高中英语记叙文的概要写作公开课

Section ⅦReading for Writing——概要写作[题型解读]概要是一篇较长文章本质思想的简洁重述，它要求用尽量少的语言对原文的主旨进行复述。

概要不是简单的换句话说，更不是评论，而是作者思想中最基本部分的准确再现。

[评分标准]《考试说明》中规定概要写作阅卷时按5个档次给分，其中最高档次第五档(21-25 points)的评分标准是：1.理解准确，涵盖全部要点；2.能准确使用相应的语法结构和词汇；3.完全使用自己的语言；4.有效使用了语句间的连接成分，使完成的概要结构紧凑。

[写作方法]1.定位——查找核心信息通过阅读定位语篇的核心信息，包括核心单词，核心短语和核心句子。

(句子为主，以单词和短语为辅)2.改写——用自己的语言改写信息在核心信息的基础上进行语言表达形式的改写，对原文的语言表达形式尽可能实现大规模的改变。

改写过程中，原则上字数不超过原句，不改变原文的逻辑结构，充分考虑语句压缩。

3.核查——添加关联词，检查句子的连贯性核查句子的连贯性。

核查标点、语法、连接词及字数，优先考虑使用较短的连接词，如：but，then，later等。

写作技巧如何写概要写作？一、题型特点概要写作的阅读材料词数一般为300左右。

写作要求考生在对原文阅读后根据其内容写出一篇约60词的内容概要。

概要所用语句既要用词准确，结构合理，语义连贯，不得抄写原文，又要能完全概括出文章的中心大意。

二、注意事项1.词数要限制在60词左右，上下不得超过10个单词。

2.要根据文章的体裁特点进行概要写作。

3.人称和时态要与所给文章中的人称和时态保持一致，但必要时也可变换成第三人称。

4.写作时尽可能地使用复合句，必要时可转换词性，不得完全照搬照抄原文。

[典例示范]阅读下面短文，根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。

We’ve reached a strange—some would say unusual—point.While fighting world hunger continues to be the matter of vital importance according to a recent report from the World Health Organization(WHO)，more people now die from being overweight than from being underweight.It’s the good life that’s more likely to kill us these days. Worse，nearly 18 million children under the age of five around the world are estimated to be overweight.What’s going on?We really don’t have many excuses for our weight pro blems.The dangers of the problem have been drilled into us by public-health campaigns since 2001 and the message is getting through—up to a point.In the 1970s，Finland，for example，had the highest rate of heart disease in the world and being overweight was its main cause.Not any more.A public-health campaign has greatly reduced the number of heart disease deaths by 80 percent over the past three decades.Maybe that explains why the percentage of people in Finland taking diet pills doubled between 2001 and 2005，and doctors even offer surgery of removing fat inside and change the shape of the body.No wonder it ranks as the world’s most body-conscious country.We know what we should be doing to lose weight—but actually doing it is another matter.By far the most popular excuse is not taking enough exercise.More than half of us admit we lack willpower.Others blame good food.They say：it’s just too inviting and it makes them overeat.Some also blame their parents—their genes.But unfortunately，the parents are wronged because they’re normal in shape，or rather slim.It’s a similar story around the world，although people are relatively unlikely to have tried to lose weight.Parents are eager to see their kids shape up.Do as I say—not as I do.[解题思路]第一步：定位Part 1：1.More people now die from being overweight than from being underweight.2.It’s the good life that’s more likely to kill us these days.Part 2：3.The dangers of the problem have been drilled into us by public-health campaigns since 2001.4.In Finland，a public-health campaign has greatly reduced the number of heart disease deaths by 80 percent over the past three decades.Part 3：5.Maybe that explains why the percentage of people in Finland taking diet pills doubled between 2001 and 2005.6.We know what we should be doing to lose weight—but actually doing it is another matter.Part 4：7.Others blame good food.8.It’s a similar story around the world，although people are relatively unlikely to have tried to lose weight.第二步：改写1.要点1和2合并：Good life is more likely to kill us and more people now die from being overweight.改写：Good life becomes the killer of our health and more people now die from being overweight.2.要点3和4合并：People have gradually realized the dangers of being overweight through public-health campaigns since 2001 and the number of heart disease deaths has been greatly reduced in Finland.改写：Since 2001 people have gradually become aware of the dangers of being overweight through public-health campaigns and people dying of heart disease has dropped in Finland.3.要点5和6合并：Many people took diet pills to lose weight though we know what we should be doing to lose weight.改写：Many people took some negative measures to lose weight though they knew what they should be doing.4.要点7和8合并：People should stop making excuses and take positive action to lost weight.改写：Although there are some excuses，people should act positively to lost weight. 第三步：核查Nowadays，good life becomes the killer of our health and more people now die from being overweight.(要点1) Since 2001 people have gradually become aware of the dangers of being overweight through public-health campaigns and people dying of heart disease has dropped.(要点2)Regrettably，many people took some negative measures to lose weight though they knew what they should be doing.(要点3)Although there are some excuses，people should act positively to lost weight.(要点4)活动目的：教育学生懂得“水”这一宝贵资源对于我们来说是极为珍贵的，每个人都要保护它，做到节约每一滴水，造福子孙万代。