雅思图表作文中的优秀作文梳理
1.我们可以从图表上看出：托雅的女生比例远远高于男生所占比例。
As can be seen from the chart, the percentage of female students was far higher than that of male students at Toya.
2.从图表反映的情况来看：读雅思的人数远远超过读托福的，同时，读托福的人数一直呈现平稳上升趋势。
As can be seen from the chart, those who chose to study for IELTS far outnumbered those choosing to study for TOEFL. Meanwhile, the number of those who chose to study for TOEFL was on a steady rise.
3.从图表反映的情况来看：托雅学生在饭店用餐的频率在不同的月份呈现出了相应的波动趋势。
As can be seen from the diagram, the frequency of Toya students eating at restaurants revealed a trend of fluctuations in different months.
4.从图表反映的情况来看：托雅男教师所承担的每周工作量要高于女教师的。
As can be seen from the charts, the weekly workload borne by male teachers outweighed that of female teachers at Toya.
5.从整个图表反映的情况来看：托雅总部以及五个分校的营业收入都呈现出了快速的增长趋势。
As can be seen from the chart, the sales of Toya Headquarter and the five branch schools all revealed a trend of fast increase across the board.
6.从整个图表反映的情况来看：托雅教师的收入状况呈现出了稳步增长的总态势。
As can be seen from the chart, the income of Toya teachers revealed a general trend of steady rise.
7.图表显示：托雅广告投入呈现出逐渐下降的趋势，然而有趣的是，营业收入却呈现出大幅度的攀升。
As can be seen from the chart, the advertising investment of Toya revealed a trend of gradual decrease, but interestingly, its sales witnessed a trend of increase by leaps and bounds.
8.饼图反映出托雅女生的比例远远高于男生;曲线图则表明在雅思考试成绩方面，女生的表现也远远好于男生。
The pie chart shows that the percentage of female students was much higher than that of male students while the graph indicates that in terms of students’performance on IELTS, female students did a much better job than male ones.
9.饼图表明：托雅雅思比托福所占份额要高出很多;曲线图则显示出：两个项目每月的招生情况呈现出了总的波动趋势。
The pie chart indicates that IELTS accounted for a much larger percentage than TOEFL at Toya while the graph shows that student enrollment on the two programs on a monthly basis revealed a general trend of fluctuations.
10.图表反映出：托雅上半年与下班年的营业收入总体呈现出快速的上升趋势，成本与支出表现出了较大的波动。
The graph indicates that the sales of Toya both in the first half and the second half of the year revealed a general trend of fast increase while costs and expenses fluctuated greatly.
11.根据图表所示，托雅行政人员中男性员工的比例要高于女性。
As is indicated in the graph, male employees working in executive positions accounted for a much higher percentage than females.
12.根据图表所示，所有群体的收入都呈现了上升趋势，虽然上升的幅度有所差异。
As is indicated in the graph, the income of all the groups revealed a general trend of increase across the board though the margins of the rises varied.
13.根据图表所示，人们的教育程度越高，收入便越高。
As is indicated in the graph, the higher one’s education level was, the higher his income.
14.根据图表所示，该公司的净销售与成本支出皆呈现了快速提高的总趋势，而其利润则呈现了波动。
As can be seen from the table, net sales and costs and expenses of the designated company both showed a general trend of fast increase while its profit fluctuated.
15.从图表我们可以看出：女性吸烟者的百分比呈现稳步增长，而男性则处于波动状态。
As we can see from the first chart, the percentage of female smokers was on a steady rise across the board while the number of male smokers showed a trend of fluctuations.
16.从图表可以看出：选择数学的人们的百分比稳步下降，而选择商务管理者则呈现出上升的总趋势。
As can be seen from the chart, the percentage of those who chose math declined steadily while those who studied business management revealed a general upward trend.
17.从图表可以看出：在所界定的时段里，路上总的交通事故显示了波动的总趋势。
As can be seen from the table, the total road accidents over the designated period revealed a general trend of fluctuations.
18.根据图表显示：中国在汽车生产与销售方面皆呈现出了迅猛的增长态势。
As is indicated in the graph, China’s auto manufacturing and sales both revealed a general trend of dramatic increase.
19.如图所示：上海私家车保有量连续10年呈现出迅猛增长的趋势，而空气质量则显现出截然相反的态势。
As is indicated in the graph, private car ownership revealed a trend of dramatic increase for 10 years in a row while air quality showed an obviously opposite trend.
20.如图所示，托雅学生开车前来上课的人数呈现大幅攀升态势，而停车困难指数也同步大幅提升。
As can be seen from the chart, the number of Toya students who drove to school showed a trend of substantial increase and the index of difficulty for parking increased accordingly.
21.图表显示：不管他们有几个孩子，已婚妇女都要比已婚男士做的家务活多得多。
As we can see from the graph, married women did far more household work than married men did no matter how many children they had.
22.总体而言，昂立托雅学院男女生注册学雅思的人数比学托福的人数多。
Generally speaking, there were more students of both genders getting enrolled in IELTS than in TOEFL at Onlytoya College.
23.根据图表显示：男性在管理和专业类岗位上工作的百分比要高于女性，而女性在文书及其相关岗位上占的百分比要高于男性。
As we can see from the charts, a much higher percentage of men worked on managerial and professional jobs than women did while women took up a much larger percentage in terms of clerical and its related jobs than men.
24.总体而言，涵盖更多工作门类的服务业雇佣了较低百分比的劳动力队伍，却产出了这个国家较大百分比的GDP价值。
Generally speaking, the service sector, which covered a much wider range of job varieties, employed a much lower percentage of the workforce but produced a much higher proportion of the GDP value in the designated country.
25.总体而言，求与供皆呈现了总的波动趋势，以2003年后供大于求为主要趋势。
In general both demand and supply revealed a general trend of fluctuations across the board with supply surpassing demand as the main trend after the year 2003.
26.柱状图显示：收入越高者去饭店吃饭的频率和每次的消费额越高。
As is indicated in the bar chart, the higher people’s income was, the more frequently they dined at restaurants and the more they spent each time.
27.根据图表显示：参加雅思考试的考生年龄呈现年轻化趋势。
As is indicated in the diagram, the age of IELTS candidates showed a trend of getting younger over the designated period of time.
28.从图表中我们可以看到：雅思考生的家庭经济状况总体而言要比托福考生的家庭状况好得多。
As can be seen from the chart, the family financial statuses of IELTS candidates were much better than that of TOEFL candidates.
29.图表显示，前往美国和加拿大留学的人数呈现出下降趋势，而前往英国和澳大利亚的留学人数则呈现稳步增加趋势。
As is indicated in the graph, the number of students who chose to go to U.S.A. and Canada showed a trend of decline while that of those who went to the U.K. and Australia revealed a trend of steady rise.
30.图表显示：雅思每月考试次数的增加对于雅思考生人数的迅速增长产生了非常大的影响。
雅思剑九写作部分解析
小作文解析
雅思学术类写作中task 1图表题中常考的题型有饼状图、线状图、柱状图、表格图及流程图、地图题等。从剑1到剑9，历史变迁的地图题是有史以来第一道，在近期的考试中也多次出现历史变迁类的地图题而不是选址类的地图题。
从历次考试来看，柱状图占到了三分之一的份额，特别是变化与比较结合的柱状图出现频次较高，所以雅思考生要重点准备。
Task 2部分同意不同意类型的议论文在剑9中占到了一半的份额，而且写作题目大部
分选自骨灰级写作题目，年代比较久远。
一、Task 1 图表类型汇总与分析
分析：
1、继<剑5>“选址比较”类地图题后，剑桥系列真题首次发布“历史变迁”类地图题;
2、变化与比较结合的柱状图仍是重点;
3、饼状图与<剑7>出现的饼状图基本相同;
4、曲线条数登峰造极，难度大幅提高;
二、Task 1图表题剑8与剑9各题型比例
As is shown in the chart, the increase in the number of IELTS per month had a significant impact on the rapid increase in the number of IELTS candidates
与2011年真题相比，柱状图依旧占据主流题型。表格占比有所上升，线图、饼图比例稍有下降，但变动不大。图表类的占比总体来较前一年有所上升。地图题中的变迁题型出现了两次，其中在5月一次，11月一次。流程图题均在年中。
小作文解析
自剑9露面以来，很多同学都会来咨询如何使用这本新秘籍，今天就写作单科的新变化，给大家做一点简要的分析。
Test 1 孩子从小学开始学习外语
提问方式：Advantages and Disadvantages 机经同源题：07-10-20
Test 2无偿社区服务应成为高中生的必修课
提问方式：Agree or Disagree 机经同源题：07-05-12
Test 3 提高公众健康水平的方式
提问方式：Discuss 机经同源题：09-02-28
Test 4 语言的消亡
提问方式：Agree or Disagree 机经同源题：04-10-30/ 11-03-05
剑8
Test 1家长还是学校来培养孩子的社会责任意识
提问方式： Discuss
Test 2 科技改变人类的交流和互动方式
提问方式：In what way/ positive or negative
Test 3提高油价是减少污染和堵塞的最好方法
提问方式： Agree or disagree/ what other measures
Test 4 肥胖与健康
提问方式： Reason and solution
. 解析
对比剑8，不难看出，剑9收集的写作题目还是比较循规蹈矩的。从发问方式和素材上都没有过于晦涩难懂，均隶属于议论文范畴，且以单边倾向型巨多;从素材上而言，都是昔日考察过的熟悉题目。那么这就给考生以指向：在未来的考试中，大作文的出题方向较为平缓，2012年中难度较大的抽象题目(12-7-7/12-4-21)和剑桥系列的混合发问题目(剑7，p79/剑8，p54)的数量可能会下降，考生复习的重点应当是传统老题
Task 1 解析
首先，我们看看剑桥9在Task 1部分的题型分布：
继剑桥5中出现的选址地图之后，剑桥9在第一套题中出现了经典的历史地图对比题。在2012年的47次考试中，地图题出现了3次，加上剑桥9中的这一个地图的，我们完全可以相信，地图已经由之前不太主流的图形，逐渐成为考试的常规考题。因此，在备考过程中，地图需要引起考生的重视。其次，曲线图呈现了空前的难度，线条多达6条，这无疑增加了考生对于图表特征归纳和数据选取的难度，也更加体现了雅思出题方在图表题中一直关注的归纳、总结、选择和对比的考察度。至于剑桥9中的柱状图和饼状图，难度不大。建议考生参照剑桥7中考官的范文，效仿完成剑桥9中的饼状图和柱状图。
Task 2 解析：
四套Task2 的题目分别为：孩子从小学开始学习外语、无偿社区服务应成为高中生的必修课、提高公众健康水平的方式和语言的消亡。从题型方面来讲，四道题均为辩论类的考题，其中两道题是同意不同意类，一道双边讨论，一道优缺点讨论。从话题的类别来看，两道是教育类，一道文化类，另一道社会类。四道题目整体来说，“波澜不惊”。首先，四道考题都是在历史上常考不衰的骨灰级的考题，大部分学生在备考过程中应该都见过甚至是练习过这四道题目。其次，从题型上来看，剑桥9没有“混合类”的提问方式(剑桥8中第三篇)，四道题均为传统的题型，也是老师必讲，学生必掌握的三种题型。在话题方面，教育、社会和文化都过于平庸和常规。总的来说，剑桥9中给出的4各题目，并没有给我们带来任何的惊喜。我们也可以预知，在未来的考试中，传统的题型和话题仍然会成为主导。
2015年3月28日雅思写作范文
分析：
今天的题目属于老题修改。注意高亮的红色字体。要围绕题目中的这两个词去展开，而非单纯介绍电脑和手机的利弊。
Some educators have warned that the prevalence of mobile phones and the internet has a negative effect on adolescents’ academic ability. I agree with this view.
Firstly, the wide use of “Internet English” is regarded as the culprit of the declining writing skills. One obvious reason is that young adults may make some grammatical mistakes unconsciously because of the frequent use of improper abbreviations and punctuation on mobile devices, and this might pose a threat to their future career where a professional writing ability is required in most companies. Therefore, many linguists have expressed their concerns that the instant messaging and chatting on mobile phones might harm the ability of using formal written English.
Secondly, the poor reading proficiency can be put down to the frequent use of technologies as well. Compared to the older generation, young people today are cluttered with different gadgets, like iPad and iPhone. For instance, with easy access to wifi, they can surf the internet anywhere and anytime to follow the latest information of their idols in another country. However, most social networks deliver fragment and useless information, which not only steals time away from solitary reading but also undermine the ability to think independently. In my opinion, this phenomenon should be reversed as soon as possible because reading has a profound effect on a nation’s future.
In conclusion, while these electronic devices make the communication much more convenient, I am in the camp that they might affect young people’s academic performance negatively.
1.是否使用了正确的语法结构，比方说，动词时态一致、主谓一致、用词准确、词性(尤其是名词、动词、形容词)、名词单复数、冠词错误和介词错误。
2.句式是否有变化 (如各种从句的使用、分词结构等 )
3.使用了一定的词汇量 ( 如用同义词或词组来避免过多的重复)
4.标点、拼写没有错误。
5.在每段的主题句中都表明了这个段落的中心思想，所有扩展句都紧扣主题。
6.使用了过渡性词语，因而句子之间和段落之间都有逻辑性和条理性。
7.每一段话都得到充分的展开。
8.提供了足够的细节、例子或论据。
9.明确的观点。
10.每一段话都紧扣文章的主题。
雅思写作正文段的句型介绍
1.There are some good reasons for…(分析原因)two possible人民生活状况的改善原因有两点。首先，我们一直在贯彻执行改革开放政策。其次，国民经济正在迅速发展，而且出生率已经得到控制。
There are two reasons for the improvement in people’s living conditions.In the first place,we have been carrying out the reform and opening-up
policy.Secondly,there has been a rapid expansion of our national
economy .Further-more,the birth rate has been put under control.
2.My suggestions to deal with the problem are as follows.In the first place,…Secondly,…Finally… solvetacklerelieve
(提出建议)我对解决这个问题的建议如下。首先，迫在眉睫的是建立自然保护区。其次，有些濒临灭绝的珍稀野生动物应该收捕、人工喂养并繁殖。最后，对于捕猎珍稀野生动物的人必须严惩。
My suggestions to deal with the problem are as follows .To begin with,it is urgent to create nature reserves.Secondly,certain rare wild animals that are going to be
extinct should be collected,fed and reproduced artificially.Finally ,those who hunter them must be punished severely.
3.Different people have different opinions on this question.Some people believe that … Others problem.matter.argue that… Still others assert that…
(论述不同看法)人们对失败持有不同的态度。面对失败，有人能够经得起考验，从失败中汲取教训，并努力去完成他们下定决心要做的事情。然而，另一些人却丧失信心并退却了。
People differ in their attitudes towards failure.Faced with it ,some of them can stand up to it .draw useful lessons from it and try hard to fulfii what they are determined to do.Others,however,lose heart and give in.
4.It is important (nessary, urgent, difficult, easy, expensive, desirable, abvisable, convenient, comfortable)for sb. to do sth. (发表意见)人们希望建立更多的医院、购物中心、娱乐中心、电影院和其他公用设施来满足人民日益增长的需求。It is desirable to build more hospitals,shopping centres,recreation centres,cinemas and other public facilities to meet the growing needs of people.
5.As a popular saying goes “Everything has two sides.” (分析利弊)常言道：“事物总是一分为二的”。如今人们从科技发明中得到越来越多的好处。另一方面，科技进步也给我们带来了许多麻烦。现在许多国家的人民饱尝公害之苦。
As a popular saying goes, “Everything has two sides.” Now people (the public)are benefiting more and more from scientific and technological inventions. On the other hand,the progress of science and technology is bringing us a lot of trouble. People in many countries are srffering from public hazards.
6.For example, … (举例阐述)For instance, …Let’s take …for examlpe.就拿汽车为例。汽车不仅污染城市空气，而且使城市拥挤不堪。此外，汽车造成许多交通事故。汽车所产生的噪音使居住在街道两旁的居民日夜不得安宁。
Les’s take cars for example.They not only pollute the air in cities,but make them crowed.Furthermore,they carse a lot of traffic accidents. (…, they are
responsible for a lot of traffic accidents.) The noise made by cars disturbs the residents living on both sides of streets all day and night.
7.It is generally believed that …accepted (引证观点)thoughtheld普遍认为，在发达国家人口增长的主要原因与其说是出生率的上升，还不如说是由于医疗保健的改善的使死亡率下降了。
It is generally believed (=thought) that the chief reason for the increase in population in developed coutries is not so much the rise in birth rates as the decline in death rates as a result of the improvement in medical care.8. …causes (produces, brings about, leads to, results in …)
(因果关系)毫无疑问，需求的增长导致了价格的上涨。
There is no doubt that the increase in demand causes(results in/leads to) the rise in prices.
2015年3月12日雅思写作解析及语料库
政府类 + 环保类
Some people think that it is more important to plant more trees in open area which in towns and cities than build more housing. To what extend do agree or disagree?
作家立场：支持城市在开放地多植树。
布局图：
首段：背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场
二段：第一次支持立场
三段：第二次支持立场
四段：让步不同意观点的合理性 + 坚持我方立场
尾段：再次亮明观点
新东方网薛鹏思路拓展：
为何保护环境更加重要：
1. 植树有助于保护环境，这可以为人们提供更加健康的生存空间，因此，可以提高人们的健康指数和幸福感。
2. 保护环境也有助于实现资源的可持续性发展，同时，吸引更多的投资。例如，大连是一座花园城市，因为绿化和环保的成功，其吸引了更多的旅游投资，环保成为促进经济发展的重要因素之一。南京的梧桐树给人们提提供了一片阴凉和休闲的好去处。
3. 保护环境有助于为子孙后代营造更加健康的生存环境。
新东方网薛鹏原创范文赏析：
首段：背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场
The government, as a decision-maker, is the representative of citizen’s basic interests. In this sense, every governmental policy will inevitably exert a profound influence on the further prosperity of the nation. People differ greatly in their views as to whether or not it is more preferable for the government to put more efforts into planting trees in the open area of a city instead of building more houses. To
voice my opinion，city dwellers will benefit more from the improvement of the city environment, although the value of new construction cannot be underestimated.
薛鹏点评：首段个性开篇;立场鲜明。
二段：第一次支持作家立场
The first convincing argument why beautifying the city is superior to the establishment of new houses is that a cleaner and healthier city environment can provide city residents with a better living space，which would be conducive to one’s health. For example, in my city, increasing number of trees have been planting
per year, thus, many of us can breathe the fresh air and enjoy the closeness to nature, many senior citizens enjoy taking a stroll in a woods around South Lake. Therefore, the multiplication of new plants has greatly decreased the possibility of infecting respiratory diseases.
三段：第二次支持作家立场
Here is a good example providing strong support to my stand. Why environmental protection is much more important in comparison with economic development is that eco-friendly policies will benefit a city or a nation in the long run. The issue reminds me of a clean and beautiful city Dalian, which is embraced by a rich variety of green trees or plants. As the former mayor said, Dalian will never develop economy at the cost of hurting the environment. Much to our encouragement, eco-friendly environment attract more business men and enterprises to make huge investment in this eco-friendly city.
薛鹏点评：城市植树对于城市发展的利好
四段：让步不同意观点的合理性
Indeed，I have to concede that in some metropolitan cities in the world , it is irrational and unfeasible to expect the local governments to give priority to planting trees. By contrast，in order to ease the pressure of housing shortage，proper land resources should be allocated the construction of new infrastructure or commercial buildings. However, I want to rebut that it is more viable for most cities to attach importance to the amelioration of the environment.
薛鹏点评：让步原题观点的合理性 + 坚持我方立场
尾段：再次亮明观点
In a nutshell, I re-affirm my view that planting more trees is clearly a worthwhile endeavor helping to protect the environment. The role of the government in environmental conservation is challenging yet inescapable. However, as for those
densely populated cities, governments of all levels should have their own strategies of developing the cities.
薛鹏点评：尾段再次强调我方立场。
雅思写作常见错误总结
细节一：标点“独行侠”问题
按英文书写规定，标点应紧挨着它的附着意群进行标注，与另一个意群要以一个字符的空格隔开。
但是在实际作文中经常发现学生部论什么标点都会当作一个单词来对待，即标点前后都空下空格，结果给人以标点满天飞的感觉，影响了文章的美感。
First , energy and other natural resources have become more abundant , not less so , since the book ‘ The Limits to Growth ’ was published by a group of scientists .
可以看出，标点像独行侠一样出现在句子中，会给人以喧宾夺主的感觉。所以大家平时练习时就要注意正确书写标点。
细节二：句首单词首字母大小写问题
通常情况下，同学们只要感觉是个句子就都把句首单词首字母大写了，但是在实际写作中情况如何呢?下面我们来看个例子。
Some corpora attempt to cover the language as a whole; others are extremely selective.
分号的作用是对关系非常紧密的句子进行分隔，所以后一个句子只是前一个的附属，并不是一个独立的新句子，所以首字母仍然要小写的。这个现象同样适用于冒号、破折号、括号。
细节三：书写过于随意
每个人都有自己的书写习惯，但是雅思考试毕竟是要给外国人看的，所以大家如果能够在书写习惯上贴近老外，肯定会给人以亲切的卷面印象。比如不要书写得过于密集，以免让
人看不清单词，影响理解。也不要写得过于稀疏而让人无法在eye span 范围内看到完整的意群，从而影响考官阅读。字不要写得太大，也不要太小。尽量不要连写以免造成l,r,n,m 等混淆不清，造成考官阅卷障碍。
细节四：写作格式混乱
英文写作格式主要有齐头式和缩进式。通常齐头式因为顶头书写且段与段之间空出一行，所以会给人以整洁的感觉，小编也比较推荐大家使用这种格式。缩进式和中文的写作格式相似，即每一段的开头句缩进，但是段落之间没有空行，所以不是很受欢迎。经常在作文中看到同学们用的是“齐头式+ 缩进式”，即段首句缩进+段落之间空行，给人以不伦不类的感觉，同学们一定要注意。
细节五：总结段缺失
很多学生在作文时因为时间不充裕无法写出总结段，于是给阅卷者每完成任务的感觉。小编建议考生尽量要写最后的summary，无论是task1还是task2。因为同学们可以利用最后一段来点题、归纳，这样可以最大限度地避免因为语言功底不深而导致的文章结构不明晰，说服力不强等问题，即用形式来弥补内容上无法克服的困难。
另外，因为开头结尾段是我们平时练习得比较熟练的部分，所以我们很容易就搞定的，为什么放着拿分的部分不写呢?!
细节六：分段过多或者过少
大家可以设想一下，当你拿着一篇只有一段的很长的文章时，是不是会有很晕的感觉?!尤其是当我们的写作能力有限，文字表达没有吸引力时，怎么能让考官有耐心看完你的文章呢?再设想一下，当你看的文章分成很多的段落，而你的论证能力有限，费力半天劲也写不出几个句子，会不会每段都给人以流水账的感觉呢?所以，对于考试作文，要想既用形式掩饰内容的不足，又能给考官以好印象，那么请把task1段落划分控制在3-5段，task2控制在4-6段，既能体现段落分配清晰，突出自己要表达的内容，又能避免论证太过分散而中心不明确。
雅思写作常见语法错误整理
一、不一致
所谓不一致不光指主谓不一致，还包括了数的不一致、时态不一致以及代词不一致等。比如：When one have money, he can do what he want to.
分析：one是第三人称单数，因此本句的have应改为has; want应改为wants, 本句是典型的主谓不一致。
改为：When one has money, he can do what he wants (to do).
二、修饰语错位
英语与汉语不同，同一个修饰语置于句子不同的位置，句子的含义可能引起变化。对于这一点考生们往往没有引起足够的重视，因而造成了不必要的误解。比如：I believe I can do it well and I will better know the world outside the campus.
分析：better位置不当，应置于句末。
三、句子不完整
在口语中，交际双方可借助手势语气上下文等，不完整的句子完全可以被理解。可是书面语就不同了，句子结构不完整会令意思表达不清，这种情况常常在主句写完以后，作者又想加些补充说明时发生。比如：There are many ways to know the society. For example by TV, radio, newspaper and so on.
分析：本句后半部分"For example by TV, radio, newspaper and so on.”不是一个完整的句子，仅为一些不连贯的词语，不能独立成句。
改为：There are many ways to know society, for example, by TV, radio, and newspaper.
四、悬垂修饰语
所谓悬垂修饰语是指句首的短语与后面句子的逻辑关系混乱不清。比如：At the age of ten, my grandfather died. 这句中"at the age of ten"只写出十岁时，但没有说明“谁”
十岁时，按一般推理不可能是my grandfather, 如果我们把这个悬垂修饰语改得明确一点，读者或考官在读句子时就不会误解了。
改为：When I was ten, my grandfather died.
五、词性误用
“词性误用”常表现为：介词当动词用;形容词当副词用;名词当动词用等。比如：None can negative the importance of money.
分析：negative系形容词，误作动词。
改为：None can deny the importance of money.
六、指代不清
指代不清主要讲的是代词与被指代的人或物关系不清，或者先后所用的代词不一致。比如：Mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted her to be her bridesmaid.
读完上面这一句话，读者无法明确地判断两位姑娘中谁将结婚，谁将当伴娘。如果我们把易于引起误解的代词所指代的对象加以明确，意思就一目了然了。这个句子可改为：Mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted my sister to be her bridesmaid.
七、不间断句子
这个错误的出现受中文意识的影响很大。很多考生在写句子时，句子之间缺乏有效的连接成分。甚至，有的句子写的比较中式化。比如：There are many ways we get to know the outside world.
分析：这个句子包含了两层完整的意思：“there are many ways”以及“we get to know the outside world”。简单地把它们连在一起就不妥当了。
改为：There are many ways for us to learn about the outside world. 或：There are many ways through which we can become acquainted with the outside world.
八、措词毛病
学生在写作中没有养成良好的推敲，斟酌句子中所选用词的习惯。大部分考生随心所欲，拿来就用，所以作文中用词不当的错误随处可见。比如：The increasing use of chemical obstacles in agriculture also makes pollution.
分析：显然，考生把obstacles“障碍”，“障碍物”误作substance“物质”了。另外“the increasing use(不断增加的使用)”应改为“abusive use(滥用)”。
改为：The abusive use of chemical substances in agriculture also causes/leads to pollution.
九、累赘
写句子没有一个多余的词;写段落没有一个无必要的句子。能用单词的不用词组;能用词组的不用从句或句子。比如：In spite of the fact that he is lazy, I like him.
本句的“the fact that he is lazy”系同谓语从句，我们按照上述“能用词组的不用从句”可以改为：In spite of his laziness, I like him.
比如：For the people who are diligent and kind, money is just the thing to be used to buy the thing they need.
整个句子可以大大简化为：Diligent people use money only to buy what they need.
十、不连贯
不连贯是指一个句子前言不对后语，或是结构上不畅通，这也是考生常犯的毛病。比如：The fresh water, it is the most important things of the earth.
分析：the fresh water与逗号后的it不连贯，it与things在数方面不一致。
上述就是雅思写作常见语法扣分点整理，低级语法错误是可以避免的，不断地练习和改进中，相信大家可以取得理想的成绩。
雅思写作中如何使句型多样化
some people claim that the disadvantages of the car are more than t he advantages, do you agree or disagree? 范文1 the birth of cars have made an enormous change to our life.in th e past,we travel from one place to another only by foot,nowaday,car s can do it .its goes withour saying that the invention of cars br ing great benefit to all of us.but as proverb goes:no garden withou t weeds.car is not exception. owing a car has a lot of advantages.for one thing,car provide us th e most convient way of transportation.we can get around freely withou t spenting a lot of time.emotionally,i always found driving is so ex citing.for another,its the comfortable to drive a car.In winter.driver s always can stay warm and dry even in rainy whether,in addition,dri vers are usually safe in their cars when they are out at night. Cars bring the human merits,their side-effects gradually come to th e surface.firstly,to run a car need a lot o f oil,which is gettin g l ess and less.the increasing number of cars contribute the lacking o f energy.secondlly,as more and more cars are used,the traffic ecpeci ally in bi g cities is getting heaver and heavier,whic h lead to th e serious social problem--traffic jam.in addition,the inceasing number s of cars ,which excaust sent a huge quantities of carbon monoxid e into atmosphere.it make the air o f cities unbreathabe,it strip peop le contact with frensh air. therefore, new energy should be explored to replace the oil so tha t our envionmental pollution can be avioded .and the strick law shou ld be issued to keep the numbers of cars under control.thus,our heav ier traffic can be solluted! 范文2 Private cars vs Public traffic As traffic problems become more and more serious in many cities o f developed and developin g countries, their governments have to try h ard and loads of money and energy have been spent to deal with the m. Firstly, it is not efficient for the commuters to use their privat e cars to and back from their workplaces. Occasionally we can see t
雅思7分大作文范文批改和解析 距离雅思写作7分你大概还有3个步骤要走，是的，不是谁都可以轻轻松松活动雅思高分的。今天给大家带来了雅思7分大作范文批改和解析,希望能够帮助到大家，一起来学习吧。 雅思7分大作范文批改和解析 雅思写作提高第一步：结构(5.0 - 5.5) 问题：出国留学的优点(the advantages of disadvantages of study abroad) 同学：One reason for those who decide to go overseas to get a higher degree is that they believe they can get better education in certain fields. That is to say, different universities in different countries have their specialized courses and rich resources can be provided according to their needs and requirements. Another reason is that they can learn a foreign language in a more efficient way. There is no denying that living in an all-round English environment and being affected by local culture make people quick learners. 解析：出国留学和高学历完全是两回事(出去读初中和高中都算出国);出国就是better education，在国内就不是better? 出
二.雅思图表作文 1.企业垃圾(线性图) 题目:The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years. 范文:The line graph compares three companies in terms of their waste output between the years 2000 and 2015. It is clear that there were significant changes in the amounts of waste produced by all three companies shown on the graph. While companies A and B saw waste output fall over the 15-year period, the amount of waste produced by company C increased considerably. In 2000, company A produced 12 tonnes of waste, while companies B and C produced around 8 tonnes and 4 tonnes of waste material respectively. Over the following 5 years, the waste output of companies B and C rose by around 2 tonnes, but the figure for company A fell by approximately 1 tonne. From 2005 to 2015, company A cut waste production by roughly 3 tonnes, and company B reduced its waste by around 7 tonnes. By contrast, company C saw an increase
【最新整理，下载后即可编辑】 范文的思路好了。这样好的东西，可惜不是我整理的，是一个叫landfish姑娘收集的，厉害！ v105 Some people claim that the disadvantages of the car are more than the advantages,do you ag ree or disagree? 范文1 The birth of cars has made an enormous change to our life. In the past, we travelled fro m one place to another only by foot, nowadays, cars can do the same job . It goes withou r saying that the invention of cars bring great benefits to all of us. but as an ancient prove rb goes, no garden without weeds. Car is no exception. Owing a car has a lot of advantages. For one thing, car provides us the most convenient wa y of transportation. we can get around freely without spenting a lot of time. Emotionally, I always found driving is so exciting. For another , it is comfortable to drive a car.in winte r.Drivers always can stay warm and dry even in rainy weather .In addition, drivers are saf er in their cars when they are out at night. While cars bring the human a large number of merits ,their side-effects gradually come t o the surface .Firstly, running a car needs a lot of oil,which is getting less and less.The incre asing number of cars contributes the lack of energy.Secondlly,as more and more cars are util zed,the traffic ecpecially in big cities is getting heaver and heavier,which leads to the seriou s traffic jam.Moreover,the inceasing numbers of cars ,which excaust sent a huge quantitie s of carbon monoxide into atmosphere.It makes the air of cities unbreathable, it strips peop le’s contact with fresh air. Therefore, the new energy should be explored to replace the oil so that our envionmental p ollution can be avioded , and the strick law should be issued to keep the numbers of cars un der control. Thus, our heavier traffic can be solved!
G类雅思7分作文范文 Topic Some people say that older people should live with their adult children. Others say that they shouldn't. Which do you think is good practice. TEXT（257 Words） One of the topics in daily life is whether or not the older people should live with their adult children. My answer is the question is that it is better for them not to. Firstly, people of different ages have different ways of life. The old people like a quiet, peaceful and regular life whereas the young prefer noises, activities and unrestrained enjoyment. If they live together, old may feel that they are always disturbed and the young may feel that they are often handicapped. Secondly, people of different generations have different views and values. What is quite normal to the parents may seem to be old-fashioned or wrong to the children. When they live together, they may disagree on matters ranging from minor domestic matters to national and international issues. Consequently, family life may be unpleasant or even unbearable to both the old and the young. Last but not the least, adult children, like their parents, love independence and freedom, but their parents still take them as children and unintentionally interfere in their affairs. The situation will be worse if the adult children are already married. In this case, the children have already built a new and closed world and any outside interference may lead to conflicts. From what has been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that if the parents and their adult children do not live together, both the old and the young can enjoy complete independence and freedom, live a life they like, and keep intact their affections for each other 雅思范文：电脑是否现代教育所必须？ 成因 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Present a written argument or case to an educated non-specialist audience on the following topic. Are computers an essential feature of modern education? What subjects can be better taught using computers? Are there aspects of a good education that cannot be taught using computers? You should write at least 250 words. 提示 You should you your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Topic words: Computers Essential features / absolutely necessary Modern education / good education Task words: There are no specific task words. Three separate questions are given. Questions I should ask myself: Do I think computers are essential for education? What subjects do I think are best be learnt using computers? What do I think are the features of a good education, and are computers important in it?
雅思图表作文TASK1精讲精练
雅思图表作文TASK1精讲精练 A理论部分： 雅思小作文概论 1、文章结构：主要分三部分：i。introductory sentence；ii。body paragraph；iii。Concluding sentence 具体讲：第一段introductory sentence只要写一句话，交待图形（如the line graph, pie chart等等），描述对象（如图表描述的是the number of tourists visiting England），地点（如the US, the UK等）以及时间（如between 1988 and 1997等等）；另外要注意的就是第一段不能和图表上方已给的句子太过相似！否则，会失分的! 第二部分一般写1~3段，这要视情况而定。这部分主要就是对比不同的数据，如相似或相同的数据；某个数据是另一个数据的2倍；某个数据所占比例最大或最小等等。 最后一段concluding sentence也只要写一句话，
主要是总结图表的整个趋势。 2。文章的效果。很多学生会发现小作文的例文特别简单（特别是剑桥书里提供的）。原因很简单，这个report的目的就是要让university lecturer了解某个事物的发展趋势，因此写出来的文章必须结构清晰、易懂，绝对不能太复杂，也不要把每个数据都描写出来，只要描写有代表性的，重要的数据即可。 以下为雅思小作文的四个基本步骤 第一步：改写题目 经过同义词转换在短短的1分钟内就写好作文的第一段。 举例:The graph below shows the percentage of people unable to find work in three major countries from 1983 to 1992. 题目中划线的单词都能够进行同义转换: graph—figure, show—illustrate, percentage—proportion, major—key, from…to…—between…and…, 第二步：分析时态
为方便大家的雅思备考，北外网课第一时间准备了2017年2月25日雅思写作真题范文，由雅思教师撰写：探索太空OR关注地球，帮助雅思备考者分析写作思路，掌握写作技能。跟随北外网课长期学习能够有效提高写作水平，更多雅思备考信息和学习资料，外语在线学习平台北外网课实时为大家更新。欢迎关注。
Some people think the government should spend money to look for life on other planets, others think it is a waste of public money when the earth has so many unsolved problems. Discuss these both sides and give your own opinion 探索太空属于科技类话题，同学们写作的难点主要在于相关词汇可能积累较少，北外网课给出了一些关键词，一起看一下。 KEY WORD look for life on other planets ： look for aliens search for extraterrestrial intelligence exploring outer space / space exploration invest in space agencies and programs prioritize spending on the exploration of space Intro. P.（导入） Space exploration is costly, and many people argue that it should be halted since the gains from searching for extraterrestrial intelligence has few immediate benefits, and we should care for our own planet more. However, others support the outer space programmes for the sake of future tremendous gains and human nature.
满分雅思大作文赏析 对于雅思写作的复习，一些雅思大作文范文，例文还是很有必要自己观摩的，为此小编特收集整理了这篇雅思大作文九分例文点评，分享给大家。希望考生能从中总结出对自己有用的知识点。 满分雅思大作文赏析 范文第一段： C h i l d r e n w h o g r o w u p i n f a m i l i e s w h i c h a r e s h o r t o f m o n e y a r e b e t t e r p r e p a r e d t o d e a l w i t h t h e p r o b l e m s o f a d u l t l i f e t h a n c h i l d r e n w h o a r e b r o u g h t u p b y w e a l t h y p a r e n t s.T o w h a t e x t e n t d o y o u a g r e e o r d i s a g r e e? S o m e f e e l t h a t t h e c h i l d r e n o f l o w i n c o m e f a m i l i e s a r e b e t t e r e q u i p p e d t o d e a l w i t h d i f f i c u l t i e s p o s e d b y t h e r e a l w o r l d w h e n t h e y g r o w u p a n d t h e y a l s o b e l i e v e t h e p r i v i l e g e d c h i l d r e n o f w e a l t h y f a m i l i e s a r e l e s s f i t t o d e a l w i t h t h e s e d i f f i c u l t i e s .T h e i m p l i c a t i o n s a n d v e r a c i t y o f t h i s a r g u m e n t s e e m s e l f-e v i d e n t,b u t i n f a c t r e q u i r e c l o s e r e x a m i n a t i o n.(58w o r d s) 名师点评：
雅思写作Task1曲线图考官范文(1) 这是一篇雅思写作Task1曲线图考官范文。认真研读一定的雅思范文及作文模板可以帮助我们检验自己的写作水平，并能很好地吸收和应用优秀范文里的优秀内容。 The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in several employment sectors of the republic of Freedonia. Write a report for a university teacher describing the information shown.
Sample Answer: The provided line graphs compare the employment history of men and women in 1975 and 1995 dividing in six major sectors namely: manufacturing, communications, finance/ banking, wholesale & retail trade, non-defence public sectors and defence public sectors. As is observed from the given illustration, significant changes have been made in women's employment and women appear to have made remarkable improvements in almost the entire job sectors in Freedonia and in some sectors women went well ahead of men. Initially in 1975, men were notably ahead of women in every sector of employment. For example, in communication sector about 260 men worked against 220 women in every thousand employees. Twenty years later, though the number of men remained unchanged, the number of women rose to over 550 in one thousand. A similar trend can be seen in the wholesale and retail trade sector, where the number of women rose from about 550 to almost 800 in every 1000 employees of this sector two decades later. The number of men in this sector remained stable over the period, at around 700 / thousand.
雅思大作文范文三篇雅思大作文写 正题： ESSAY分为三部分： 1.Introduction 2.Body 3.Conclusion 一篇学术性论文当中，这三部分是必须要有的，同理在考试中才能得高分。 那么什么是introduction呢，之前看书说是把题目用替换词带入照抄，后来发现这是傻瓜式写法，对于要求写作7分以上的同学并不适用。真正的introduction是“present your viewpoint”那么怎样来present呢？继续。 第一步：lead-in background information即导入背景信息。 看这个例子：
Some people think visitors to other countries should imitate local custom and behaviors. Some people degree. They think the host country should wele culture different. Discuss the two views，and give your own opinion.. 这个论文题目里， tourism 就是一个背景信息，所以我们introduction里第一句就该来介绍或者叫导入背景信息，即 tourism的信息。例如： Tourism has became an indispensable part in our modern world.或者Tourism is gradually considered to be a hot topic 第二步：narrow down information即从大背景信息里提出你要去论证的方面。还是上面给出的题目，你要narrow down出来的就是：“people show more concern to their two views. Some of them think visitors to others nations should imitate local custom and behaviors，but others argue that the host nation should wele various cultures” 第三步：your viewpoint即给出你自己的立场。例如上题你就 可以说：“As far as I am concerned，I side with the former”
Task：Some people think getting old is entirely bad. However, others think that life of the elderly in modern world is much easier than in the past. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. 思路解析： 2016年雅思收官之战的作文来了一道新题，问当今社会老年人的生活是不是很 糟糕?说是新题，因为本题以前从未原题出现过，但关于年龄的话题却不缺少。 比如2010年7月10日“年轻人是否适合担任政府要职”，2012年3月10日“老 龄化现象的原因及解决方法”，2012年3月31日“年轻人和老年人谁的价值更 高?”，2013年6月8日“政府是否应该对老年人养老提供财政支持?”，2015 年1月1日“年轻人当领导，行不行?”，2015年4月11日“老年人与年轻人 争夺工作职位，怎么办?”等等。 本题需要论证的对立观点是：年老很糟糕 vs. 当今社会年老没有那么糟糕。那 么，变老有哪些坏处呢?首先，当然是身体条件没有以前好了，甚至可能出现多 种疾病(物质层面);其次，不工作了，与人的联系少了，心里可能会感觉孤单， 甚至感觉没有价值了(精神层面);最后，变老后对社会的依赖程度更高，给社会 增加了压力(社会层面)。那么，这些问题在当今社会是不是得到了解决呢?首先， 医疗条件的改善有助于保持老年人的身体状况;互联网的出现有助于缓解老年人 的心理孤单问题;物质水平的提高也降低了老年人给社会造成的压力。如此观之， 现代社会老年人的生活的确容易多了，但我的观点是：外部条件只是改善老年人 生活的一个方面，最重要的还是老年人自己要积极调整心态，努力适应退休后的 生活，从而过一个更幸福更祥和的晚年。 Sample answer： Getting old is a natural process that nobody really likes. When you reach a certain age, your physical conditions will inevitably deteriorate, and you may suffer from various kinds of diseases. When you retire, you will feel isolated because your previous work contacts may be all gone, then you may feel useless to the world. Furthermore, when you get too old, you’ ll have to rely heavily on the support from others, either physically or emotionally, and your life will become a great pressure to your family and the whole society as well. For all these bad things about getting old, many people argue that the life of the elderly today is much easier than in the past. In the first place, medical advances nowadays have made it possible for the old people to stay sound and healthy for quite a long while even after they retire. Diseases such as diabetes, hypertension and heart attack which might have
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