。
④评分时，应主要从以下四个方面考虑：
(1)与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；
(2)内容的丰富性和对所标出关键词语的应用情况；
(3)应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；
(4)上下文的连贯性。
⑤拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个重要方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。
⑥如书写较差以致影响交际，可将分数降低一个档次。
续写导练（一）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
When I was eleven years old, I had a big accident. I get scared even now when I think about that time. I went skating near my house. There were many people, and I saw some of them falling on the ice.
It was my first time to go ice skating, so I was nervous. I was wondering how to skate.
I went with a friend who was very skillful. He spent some time teaching me how to skate,but I didn’t learn much. He left me and skated all around. As soon as he left, I fell down. I envied the other people because they
could skate well.
I was bored because I kept falling so I took off my skates and just walked around on the ice in my shoes. It was cold and my hands were frozen.
Suddenly, I stepped on something that was not hard. What was it? It was a weak place in the ice. When I stepped there, I sank under the ice. I thought that I was going to die, but I did my best to grab something to get out from under the ice. I tried to grab the edge of the ice, but it was very difficult for an eleven-year-old.
It seemed like a very long time, like a year. Then, fortunately, someone helped me. He grabbed my arms and pulled me up. So, I lived and I’m still alive today.
I thanked him. At that time, my friend came back. I was annoyed at him because he was supposed to take care of me, but he didn’t. He w as embarrassed. When I took a taxi home, the taxi driver was surprised and asked what had happened. I didn’t want to say anything because I was tired and scared. Even now, whenever I think about that time, I feel uncomfortable. I don’t want to go skating a gain even now.
注意：
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1:
It was long before I went skating once again,______________________________________ __________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________
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However, ever since then I haven’t found any time to go skating, ___________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________
续写导练（二）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Mr Brown lived in a house less than two miles away from his office. He was therefore able to drive home every day for lunch. Every time he drove in the middle of the day, he found cars were parked in the road outside his house, and there was no room for his own car. He had to drive two blocks farther before he could find a place to park. Then he had to walk home. This made him very angry.
He had put up a board which read “No Parking!” in the garden facing the road, but nobody seemed to pay attention to it. People only obeyed a police notice, but not a private one. There were no parked cars where there was a blue board with white letters on it: Police Notice—No Parking!
Mrs Brown suggested that he should steal a police notice. But he dared not, being afraid of going to prison. She then suggested that he make one just like a police notice. He said he was not a policeman and couldn’t use the word “police”. He decided that he must find a way out and started thinking hard. For several days, the smell of paint filled the house. One night he showed his life a new notice board. It was painted in white letters on a blue board: Polite Notice—No Parking!
“Oh,”Mrs Brown said, “but you told me you weren’t going to use the word ‘police’. That’s exactly like a police notice.”
“Is it?” he asked. “Look again.”
She began to laugh, “You are really rather clever.”
注意：
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1:
Why did Mrs Brown say her husband was really rather clever? ___________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________
Paragraph 2:
If the police discovered that the Browns were using a police notice,_______________________________
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续写导练（三）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
My mother used to ask me what the most important part of the body is. Through the years I would take a
guess at what I thought was the correct answer. When I was younger, I thought sound was very important to us as humans, so I said, “My ears, Mommy.”
She said, “No. Many people are deaf. But they are doing well in their life. You keep thinking about it and I
will ask you again soon.”
Several years passed before she asked me again. Since making my first attempt, I had contemplated（深思）
the correct answer. So this time I told her, “Mommy, sight is very important to everybody, so it must be our eyes.”
She looked at me and told me, “You are learning fast, but the answer is not correct because there are many
people who are blind.”
Over the years my mother asked me a couple more times and always her answer was: “No, but you are
getting smarter every year, my child.”
Then last year, my grandpa died. Everybody was hurt. Everybody was crying. My Mom looked at me when it
was our turn to say our final goodbye to g randpa. She asked me, “Do you know the most important body part yet,
my dear?”
I was surprised when she asked me this on this occasion. I always thought this was a game between her and
me. She saw the confusion on my face and told me, “This question is very important. How you answer it shows
whether you have learned about life. For every body part you gave me in the past, I have told you were wrong and
I have given you a reason why. But today is the day you will know the answer.”
I look puzzled.
“All your previous answers-ears, eyes, hands, heart... They are all very important to yourself. But this time I
need you to think of something that is important to others.”
注意：
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1:
“My dear, the most important body part,” she said,_____________________________________________
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“Mom, I understand. And you can cry on my shoulder too.”______________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________
续写导练（四）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
An 80-year-old man was sitting on the sofa in his house along with his 45-year-old highly educated son. Suddenly a crow（乌鸦）perched（栖息）on their window.
The father asked his son, “What is this?”The son replied, “It is a crow.”
After a few minutes, the father asked his son for the second time, “What is this?”The son said, “Father, I have just now told you, i t’s a crow!”
After a little while, the old father again asked his son for the third time, “What is this?”
At this time some expression of irritation（恼怒）was felt in the son’s tone when he said to his father with a rebuff（生硬回绝）. “It’s a crow, a crow.” A little while later, the father again asked his son the fourth time, “What is this?”
This time, the son shouted at his father, “Why do you keep asking me the same question again and again, although I have told you so many times ‘IT IS A CROW’. Are you not able to understand this?”
A little later the father went to his room and came back with an old tattered（发皱的）diary, which he had maintained since his son was born.
On opening a page, he asked his son to read that page.
When the son read it, the following words were written in the diary:
“Today my little son aged three was sitting with me on the sofa, when a crow was sitting on the window. My son asked me 23 times what it was, and I replied to him all 23 times that it was a crow. I hugged him lovingly each time he asked me the same question. I did not at all feel irritated but I rather felt affection for my innocent son.
注意：
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1:
After reading the diary,____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________
Paragraph 2:
Feeling ashamed, the son got down on his knees before his father.__________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________
续写导练（五）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
I was touched through experiences, memories, books, stories, animals, angels, and most of all other people. People have moved me and molded（对……影响重大）me with moments of love and examples of kindness.
One time on the day before Christmas many years ago when I was a minimum wage mill（工厂）worker, I found myself with very little money and very little time to buy my small children a few simple toys. I knew that they would have to be cheap ones and I hoped my children would like them. I hated not having enough to give
them more. I hated being poor. And I hated feeling bad at Christmas rather than happy.
I pulled into a store parking lot and counted my money again. It wasn’t much but maybe I could get something small with it. As I was getting out of the car I noticed the Salvation Army（救世军）bell ringer at the entrance. I felt bad again because I didn’t feel I could spare anything to give him. I started walking towards the entrance when two cars pulled into empty parking spots in front of me. The first was a shiny, new Cadillac and I felt a twinge of jealousy when I saw it. “How nice,” I thought, “Would it be to have enough money to buy a car like that.” The second car, though, was an ancient sedan（轿车）more beat-up and rusty than the one I was driving.
A man hopped（冲）out of the Cadillac and hurried into the store right past the bell ringer without a second glance. Out of the old sedan came a young mother with three small children in tow（紧随着）. Her clothes looked as worn out as her car, yet she stopped in front of the bell ringer, smiled, opened her purse, and dropped a bill in his red kettle（钱罐）.
注意：
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1:
I stood there for a minute in astonishment._____________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2:
In that second a warmth touched me, my jealousy and hatred（憎恨）left me, and all the love and joy that are Christmas filled me. ________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________
精品文档 精品文档细节描写片段练习 一、进球 他抢过球，转身一抛，把球抛进了篮筐里。 _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ 二、吃辣椒 他拿起一根辣椒咬下去，辣得他晕头转向，他急忙找水喝。_______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________三、试卷发下来之后 老师把批好的试卷发了下来。在拿到试卷之前，我紧张得要命，就怕自己考砸了。试卷拿到手以后，我一看不及格，很是伤心。 _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ 四、做错了题目 老师批评学生做错了题目，老师说：“你又做错了！”我无地自容。 要求：请同学们把老师批评学生做错了题目这个典型细节写得生动起来，要精心锤炼词语，巧妙运用修辞，善于想像联想，写一段片段作文。
2021高考英语读后续写讲练结合（八） Part one 小试身手 读后续写阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 buildings there were his playground. Jamie moved a wooden board from the door to one of the buildings. He crawled inside. There was broken glass on the floor. Jamie went down the stairs to the basement. It was even darker down there, and damp. The buildings were near the river. Sometimes water flooded in. He'd never found anything alive until he found Sharon. “Sharon, I’m here!” Jamie called. “I brought a candle, too. I'm going to light it so I can see you better." Jamie took out a match and lit the candle. A soft circle of light lit up the darkness. “Come over here where I can see you,” Jamie said. “Please don’t be afraid. I’m not afraid. I told you that.” The creature slithered (滑行) into the light. It was about Jamie’s size. Its head and body were covered with dark green scales(鱗片). In the light of the candle, the scales shone like diamonds. The creature’s eyes glowed red, suddenly, like hot coals. Its nostrils (鼻孔) flared, giving off heat. Jamie stared. He thought he had never seen anything so beautiful. That’s why he’d decided to call the creature Sharon. He wanted to give a beautiful name to his new pet. “Gee, Sharon,” he said, “I wish you could talk. I don’t know if you understand me or not. And I, d really like you to tell me how you got here. The creature didn’t answer. It just looked at Jamie. Its mouth opened slightly and something white gleamed. Jamie thought it was smiling. “Well,” said Jamie," I hope you’re hungry. I brought you a chicken sandwich.” The creature looked down at the sandwich, thinking about something else, but made no move to eat it.
读后续写 （2017.6浙江卷）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 On a bright, warm July afternoon, Mac Hollan, a primary school teacher, was cycling from his home to Alaska with his friends. One of his friends had stopped to make a bicycle repair, but they had encouraged Mac to carry on, and they would catch up with him soon. As Mac pedaled (骑行) along alone, he thought fondly of his wife and two young daughters at home. He hoped to show them this beautiful place someday. Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him. “Man, that’s a big dog!” he thought. But when he looked to the side, he saw instantly that it wasn’t a dog at all, but a wolf, quickly catching up with him. Mac’s heart jumped. He found out his can of bear spray. With one hand on the bars, he fired the spray at the wolf. A bright red cloud enveloped the animal, and to Mac’s relief, it fell back, shaking its head. But a minute later, it was by his side again. Then it attacked the back of Mac’s bike, tearing open his tent bag. He fired at the wolf a second time, and again, it fell back only to quickly restart the chase（追赶）. Mac was pedaling hard now. He waved and yelled at passing cars but was careful not to slow down. He was a steep uphill climb before him. He knew that once he hit the hill, he’d be easy caught up and the wolf’s teeth would be tearing into his flesh. At this moment, Paul and Becky were driving their car on their way to Alaska. They didn’t think much of it when they saw two cyclists repairing their bike on the side of the road. A bit later, they spotted what they, too, assumed was a dog running alongside a man on a bike. As they got closer, they realized that the dog was a wolf. Mac heard a large vehicle behind him. He pulled in front of it as the wolf was catching up fast, just a dozen yards away now. 注意： 1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右； 2. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语； 3. 续写部分分为两段，每段开头语已为你写好； 4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 Paragraph 1 The car abruptly stopped in front of him. _____________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________ ___________________ Paragraph 2 A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived. _____________________________________________________________________
新高考英语读后续写系列练习3套全13.阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。When his 13yearold son came home late from school last week，John Morrissette figured he had just gone on “one of his usual walks”．It wasn’t until the next day that Morrissette found out his intellectually disabled boy，Micheal，had been found in a Winnipeg garbage bin as temperatures dipped to －15°C. Morrissette said his son had been beaten by two men，thrown in the Dumpster and left to freeze.He was found a few hours later by a woman who let him out.“I was very angry with the guys who would do this to my son，”Morrissette said in an interview Thursday.“You can see he’s a harmless child.He doesn’t talk much.He keeps to himself and two men have hurt him.” The young teenager wasn’t seriously hurt，but Morrissette said he’s not letting him walk home alone anymore.The father’s faith in humanity is a little shaken.Morrissette said he cannot believe there are people out there who would pick on a young boy simply walking home from school.He’s only been able to get bits and pieces of what happened from Micheal who is “too scared to talk about it”．
（教师版）片段作文：围绕一个主题，描写热茶。 例文1 主题得分 “我回来啦！”被雨淋透的我终于回到了家。停下脚步，寒意涌上心头，使我更加的烦躁。我随意地拿毛巾擦着头发，慢慢地走进书房，坐了下去。一股微微的清香传入我的鼻子，我扭过头，一只不起眼的白瓷杯正静静地立在书桌的角落，散发着幽幽的茶香。“或许是妈妈准备的吧!"我估量着，内心仍是烦躁。我不耐烦地托起白瓷杯，喝了一口微绿的茶水。温热的茶水滑入肚中，一股暖意悄悄地浮上心头。当我从对茶的回味中回神之时，杯子已经见底，内心的烦躁也随着消失的茶水一样不再出现。安逸之感浮在心头，我的心像那平静的茶水一样平静闲适。 （10分。主题：闲适问题：描写侧重点在我而非热茶本身，主题不一致） 例文2 主题得分 书桌上有一杯热茶，飘忽不定的热气散进空气，直至消散……我不知何时爱上了茶，可能是家庭的熏陶，可能是茶本身独特自然的味道，或许是品茶带来的那一份让我享受的闲适。 说起茶，不禁想到英国，那里每天有九成以上的人会去品茶，享受午后美好的时光。我想，当浓茶入喉的时候，除了浓烈的味道充斥口鼻，其中还蕴藏着丝丝闲适。 看着茶杯里的热茶，心中却是出奇平静，就像茶本身平静的表面。看下去，除了片片茶叶，还能看到自己，看到自己的心。 喝茶的磨力大概如此，我们总会在品茶中思考些什么，一茶一世界，一心一菩提。茶是一个缩影，但并非关于生活，而是关于生命。在生命中，我们应像一盏热茶中随着水波轻轻飘舞的茶叶一样，充满着安静闲适。想罢，抿一口茶，静静享受。 （16分？主题：喝下热茶？问题：中心点是茶但全文着力不在描写） 例文3 主题得分 窗台前，徐徐清风携卷这古朴杯中的茶香扑鼻而来，温润着我的心田。杯身由宜兴陶砂制成，里面装着刚刚沏好的黄山毛尖，还不时地冒出腾腾热气。我端起茶杯，轻轻吹散热气，只见杯中形成一道漩涡，刚刚下沉的两片毛尖随即漂浮上来，快速地转动，渐渐成对，一幅太极图案若隐若现，阴阳部分相互吞并，相互重生。微微抿了一小口，一股苦涩之味沾染了舌尖。正欲皱眉，茶水却已涌进舌根，苦味消失不见，取而代之的是一抹甘甜。正欲细细品味这丝甘甜，茶水早已深入咽喉，随即一阵清凉，舒畅之意传遍浑身，顿时神清气爽，清香四溢，令人回味无穷。（13分主题：饮茶之趣问题：主题不明确，文章也没有扣住饮茶之“趣”去写；其实默写非常细腻，“饮茶之趣”是个败笔。） 例文4 主题得分 书桌上有一杯热茶，袅袅的水汽从窄窄的玻璃瓶口挤着出来，又在空气中散去。淡黄色的茶水凝结在瓶壁上就成了一颗颗透明的珠子。珠子被阳光照得晶亮，像在集取阳光，集满了，又从瓶壁上滚下去，把阳光的温暖融进热茶里。茶里的茉莉花遇到热水，开放了。朵朵花儿旋转着，香味飘逸出啦，逸进了书桌上的书里。 这是春天的味道，浓缩着春天的温暖。路边卖的茉莉花手链，河边颤动着的茉莉花朵，游子身上的茉莉香包……这些承载着江南水乡温暖的片段，现在都融进了书桌上的一杯热茶里。
一、读后续写（25分） A farmer grew some vegetables in his garden. One day his wife was ill and he had no money. He had to sell some cabbages and carrots in the market. The next morning he took two baskets of vegetables to town. But it was raining hard that afternoon and there were few people in the street. When his vegetables were sold out, it was dark. He bought some medicine and hurried to his village. On his way home he saw a person lying on the snow. He placed his baskets on the ground and was going to help the person to get up. At that time he found it was a dead man and there “About seven last evening.” “Did you see who killed the man” “No, sir.” The officer brought out a knife and asked, “Have you seen it yet” “No, sir.” The officer became angry and told the policemen to beat him up and sent him into prison. the officer wanted to trap the farmer into the confession(供认), but the fa rmer didn’t admit he was the murderer. 注意： 1.所续写的短文词数应为150左右； 2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语； 3.续写部分分为二段，每段的开头语已经为你写好； 4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 Paragraph 1: The officer was so angry that he asked the policeman to beat him up again. The farmer was lucky. A few days later,
专题二读后续写 Writing 1 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 At the center of the mall was the perfect Santa with a gentle manner and a real white beard.My six－year－old granddaughter，Leah，jumped from foot to foot as we waited in line for her turn to sit on his lap． “I don’t know what to say，” Leah said，raising her neck around the kids in front of her. “Sure you do，”her mother，Leanne，said.“It’s Santa.He’s already your friend．You’ll do just fine.” “He’ll ask you what you want for Christmas，” I said.“And you just tell him.” We’d gone over and over the toys she’d ask for.Her mother didn’t want surprises! Leah repeated the list．But a minute later，she inserted new toys she’d just spotted at the mall. “I’ve got an idea，” said Leanne，digging into her purse as the line inched forward.“Let’s write down your requests so you won’t forget them.” I couldn’t help but laugh.Going to see Santa was such an important appointment for a six－year－old.No child should have any worries bigger than that.But the night before，on the news，I’d see n a village in the Middle East that had come under fire.Many of the wounded were children just like our Leah.Looking around the mall full of magical decorations and happy shoppers I felt safe，as safe as anyone could be.Everyone in the world should have that kind of security，especially at Christmas. “Okay，” Leanne said.“Now you’ve got everything you want written down here.If you get nervous you can just give the note to Santa.” Leah nodded and took the list. She read out loud，“A Chia Pet，Moon Sand and Aquadoodle．” “Why don’t you add a fourth request，Leah，” I heard myself say.“Ask for peaceonearth．” My daughter looked a little surprised by my suggestion.
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导入：（约3分钟） 一、诱导激发 1、播放视频《鲁智深倒拔垂杨柳》片段，提问： ①视频中人物？用一句话概括视频内容。 ②这段视频出自？ ③想知道原著中是怎样描述这段视频的吗？ ④赏析原文：这段描写好吗？为什么？ ⑤你想写出这样精彩的文字吗？这节课我们就一起来学习动作细节描写。 （板书课题：动作细节描写）。 2、交代学习目标。 （大屏幕显示学习目标） 二．感悟动作细节描写 过渡语：透过刚才的动作描写，我们看到一个粗犷豪放而又力大无比的英雄形象。 这段细致入微的描写就是人们常说的“一滴水中的太阳”的细节描写。那么什么是细节描写呢？ 1、大屏幕显示什么是细节描写 细节描写的方法有很多，如可以对人物进行外貌、语言、动作、神态和心理的描写，也可以描写物件、景色等。今天我们主要学习其中的动作细节描写。 作文时我们把人物的一举一动细致描写，写出人物具体动作，那么所写的形象就会跃然纸上，活起来。怎样把人物的动作写具体呢？这就要求我们用准确的动作词来写人物的活动过程，把人物的大动作分解成一个个连贯的小动作，用慢镜头的方式一一描绘出来。 、合作探究：（解决“眼高”问题，约17 分钟）片段一：说时迟，那时快。只见我班的何中凯同学，手一撑，脚一踮，猛地爬了起来。左脚尖顶住起跑线，膝盖一弯，稳稳地蹲着。两手就像两根木柱插在地上，整个身体微微前倾，那架势，就像一只起飞的雄鹰。——《精彩校运会》分析：这短短的几句话中，用了“撑、踮、爬、顶、弯、蹲、插、倾、飞”等9 个
动词，把赛场上运动员起跑的预备姿势描写得准确而逼真。用比喻写出了运动员的强健有 力，蓄势待发的状态。归纳：用动词把人物富有特征的动作形象地描绘下来，这就是动作描写。动作描写是刻画人物的重要方法之一，作品中的人物是靠动作描写活起来的。 1、体悟动作描写的作用 例(1) 食堂里，张老师急着要去上课，他端起饭盆，一仰头便呼呼噜噜地将里面的米粥喝下去；一低头，却发现衣襟上洒下了几滴粥，于是他撩起衣襟，伸长舌头将粥滴舔入口中。 ( 《节俭的张老师》) 问：这段文字表现了张老师怎样的性格，主要通过什么描写来表现的？ 例(2) 她锁好防盗门，转身走下楼去，走出不远，忽又停住，愣了一下神，转回身又向楼上走去。走到自家门边，用手抓住那圆形门把手，左拧一下，右拧一下，当确认锁牢靠时才转身走下楼去。而黑心身的一刹那，又回头盯了一眼门把手。(《锁防盗门》) 问：这段文字从什么方面描写人物(心理)，写得怎样？ 例(3) 慈母手中线，游子身上衣。临行密密缝，意恐迟迟归。谁言寸草心，报得三春晖。(《游子吟》) 问：用一句话概括诗中所描写的场景(慈母为即将远行的儿子缝制衣服)，并用几个字概括该诗的主旨(深挚的母爱)，诗中最能形象地表母爱的诗句是(临……意……), 诗中哪个词是动作描写(密密缝)。 点拨：动作描写，就是对人物行为、动作的描写。就是通过描写人物做什么和怎样做来表现人物的性格特点和精神面貌，凸现人物的个性特征——思想的、品格的、性格的、心理的以及习惯的。 2、了解动作描写的内容(括号中的例子供教者选用)： ①头颈动作。例(4) 鲁迅微笑，默认地点了点头，好像我心里想的，他已知道。 ②眼耳动作。例(5) 所有的战士都翘首西望，向天空中寻找那架从延安起飞的飞机，谛听着飞机的声音。 ③嘴巴动作。例(6) 那同志吃力地举起手推开他的胳膊，嘴唇翕动了好几下，齿缝里“挤”出几个字。 ④手肩动作。例(7) 她右手拉住我，左手扶着肩上挑着的担子。 ⑤腰身动作。例(8) 我不好意思地笑了一下，鞠了一个“半躬”。 ⑥腿脚动作。例(9) 接着听他骂道…… 说着，举起腿来，又是一脚。 小结：头颈、动作，眼耳、嘴巴、手肩、腰身、脚腿动作等都可以作为笔下的描写材料。这些描写可以把被描写的人物形象栩栩如生活灵活现呼之欲出跃然纸上，个性特征更加鲜明。3．把握动作描写的方法 动作描写要细致分解（不过应区别情况对待） 例（10）《放学回家》 a.放学了，他把书包往肩上一撂，蹦跳着回家去。（概括描写）
读后续写1 There was a young woman who took great pride in the flowers in her garden.She had been raised by her grandmother who taught her to love and care for flowers as she herself had done.So, her flower garden was second to none.Her neighbors showed great admiration for her handiness. One day while looking through a flower catalogue，a picture of a plant immediately caught her eye.She had never seen blooms on a flower like that before.“I have to have it，” she said to herself，and she immediately ordered it. When it arrived，she already had a place prepared to plant it.She planted it near the base of a stone wall in her yard.It grew vigorously(茁壮地)，with beautiful green leaves all over it，but there were no blooms.Part of it even extended to the backyard of her neighbor's through the wall.She thought her neighbor would complain about the vine(藤)．Day after day she continued to take care of it，water it，feed it，and she even talked to it attempting to coax (哄) it to bloom.But，it was in vain. One morning weeks later，as she stood before the vine，she thought how disappointed she was that her plant had not bloomed.She was giving considerable thought to cutting it down and planting something else in its place. It was at this point that her neighbor called round.“Thank y ou so much! You can't imagine how much I have enjoyed the blooms of that vine you planted.” The young woman walked through the gate into her neighbor's yard.She was surprised.Led by her neighbor，she saw that on the other side of the wall the vine was covered with blooms. 注意： 1．所续写短文的词数应为150左右； 2．至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语； 3．续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好； 4．续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 答案
高考读后续写训练1. Name________________ It had been some time since Jack had seen the old man. College, career, and life itself got in the way. In fact, Jack moved clear across the country in pursuit (追寻) of the dreams. There, in the rush of his busy life, Jack had little time to think about the past and often no time to spend with his wife and son. He was working on his future, and nothing could stop him. Over the phone, his mother told him, “Mr. Belser died last night. The funeral（葬礼）is Wednesday.” Memories flashed（闪现）through his mind like an old newsreel (新闻短片) as he sat quietly remembering his childhood days. “Jack, did you hear me?” “Oh, sorry, Mom. Yes, I heard you. It’s been so long since I thought of him. I’m sorry, but I honestly thought he died years ago,” Jack said. “Well, he didn’t forget you. Every time I saw him he’d ask how you were doing. He’d reminisce (回忆) about the many days you spent over ‘his side of the fence’ as he put it, ” Mom told him. “I loved that old house he lived in,” Jack said. “You know, Jack, after your father died, Mr. Belser stepped in to make sure you had a man’s influence (影响) in your life,” she said. “He’s the one who taught me carpentry. I wouldn’t be in this business if it weren’t for him. He spent a lot of time teaching me things that he thought were important. Mom, I’ll be there for the funeral.” Jack said. Busy as he was, he kept his word. Jack caught the next flight to his hometown. Mr. Belser’s funeral was small and uneventful. He had no children of his own, and most of his relatives had passed away. The night before he had to return home, Jack and his Mom stopped by to see the old house next door one more time, which was exactly as he remembered. Every step held memories. Every picture, every piece of furniture … Jack stopped suddenly. “What’s wrong, Jack?” his Mom asked. “The box is gone,” he said. “What box?” Mom ask ed. “There was a small gold box that he kept locked on top of his desk. I must have asked him a thousand times what was inside. All he’d ever tell me was ‘the thing I value most’,” Jack said. It was gone. Everything about the house was exactly how Jack remembered it, except for the box. He figured someone from the Belser family had taken it. “Now I’ll never know what was so valuable to him,” Jack said sadly. 1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右； 2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语； 3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头已为你写好； 4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
一、导入：(约3分钟) 一、诱导激发 1、播放视频《鲁智深倒拔垂杨柳》片段，提问： ①视频中人物？用一句话概括视频内容。 ②这段视频出自？ ③想知道原著中是怎样描述这段视频的吗？ ④赏析原文：这段描写好吗？为什么？ ⑤你想写出这样精彩的文字吗？这节课我们就一起来学习动作细节描写。 （板书课题：动作细节描写）。 2、交代学习目标。 （大屏幕显示学习目标） 二．感悟动作细节描写 过渡语：透过刚才的动作描写，我们看到一个粗犷豪放而又力大无比的英雄形象。这段细致入微的描写就是人们常说的“一滴水中的太阳”的细节描写。那么什么是细节描写呢？ 1、大屏幕显示什么是细节描写 细节描写的方法有很多，如可以对人物进行外貌、语言、动作、神态和心理的描写，也可以描写物件、景色等。今天我们主要学习其中的动作细节描写。 作文时我们把人物的一举一动细致描写，写出人物具体动作，那么所写的形象就会跃然纸上，活起来。怎样把人物的动作写具体呢？这就要求我们用准确的动作词来写人物的活动过程，把人物的大动作分解成一个个连贯的小动作，用慢镜头的方式一一描绘出来。 二、合作探究：(解决“眼高”问题，约17分钟)
片段一：说时迟，那时快。只见我班的何中凯同学，手一撑，脚一踮，猛地爬了起来。左脚尖顶住起跑线，膝盖一弯，稳稳地蹲着。两手就像两根木柱插在地上，整个身体微微前倾，那架势，就像一只起飞的雄鹰。——《精彩校运会》分析：这短短的几句话中，用了“撑、踮、爬、顶、弯、蹲、插、倾、飞”等9个动词，把赛场上运动员起跑的预备姿势描写得准确而逼真。用比喻写出了运动员的强健有力，蓄势待发的状态。归纳：用动词把人物富有特征的动作形象地描绘下来，这就是动作描写。动作描写是刻画人物的重要方法之一，作品中的人物是靠动作描写活起来的。 1、体悟动作描写的作用 例(1) 食堂里，张老师急着要去上课，他端起饭盆，一仰头便呼呼噜噜地将里面的米粥喝下去；一低头，却发现衣襟上洒下了几滴粥，于是他撩起衣襟，伸长舌头将粥滴舔入口中。(《节俭的张老师》) 问：这段文字表现了张老师怎样的性格，主要通过什么描写来表现的？ 例(2) 她锁好防盗门，转身走下楼去，走出不远，忽又停住，愣了一下神，转回身又向楼上走去。走到自家门边，用手抓住那圆形门把手，左拧一下，右拧一下，当确认锁牢靠时才转身走下楼去。而黑心身的一刹那，又回头盯了一眼门把手。(《锁防盗门》) 问：这段文字从什么方面描写人物(心理)，写得怎样？ 例(3) 慈母手中线，游子身上衣。临行密密缝，意恐迟迟归。谁言寸草心，报得三春晖。(《游子吟》) 问：用一句话概括诗中所描写的场景(慈母为即将远行的儿子缝制衣服)，并用几个字概括该诗的主旨(深挚的母爱)，诗中最能形象地表母爱的诗句是(临……意……)，诗中哪个词是动作描写(密密缝)。 点拨：动作描写，就是对人物行为、动作的描写。就是通过描写人物做什么和怎样做来表现人物的性格特点和精神面貌，凸现人物的个性特征——思想的、品格的、性格的、心理的以及习惯的。 2、了解动作描写的内容(括号中的例子供教者选用)： ①头颈动作。例(4) 鲁迅微笑，默认地点了点头，好像我心里想的，他已知道。 ②眼耳动作。例(5) 所有的战士都翘首西望，向天空中寻找那架从延安起飞的飞机，谛听着飞机的声音。 ③嘴巴动作。例(6) 那同志吃力地举起手推开他的胳膊，嘴唇翕动了好几下，齿缝里“挤”出几个字。 ④手肩动作。例(7) 她右手拉住我，左手扶着肩上挑着的担子。 ⑤腰身动作。例(8) 我不好意思地笑了一下，鞠了一个“半躬”。 ⑥腿脚动作。例(9) 接着听他骂道……说着，举起腿来，又是一脚。