初中英语作文批改范文批改初中英语作文
1．课堂上限时完成作文
每周的作文课，本人先创设能够激发学生兴趣的场景，如孩子们感兴趣的一首歌或者喜欢的某个时尚明星，要求学生在规定的时间内完成作文，并且鼓励学生到黑板上写下他们的劳动成果。
2．委婉的评改学生们的劳动成果
完成黑板上的例文后，在老师的指导下，请同学们对黑板上的例文进行评改，可以从单词评写，语法规则，短语运用，内容涵盖，过度是否自然等等方面着手。当堂批改例文，不仅仅让例文的作者有了直接深刻的认识，也让在座的其他学生对作文的要求有了更深层次的认识。教师在总结归纳的时候也不忘发掘该文章中的闪光点，要尽量做到语气委婉，适当的时候要给予鼓励的言语和评价。
3．自我修改作文
通过对例子文的批改，同学们大体知道了怎么样批改一篇作文，可以先让同学们说一说一篇优秀的作文该从哪几个方面着手：作者的观点是否明确;各个段落是否符合该观点的论述; 段与段之间的过渡是否自然;语言的表达是否流畅; 结尾是否做到了首尾呼应或深化
主题, 或提出了解决问题的建议等。再让学生对照标准, 评价自己的作文。这样做的目的在于让学生明白作文评分要从内容( 思想和材料) 、语言和结构。从而，让自己有一个深刻的认识以及获得最直接最快速的反馈。
英语写作有多方面需要注意，当然可以从简单的几个大方面入手。1.标点符号及大小写。2.单词的选择与搭配。3. 文章的逻辑和结构安排。4. 语法方面的关注，时态语态等等的运用。
In English class, we need to treat it seriously.
First of all, it is very important to follow our teachers' instructions. If you miss a class, you will find it difficult to keep up with the next lesson . When you have some questions related to the missed lesson, you need to work them out with the help of your teacher or classmates. Otherwise, it will keep appearing until you figure them out.
Second of all, we should take part in activities about English after class. We can still speak English in the public. We do not need to be afraid of making mistakes. It
is normal and necessary for us to improve our English. We will learn our lessons from making errors. The more you speak, the better you can speak and the more you want to speak.
Last but not the least, taking notes is a great way to learn English. As we all know, when we go to universities, we will listen to a lot of lectures and note-taking is a very important skill.
Let's try these out./Let's give it a shot!
仓促完成，不足之处，请多指教。
小时候，我常常听妈妈讲一些贝多芬、莫扎特等音乐家的故事，啊，多伟大呀！他们把一生献给了音乐，他们对音乐的那份酷爱，深深地感动了我。这也使我从小立志：长大后要当一名出色的音乐家！
我常常空闲时一个人呆呆地坐着，似乎看见了许多美好的片段
：我漫步在海滩边，看着一望无际的大海，在寻找着音乐的灵感。突然，我的脸上露出了欢快的笑容，我想到了！于是，我又匆匆地赶回家，迅速地把曲子记录下来。我轻轻地奏出了美妙的歌曲，好极了！我对于自己的作品非常满意。又过了几天，我的个人演奏会开幕了。在舞台上，我出神入化地为观众演奏歌曲，是那样悦耳动听，台下不时传来一阵阵雷鸣般的掌声，大家听得是那样陶醉……
假如我梦想成真，我一定要写更多的曲
Winter holiday is approaching. What am I going to do?I want to go to Bei ___g which I have never been to.
As living in the south, I seldom saw snow before. So I want to go to Bei ___g especially for the snow. And I also want to feel the different winter.
Bei ___g is the capital city of China with lots of places of interests, Such a s forbidden city and the great wall. I am imagining how these place would look like in winter and they must be a great scene. So I want to go to Bei ___g in winter vacation.Hope to have pletely holidays.
My name is Li Ming.My hobby is collecting and making kites (像两个HOBBY啊).I think it's bery(very吧?打错了) interesting.I have more than 100 kites now.I collect and make kites at the age of 9(九岁用不用过去式?).I have some different kinds of kites with(in) different colours.The biggest kite is 6 metres and the smallest one is as big as a book.I think hobbies is(hobbies是复数,后面还有is,再后面还有it,还是用hobby吧) very important for us,because it can make you grow as a person,develop your interests and help you learn new skills.
总体来说很不错啊O(∩_∩)O
画图这不好用。基本没大碍，就是小错误、
。。。
能帮忙指出来吗
刚刚忘了上传图片了、
I don't like studying and I think nobody likes studying at school. ( at school比in school更常见，因为school不是一个大地点，所以用at。如果是一个大地点，例如一个城市，我们说in)
However, if I don't study, I won't have a good mark. (写作时，however比but更为正式。But更偏向口语）
I must study very hard, although I don't like it.
Sometimes I want to have some fun, so I don't study hard. （中文说“有时我想玩”，但是英文却不是用Play来解释的，英语里说have fun.如果说i want to have fun,就是我想要找点乐趣，也就近乎与“玩”了）
My parents are a bit worried about me, and they always urge me, "Don't watch TV and don't go online! You must study!" (这里你也可以说they always say to me, 不过我觉得Urge是“劝”，可能更有那种你想表达的意思）
I appreciate that they help me so much（thank是一个动词(有时也做名词），所以应该是i thank...he thanks，不过即使你
用了i thank them,这种表达也是几乎没人说的。有一种可以是，i thank them for helping me so much.但是我觉得thank them，听起来多多少少别扭。所以你可以用一个更高级的词，appreciate,感激。还有一个问题就是，they help me more.如果前面你有提到他们帮主你什么，你可以说more，这里只要说很多就可以了。)
They love me, I know.
I always talk to myself, (跟谁说话的时候，可以说talk to someone,talk with someone，但是talk with someone是和一个人说话，当你想表达“对自己说”的时候=talk to myself) and promise myself that i must do well. (不要前面用现代时，后面用过去时。前面说talk to myself,又说say to myself太过重复。所以换成Promise）
But I can't stick to my promise for many days or even months.
Maybe this is why I don't usually get a good mark.
（it's about why...如果你换成this is why...强调性会更强）
(写好作文的一个因素就是，一个词不要一直重复着用。你可以换换别的词。你这里用了很多的always,其实代替always的，还有often,usually,frequently等等。你可以换一换。一种意思用很多方法说，才可以避免重复）
Dear Dad（更为亲切），
How are you these days？Father's Day is ing.(不需加soon. are u okey的确是语意有重复）l miss you very much at this special time of the year.(点明特殊时间更好）l know
that you have to be away from our family because of your job.l also realize that you want to offer me a better life.（原句不是很通顺这样改我认为比较清晰~）And it seems that you are always in my mind.(用mind更好)Thank you for making my life so perfect （give一般指实在的物，不适合用在这
里。）The love you show me is as deep as sea.(讲父亲对我的爱应该放在一起，然后再谈自己。）l am very happy with you. l will work hard to make you feel gratified.(欣慰的意思）
Finally，please take good care of yourself.(少了care）Remember,l always love you.（always通常是一般现在时）
Love,
Mingming
要多注意句语句之间的联系哦~加几个衔接词会使文章更紧凑。总得来说一些语句用得还不错，gogo！~看在我这么辛苦的分上选我吧！~
**********楼下的同学有些内容都是从我这搬过去的吧~还是自己来修改比较好~
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