A letter of asking recommendation
23 Renming Road
Ningbo
Zhejiang
P.R.China
March 3,2009
Mr Smith
Dean of English department
Zhejiang Ocean University
15 Wenhua Road
Mr Smith:
Would you consider taking a moment to write a letter of recommendation on my behalf?I have applied for admission to Huadong Normal University’s graduate program and I would appreciate your recommendation.
I am intended to specialize in English if I am enrolled in that university ,and it requests my scores and performance in the college.I think you are my most respectful teacher and also learn my good performance concerning English.
Please call me at 150******** if you need any further information
about my study.Here are my address:
23 Renming Road
Ningbo
Zhejiang
P.R.China
I am eager to further my study and I believe that I will be better-performed in that university.Your good recommendation will help me enroll in that university.Thank you for your confidence in my ability and willingness to help me.
Sincerely,
Merlin
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23 Renming Road
Ningbo
Zhejiang
P.R.China
March 3,2009
Mr Smith
Dean of English department
Zhejiang Ocean University
15 Wenhua Road
Mr Smith:
Would you consider taking a moment to write a letter of recommendation on my behalf?I have applied for admission to Huadong Normal University’s graduate program and I would appreciate your recommendation.
I am intended to specialize in English if I could be am enrolled in that university ,and it requests my scores and performance s in the college.I think you are my most respectful teacher and also learn my good performance concerning English.
Please call me at 150******** if you need any further information about my study.Here are my address:
23 Renming Road
Ningbo
Zhejiang
P.R.China
I am eager to further my study and I believe that I will be better-performed in that university.Your good recommendation will help me enroll in that university.Thank you for your confidence in my ability
and willingness to help me.
Sincerely,
Merlin Comments: This piece is well-structured and the language is coherent and cohesive,but you should pay more attention to those small mistakes.
Revised by the teacher
A letter of asking recommendation
23 Renmin Road
Ningbo
Zhejiang
P.R.China
March 3, 2009
Mr. Smith
Dean of English department
Zhejiang Ocean University
15 Wenhua Road
Dear Mr. Smith:
Would you consider taking a moment to write a letter of recommendation on my behalf? I have applied for admission to Huadong Normal University’s graduate program and I would appreciate your recommendation.
I am intended to specialize in English if I am enrolled in that university, and it requests my scores and performance in the college. I think you are my most respectful teacher and also learn know my good performance concerning English.
Please call me at 150******** if you need any further information about my study. Here are is my address:
23 Renming Road
Ningbo
Zhejiang
P.R.China
I am eager to further my study and I believe that I will be better-performed in that university. Your good recommendation will help me enroll in that university. Thank you for your confidence in my ability and willingness to help me.
Sincerely,
Merlin
Teacher’s comments and suggestions:
This piece of writing is quite satisfactory in spite of a few grammatical mistakes. The format, the semantic structure and the language are appropriate. Your score for this assignment is 85.